Victor Buhagiar Poet Pantoum

Stifling a Giggle

Nonchalantly they practised skating artistically,
Both are considered champions in their own right, 
At one point they separated, each to his own end
When he suddenly fell, unbecomingly on the ice.

Both are considered champions in their own right
One could see the surprise on her face.
When he suddenly fell unbecomingly on the ice.
Hands went to her dainty mouth to stifle a giggle.

One could see the surprise on her face,
At one point they separated, each to his own end
Hands went to her dainty mouth to stifle a giggle.
Nonchalantly they practised skating artistically.

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Sally Eslinger December 19, 2022 at 6:16 AM I found this poem quite delightful! And, yes, the imagery is so real that I too had to giggle! I love this form of poetry! Thank you for this poem, for giving my day such a happy start, hugs4 U Victor!

David Smith December 9, 2022 at 9:30 AM Laughter is the sound we should all be hoping for if we want a better world. That and music to sooth the savage beast. Perfect poem for any time of year but more so leading into the silly season. Happy holidays David in NZ

Linda Alice Fowler December 7, 2022 at 6:39 AM I'm glad she felt a giggle and not anger Victor. Nice pantoum. hugs :)

Charles Messina December 7, 2022 at 2:14 AM Oops (lol) it happens to the best of 'em every once in a while.

Valsa George December 6, 2022 at 2:58 AM Only after a few fall, one will become an expert. I have seen many people laughing when another falls down. It could be an innocent gesture, but quite provoking too. You have handled this tough poetic form with much perfection.

Evelyn Judy Buehler December 5, 2022 at 10:46 PM Even champions take a tumble now and then! I love this amusing, lighthearted, fantastic pantoum. ;)

Sara Kendrick December 5, 2022 at 1:47 PM Good flow and rhythm in this one. They are not so easy to write but you have done it seamlessly. Sara

Jennifer Proxenos December 5, 2022 at 9:13 AM I agree with EVE, such excellent creative imaginative thoughts. We can only feel blessed that we are within a group or troupe that exchanges their poetic, artistic writes with one another. Blessings and hugs, JENNIFER

Eve Roper December 5, 2022 at 8:19 AM Imagery so vivid. Enjoyed reading. Many blessings

L Milton Hankins December 5, 2022 at 8:14 AM I like this a lot, Victor. This captures the essence of the unrhymed Pantoum, and I enjoyed it immensely.

Tom Cunningham December 5, 2022 at 7:00 AM Lol reminds of of my first attempt on the ice, crashed to earth with a bump. Tom

Vijay Pandit December 5, 2022 at 5:49 AM A scene well conveyed, Victor. I can see the reaction on her face.

Tania Kitchin December 5, 2022 at 3:25 AM Victor, a well penned poem, that would be me both giggling and falling on the ice!

Speaks Volumes December 5, 2022 at 2:22 AM Victor this is terrific. I think Pantoum is the hardest of all to master and you did so well. Its an excellent poem.

Anne-Lise Andresen December 5, 2022 at 2:00 AM - Poor thing... he turned both yellow and blue on his bum... great writing, Victor :) - hugs