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Spring Muse

She is elusive, shy, anticipated
by a waiting world - perhaps too much,
in that she hides herself reluctant to
appear - delicate as the first leaves
her gowns of petals now unfold, nascent,
her dormancy no longer secret bursts
forth greenness like a miracle untold 
into each imagination.

Maybe the world’s coaxing makes your appearance
worthwhile - for under  grassy banks are
daffodils to adorn your hair, sweet, pastel
beauty - you decorate every where, 

spring, spring, spring.

Suzanne Delaney

I changed this from a free Verse poem to a Blankverse.

Tell me which version worked best,  Thanks
First version Here:

S P R I N G M U S E
She is elusive, shy
anticipated by a waiting world
Perhaps too much,
in that she hides herself
reluctant to appear.

Delicate as the first leaves
her gowns of petals unfold
nascent, her dormancy no longer secret
greenness bursts  forth like a miracle untold 
into each imagination

Maybe the world’s  coaxing
makes your appearance worthwhile
Under  grassy banks daffodils adorn your hair
Sweet, full range  of pastel beauty  you decorate
Every where,  spring, spring, spring.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 7/5/2018 2:52:00 PM
Suzanne, I prefer the first version. I just liked its organization better.Also, the new version is not 100% blank verse, so better to stay with free verse on this one. Very beautiful too.
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Date: 7/7/2018 8:38:00 AM
Thanks Andrea: always nice to have your input. Time is still my big block from participating.......getting better though.
Date: 5/7/2018 12:18:00 AM
Yes the blank verse reads more poetic to me, the spring as shy and many eagerly waiting for it eh, u captured it so creatively sweetly indeed. Kudos.
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Date: 7/7/2018 8:39:00 AM
Many thanks Zaynab, Appreciate your visits. SuZ
Date: 5/4/2018 5:11:00 PM
I like the first version! :)
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Date: 4/17/2018 12:17:00 PM
think we missed spring this year beautiful write thankyou for yopur coments on mine will probably redit put back on here like your picture compliments yout write not been on here for a while as been in hospital so not very well have nice eveing back here soon to read more of your work xx
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Date: 7/7/2018 8:43:00 AM
Hi David: I hope you are feeling much better. Thanks for your kind comments. Always nice to have your visits. SuZ
Date: 3/13/2018 2:53:00 PM
Both poems are very good Suzanne, blank verse is the more difficult form to write, so in my opinion more poetic.. However, many may not know what a blank verse is and when reading it not realise, until told.. The free verse does flow better and on Poetry soup may appeal to more people...
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Date: 7/7/2018 8:41:00 AM
Thanks silent one. So much to study so little time. I hope you are doing OK. SuZ
Date: 3/12/2018 2:58:00 AM
A beautiful poem SuZ that brings out the freshness of spring and the awaiting blossoms. Of course you know that her in Oz we are stepping into Autumn. Both versions of your poem are great, but if you put me in a spot to separate the two, I think I would favor the second version slightly...Maria
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Suzanne Delaney
Date: 7/7/2018 8:46:00 AM
Thanks Maria: I appreciate your comments. Today it is rainy outside so no gardening. My hair hates the rain anyway. LOL
Date: 3/11/2018 2:17:00 PM
charming me no end, suZ... i like both forms so keep them.:)... huggs
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Date: 7/7/2018 8:44:00 AM
Thanks Nette: Already summer green here and I am still replying to Spring. Who sped up time. LOL Hugs, SuZ
Date: 3/10/2018 2:49:00 PM
Beautiful poem either way SuZ..I like the blank verse a bit more...now you have one, the other, and both--you win with either one!
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Date: 3/11/2018 9:48:00 AM
Hi Vijay: I am partial to both too. The free verse was the inspired one so it will take me a while to decide which version to keep. Have a great day. SuZ
Date: 3/10/2018 12:59:00 PM
- They are beautiful both, SuZ :) - I'm like Winnie the Pooh ... "Yes, thank you ... both of them" :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/11/2018 9:41:00 AM
Hi Anne-Lise: Lovely to see you. Thanks for for reading and your cute comment. SuZ
Date: 3/10/2018 12:16:00 PM
I prefer the top one, SuZ. Both convey your wonderful thoughts well. Hoping you are well.
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Date: 3/11/2018 9:35:00 AM
Hi Daniel: It was an interesting exercise changing it to blank verse. Some of the word order needed changing when I changed the line breaks. Hope you are well too and thanks for stopping by. SuZ
Date: 3/10/2018 8:56:00 AM
Difficult one Suzanne but if I had to choose,I would say free verse one, but that's just me. Great verse anyway.
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Date: 3/10/2018 11:20:00 AM
Thanks for reading, Tom: The free verse one, was the inspired poem so I should probably stay with that. Best, SuZ