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Long winter nights left me in deep despair, aroused before the dawn so many times, in concert with the mantel clock whose chimes informed and mocked, knowing that I was there. Consciousness had become too hard to bear, walls of pain with no lesser ones to climb, each hour of sleep too short, each one sublime, my threshold reached, sought refuge in a chair. The bedspring in the mattress spear-like stood uncoiled unlike the ranks in which it lay a twisted Angel sent to do no good to torture and torment me, and it would I ordered a new mattress the next day three months ago missus said that I should. For contest 'Italian/Petrachan sonnet- Spring', sponsor Craig Cornish March 14th 2018

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Date: 4/19/2018 10:11:00 AM
Still laughing Viv---a talented and humorous pen for sure,--Had to read it three times.
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Date: 4/18/2018 4:13:00 AM
Congratulations on your win, Viv.
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Date: 4/18/2018 7:06:00 AM
Thanks Subimal, much appreciated. Viv
Date: 4/18/2018 12:31:00 AM
Congratulations on your win with this different delightful sonnet.
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Date: 4/18/2018 7:06:00 AM
Thanks Susan, very kind. Viv x
Date: 4/17/2018 5:49:00 AM
Viv, enjoyed your poem on "spring." Very different than all the others. Congrats on your win. John
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Date: 4/18/2018 7:07:00 AM
Thanks, John, my variation on a theme was a gamble, but Craig was very forgiving. Regards, Viv
Date: 4/17/2018 3:26:00 AM
Well done and so original, Viv. Many congrats on your fine win. Sincerely, Elaine George
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Viv Wigley
Date: 4/18/2018 7:08:00 AM
Thanks Elaine, well done you too! x
Date: 4/16/2018 8:48:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Viv, wonderful write and imagery ! Hugs Eve~`*
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Date: 4/17/2018 1:25:00 AM
Thanks Eve, sleeping much better now. Viv x
Date: 4/16/2018 5:22:00 PM
I like this, congrats Viv.
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Date: 4/17/2018 1:26:00 AM
Thanks Rob, much appreciated. Regards, Viv
Date: 4/16/2018 4:24:00 PM
Back with well deserved congrats, Viv. Beautifully penned.
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Date: 4/17/2018 1:26:00 AM
Thanks Line, surprised myself x
Date: 4/7/2018 3:42:00 PM
Holy Moly!! I was feeling so sorry for you, then had an inkling and sure enough. Still very well written and delightful too. Good luck in the contest. Should be at the top.
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Date: 3/25/2018 6:31:00 AM
A most enjoyable sonnet, Viv, written with a delightful witty pen. If it's of any comfort to you, you're not the only 'stubborn' person to endure discomfort! I've been through it as well. At present there's a mattress advert showing on Maltese telly, based very much on what you have written here! Regards // paul
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Date: 3/15/2018 4:00:00 PM
You had me ewing and awing, ready to bow to your poetically emotional depth, to fav this that I might savor the imagery of every line over and over, I was enraptured and well captured until I feel asleep. Seriously, Viv - I do love your serious pen, but equal is my love of your wit and the combination - well can perfection be any nearer than this? Applause, you sure played with my heart and captured my "ah, man - didn't see that coming" Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Date: 3/14/2018 11:19:00 PM
Perfect, Viv!! Great Italian sonnet ;-)
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Viv Wigley
Date: 3/18/2018 3:14:00 AM
Thanks Laura, and bless your eyesight x
Date: 3/14/2018 12:07:00 PM
You write Sonnet poetry with authenticity--enjoyed reading your poem Viv. Fun ending!
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Date: 3/14/2018 8:11:00 PM
Thanks, Vijay, a different take on theme, by a technicality. Regards, Viv
Date: 3/14/2018 10:35:00 AM
No wonder you couldn't sleep..."a twisted Angel sent to do no good". A delightful poem, Viv.
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Date: 3/14/2018 8:12:00 PM
My sympathy goes to any victim of the rampant bed spring, Line. Thanks x
Date: 3/14/2018 8:50:00 AM
Lol, you had me there Viv, I was thinking bluebells. I too have been a victim still got the scar somewhere. Good luck. Tom
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Viv Wigley
Date: 3/14/2018 8:13:00 PM
Ouch! Wear it with pride, fellow somnambulist. Regards, Viv

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