Stalker

In a quiet pristine valley enclosing Harold’s Creek, I walk the tracks in forest shade where the flora is unique. Upon these tracks worn down through time, my feet move stealthily. I cannot believe I see this prize grazing ahead of me! There stands graceful beauty, and I must be down wind, for feeding goes on unconcerned while I become positioned. Slowly lifting to take aim my trigger finger bends. The gentle deer is in my sights… I shoot with my camera lens.

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Robert Lindley

Date: 8/18/2015 8:35:00 PM

Camera shooting gets thee no meat for hearth and home. Yet many celebrate such shooting because in the world today, we eat domesticated animals. Great poem and love the ending!

Lindsay Laurie
Date: 8/31/2015 2:26:00 AM

True what you say Robert... if people shoot for meat I'm fine about it, but not so trophy and lust. Thank you for your comment Robert - Lindsay

Constance La France

Date: 8/17/2015 8:15:00 AM

Lindsay, oh my for a moment I was devastated and then you made me soar with joy , if I could give 100, I would but we have to settle for 7, and thanks for visiting my poem, under green leaves, it is my first attempt at trimetet

Lindsay Laurie
Date: 8/31/2015 2:20:00 AM

G'day Broken Wings... that's good, and anyway, if it was a gun the deer was still safe. I couldn't shoot it. It was a pleasure to read your first attempt at a trimetet Broken Wings - Lindsay

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 8/13/2015 2:13:00 AM

a great pen Lindsay I did something similar last year I love doing twists too. hugs 7

Lindsay Laurie
Date: 8/16/2015 7:00:00 PM

Thank you Shadow... I prefer to put a hook line in humorous poems, but with the response; camera v gun, the twist appears to have worked in this nature poem - Lindsay

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/11/2015 3:17:00 PM

oh how nice. it's the BEST kind of shooting!! LOVE the twist. You GOT me!!

Lindsay Laurie
Date: 8/11/2015 8:18:00 PM

So I gotcha Andrea... haha. I have trouble hurting a fly, so a deer is as safe as a church. Thanks once again Andrea - Lindsay

Emile Pinet

Date: 8/11/2015 11:32:00 AM

Your word choices are clever, descriptive, and imaginative. The descriptive wording and the great imagery brought it all to life. Emile.

Lindsay Laurie
Date: 8/11/2015 8:15:00 PM

G'day Emile... thank you for your kind comment Emile. I do enjoy writing the images of the bush - regards - Lindsay

John Williams

Date: 8/10/2015 7:17:00 AM

Thank goodness it's only a camera---you had me going for a minute---well written Lindsay-----kind regards---John

Lindsay Laurie
Date: 8/11/2015 8:08:00 PM

Hello John... you won't catch me shooting anything with a gun John. To see a deer in the bush is the high I need. One time in the Grampians we were cooking lunch and a Red Deer stepped out of some ti-tree scrub and joined us... amazing it was - Lindsay

Kp Nunez

Date: 8/9/2015 9:37:00 PM

...and here I was, making ready with my words of reproof before I eve reached the last line...Am I glad I finished reading it! More so that you did not do as I expected...you're a fine one with this end line surprises, eh Lindsay? Good one! hugs!

Lindsay Laurie
Date: 8/11/2015 7:58:00 PM

G'day Kim... thanks again for your support Kim. As far as I'm concerned, a camera provides a win-win for everything concerned... a gun doesn't - catch you soon Kim - Lindsay