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Stepmother Stance

Dark chest inhale your bite exhale its shadow wings that twisted pierce like barbwire cover your heart black feet on glass I watch my spine still touch me A raven cries give me my nights, give me my nights, give me my nights (I do not have a bad stepmother. I was just personifying the raven's darkness calling her stepmother. Just the metaphor. )

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Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 5/28/2025 8:04:00 PM

This spellbinding poem comprises a masterful personification, Paige. I enjoyed it a lot. :)

Bj Legros Kelley

Date: 5/28/2025 6:01:00 PM

Oh, so glad to see that this is not true, glad you didn't have a bad stepmother! Your poem is thought provoking, ravens are such ill omens of darkness in writings of metaphors, and you did this well!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/27/2025 11:31:00 PM

Ouch. Did you have a bad stepmother? My mother was accused of this but it turns out the stepdaughter was mentally ill and almost died of a brain tumor. So when they finally did MRI of my stepsisters brain , everyone could understand my mother was innocent. My stepsister was doing horrible things and everyone outside our household perceived her as being guiltless

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 5/30/2025 12:19:00 PM

Thanks for the explanation, Paige.

Paige Hind
Date: 5/28/2025 10:37:00 AM

No I don't have a bad stepmother. The raven is my stepmother, lol. Just a personification. The raven didn't seem like a mother, so I just called it stepmother.

Sotto Poet

Date: 5/27/2025 4:34:00 PM

The wave of discomfort that swept over me while reading this was wonderful. Both the atmosphere and the tone are rather powerful... In reading your last sentences, I felt those lumps, again, Paige

Anonomus Scorpio

Date: 5/27/2025 6:49:00 AM

I very much enjoyed the feelings of unease that washed over me as I read this!! Abstract, ominous, but best of all the right amount of dark. A fav for me my friend!! A.S.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/27/2025 6:40:00 AM

intense in both setting and mood...i got the bumps through your last lines, paige...incredible!

Ink Empress

Date: 5/27/2025 1:50:00 AM

Ah that ending, is echoing through my thoughts in a very hypnotic manner. I love your title which is unique, as unique as your word weaving. Always a pleasure reading you poetic soul! Sending you light today and always