Stargazer

Under 65 degree starry, onyx blanket
Containment of quarter moon identity

A whimsically soothing song exuded
In muffled taps & Prohibition era lyric

In the distance,
Snow-capped mountains reflecting lunar clarity
Off its tips of freedom

As we lay on recycled steel hood,
Made in 1950s USA, when it mattered,
Her silhouetted fingertips released from my right arm
While insistently looking towards stratosphere’s vocal chord

“Can’t it be like this forever?
Oh, how I want to just make love to the stars.
Become one with Orion while riding
On Sagittarius’s arrow”

“What about our stars?”, he softly questioned.

“I’d like to be your never-ending shooting star.
To ride on blue moon’s comet, by your side”

Cricket whispers manhandled his romantic clef
Mother Nature’s afterglow, upon her ears, fallen deaf

Inherent waxy build-up from illicit tongue,
She pat his shoulders like a dog
Being taught his first lesson

Her eyes, still sky high.

“Sigh, I like how you think.
You’re such a nice friend.
You’re going to make a woman so happy one day.
I hope to meet a guy just like you.”

As her eyes sighed with a powerful lack of substance
Into the arms of Leo,
A slammed car door supplants the reverberation of the car’s V8 engine.

He confidently turns back the hands of time.

Reversal gears become his new tune

“If you get lost going home, follow the stars.”

As he pulls away with majestic, amplified lyrics
Of Whitesnake’s “Here I go Again”

Going down the only road he’s ever known

While she stands in fraudulent gasps of shock,
Looking back up to the stars in blank wonder

As he accelerates into a new page in his book
Closing his chapter with wondrous questions

“Why would I taste your starlight?

When you never believed in our constellation?”

©Drake J. Eszes
It’s good to gaze at the stars and make wishes. But, be careful what you wish for. For Earth has its own gifts…

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 12/22/2013 7:09:00 AM
A unique acceleration of thoughts and emotions. The thought of stars is enough to run our imaginations wild with wonder, excitement and surprise as I find with this one.
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Date: 12/22/2013 9:24:00 AM
Hi & nice to meet you, Wendy. Thank you very, very much! =D
Date: 9/12/2013 6:08:00 PM
Brilliant!!
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Date: 9/12/2013 6:10:00 PM
Thanks!
Date: 9/2/2013 5:22:00 PM
Waiting for a new one, so I came back to read some of my favorites.. “Why would I taste your starlight? When you never believed in our constellation?” Is that perfection or what???? Amazing, Drake!!! It lights up the sky!
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Date: 9/3/2013 10:48:00 AM
=D quite right, Eileen. I wouldn't call it perfection. I just call it honest. :) Thank you so much, again! You're friggin awesome!
Date: 8/8/2013 7:15:00 AM
Wow! 1 wish I could send those last lines to someone I loved who ditched me. He walked away, and it took me a year... But, the heart mends itself. Nola
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Date: 8/8/2013 8:17:00 AM
Yes, it does. It never forgets, but it does heal. Thank you so much, Nola! :)
Date: 8/7/2013 8:43:00 AM
beautiful poem, i so enjoyed this one, the imagery of the stars, again i love, a beautiful starry night, always hoping for a shooting star, yes to wish upon, , well done, blessings sueellen
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Date: 8/7/2013 9:25:00 AM
Thanks so much, Sue-Ellen! I do too. I love me a good shooting star. I need to see the stars again. =D
Date: 7/27/2013 3:06:00 PM
I love the imagery and flow of this. Well done :)
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Date: 7/27/2013 3:18:00 PM
Thanks so much, Rachel! =)
Date: 7/21/2013 11:43:00 PM
O, my goodness! I don't believe her!! Obviously she's "spacy"! LOL I can hear the v8 engine zip.. Fantastic writing, Drake..romance, humor, history for good measure! Well done as usual. Always, Annalise
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Date: 7/22/2013 5:54:00 AM
"Spacy", LOL!!!!! Too cute. Thanks so much, Annalise! =)
Date: 7/20/2013 12:16:00 AM
Drake did you school in Austrailia? your poem forms are very like what they teach all through school. Nice job on putting a reader there thinking about who they want wanted, and adding the year for the hood and the bands song with the name of the song smooth..
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Date: 7/20/2013 2:06:00 AM
Funny enough, I've never been to Australia. That's a 1st I've been asked that. I was born & raised in New Jersey. I just happen to be in the West Coast now. :) Thanks so much, Ruth! =D
Date: 7/17/2013 10:12:00 PM
Man, do I love Whitesnake... \m/ I enjoyed this. Thanks for the feedback :)
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Date: 7/17/2013 10:15:00 PM
I do too!!! :) Hi, Melani! Very cool of you to stop by here! You're very welcome!
Date: 7/15/2013 6:59:00 PM
Awesome! Gripping verse! Thanks for reading my work by the way. I really appreciate your visits. Always, Laura
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Date: 7/15/2013 7:21:00 PM
Of course! I will continue to do so!! :) You write great work! And I appreciate your visits!!! Thanks so much!
Date: 7/12/2013 12:09:00 PM
Hi! friend, it's a magic and a nice creation indeed. ....what we wish for.....you have made clear that wish must be according to our capacity too. Loved much and much. Always, bl
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Date: 7/12/2013 12:18:00 PM
Very, very well said!!!!! I couldn't have said it better. Thanks so much, BL!
Date: 7/12/2013 12:01:00 PM
A very interesting write.
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Date: 7/12/2013 12:18:00 PM
Well, cool! :) Thanks, Robert!
Date: 7/11/2013 9:34:00 PM
How does one poem make my heart break and me laugh at the same time? Talent!!! Love it!
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Date: 7/12/2013 12:02:00 AM
I have no idea! :) But, it did it for you! And that I'm grateful for! Also, for you even stopping by here! Very, very cool of you to do, Toshia! Thanks so much! :)
Date: 7/11/2013 9:00:00 PM
very nicely done Drake, yes it is good to gaze at the stars, we always camped out in the yard as a kid. Thanks for reading my Starry Night. AS I think of Starry Night, I think of Van Gogh & the song Vincent by Don McLean ;}
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Date: 7/12/2013 12:01:00 AM
I love stars myself. :) Ahh, good call out on that song! I haven't heard that song in ages. Thanks so much for coming by here, Debbie!
Date: 7/11/2013 7:25:00 PM
If the constellation was "ours" then he made a connection, and the driving away had to be courageous because of it. This is moving, heart wrenching unrequited love and courageously strong redirecting of a new life.
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Date: 7/12/2013 12:00:00 AM
Yes, very good call on that. It's never easy to drive off and not look back when your heart felt things were right. Very awesome of you to come by here, Tara! =D
Date: 7/11/2013 5:09:00 PM
She deserves to walk home. This is such an great write. Betty
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Date: 7/11/2013 5:51:00 PM
HA! Amen to that. Thank you kindly, Betty! Awesome of you to stop by!
Date: 7/11/2013 12:33:00 PM
Absolutely wonderful :)
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Date: 7/11/2013 1:50:00 PM
Hi & thank you, Marisa!!! :)
Date: 7/11/2013 7:40:00 AM
That hurts when a girl says that. This is beautiful and heartbreaking at the same time. Loved it Drake.
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Date: 7/11/2013 7:45:00 AM
Ha! I know, right?! Well, in the end, it'll be their loss anyway. They'll be staring at the stars while I hold hands with the one that is creating new stars with me. ;-) Many, many thanks Richard!
Date: 7/10/2013 8:08:00 PM
This is wonderful, Drake. Now that I've heard you read on air.........I can hear your voice while reading this one........it makes me smile !!
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Date: 7/10/2013 8:10:00 PM
Carrie, that means so much. I can't tell you enough how awesome that is of you to take the time to listen in to my wacky self. :) You're awesome! Thanks so much!
Date: 7/10/2013 6:19:00 PM
OMG!!, stunningly amazingly,,,, out of this world!!!! :0) ty4sharing,,
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Date: 7/10/2013 6:36:00 PM
You're very welcome, Cherie! :) I'm glad you stopped by!
Date: 7/10/2013 2:41:00 PM
Complete awesomeness. Love it!
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Date: 7/10/2013 2:43:00 PM
Hey there! :) Awesome of you to stop by! Thanks so much, Vanessa!
Date: 7/10/2013 1:32:00 PM
"Reversal gears become his new tune" important and well done line...which leads one to believe until that point he had an exhilarating feeling for her and immeasurable hope, but now it has become more down to earth. your words are chosen carefully and with a very masculine beauty. well done, again!
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Date: 7/10/2013 2:05:00 PM
Yup, you got it! :) Thanks so very much, Victoria! Great to see you back in the PS grind again.
Date: 7/10/2013 1:16:00 PM
Whew!...You are TOO good Drake...I see you are a music junkie like me as well...The first car by bros and I had was a '55 Plymouth 2-door sedan, six cylinder with 3-speed on the column with a VERY bad transmission...We ground a pound every time we shifted to second until we learned how to double-shift, which is why 'Ole '55' by the Eagles is one of my fave songs...Got so carried away with the car thing that there's no more room to talk about the poem (Oh well)
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Date: 7/10/2013 2:05:00 PM
LOL! No doubt, Tim! :) That's a hell of a car too. Nice! Thanks so much for stopping by!
Date: 7/10/2013 5:54:00 AM
Cute one..Got a chuckle..I am sure that you are on her hope you never come back into my orbit list..Enjoyed reading this morn..Thanks for your visits..Sara
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Date: 7/10/2013 7:35:00 AM
HAHA! Perhaps. :) Thanks so much, Sara!
Date: 7/9/2013 8:32:00 PM
Awesome astronomical imagery!! (and I'm using both meanings of the word!) A very delightful read this was for me. LIke James,I loved that blank wonder line too.
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Date: 7/9/2013 9:11:00 PM
Hi, Andrea!!! :) Ha, "both meanings", that's awesome. I'm really happy you enjoyed this!!
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