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Once again my count is at odds with the alleged "syllable counters". Howmanysyllables.com counts my first line as 9 - not so. Our Poetrysoup "syllable counter" counts lines 7 and 8 as eleven syllables - again - not so. (I have 10 fingers and I know how to use them)

Stalking Cloud Coldly did stalking cloud unleash its claw Rend heaven’s garment with its slashing blade The flaming sun ingest in gray cloud maw Exhaling ghostly rind of misty shade, Reeking havoc on plans made out of straw Soaking all in thunderous marinade Till clawing cloud gives way to clearing skies Topped off by squishing feet and cold mud pies. ©6/9/2017 submitted to – Ottava rima – Poetry Contest

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Funom Makama

Date: 6/17/2017 9:37:00 AM

Hello friend. Its been a while. LORD! This is just vintage you! Excellent, Awesome and a master in this covetous craft of writing. Keep on flowing the ink of your mind. A 7 for sure.

John Lawless
Date: 6/20/2017 12:25:00 PM

Thanks Funom, always good to here from you

Jan Allison

Date: 6/10/2017 2:24:00 AM

My fingers and thumbs agree with you its 10 in each line John:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless
Date: 6/10/2017 7:21:00 AM

Jan, perhaps they use the old trickery of "ten, nine, eight, seven, six......and five on the other....eleven fingers.....the math works....

Tim Smith

Date: 6/9/2017 7:37:00 PM

I hate counting syllables...what ever the count John this is good

John Lawless
Date: 6/10/2017 7:18:00 AM

...yeah it's kinda like the old song...."counting flowers on the wall.."

Akkina Downing

Date: 6/9/2017 7:13:00 PM

It's an awesome write. Good luck in the contest :)

John Lawless
Date: 6/10/2017 7:17:00 AM

Thanks Akkina, appreciate your taking time to read and comment

Dale Gregory Cozart

Date: 6/9/2017 6:19:00 PM

This is amazing. No way am I ready to tackle anything so structured.

John Lawless
Date: 6/9/2017 6:26:00 PM

Dale, I often fight the "forms" and their "structure" but find that they have made me a more focused poet when I write free verse....so.......go ahead.....I DARE YA!!!!

Heidi Sands

Date: 6/9/2017 6:13:00 PM

Wow. Great one John! Good luck in the contest :) By the way, You are funny about knowing how to count with 10 fingers lol

John Lawless
Date: 6/9/2017 6:24:00 PM

Thanks Heidi, appreciate your comment