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Split Wide Open

A chance encounter soon turned to love
Blossoming alike a flowering spring
That undulates moods of prairies green
Oscillating rhythms of tender winds
Amid trees-abloom, swaying revelry
And streams rushing to greet the sea.

They were blessed to find each other
Having just exited from a harsh winter
Of failed marriages and lovelorn yore
That gelid memories still fetch to fore
Even when ruminating of sunny shores.

Yet, they found love, resonating true
In lure of romance where passions woo
Growing with phases of waxing moon
Eager to find the words to their song
And vows of forever that last lifelong.

Alas! their journey faced fierce storms
When candles of love flickered in hearts
And blooms of today withered in past
As perturbed souls began drifting apart
Igniting a brawl between then and now.

The waxing moon soon started to wane
When gelid winter raised its ugly head,
And the thawed landscape froze again,
As welcome ceded, goodbyes reigned,
And wounds split-open ached of pain;

For love-song never found its rhythm
And tale of two-souls remained unwritten
As laments decried the split wide-open.

June 21, 2022
Placed 1st: This or That, Vol 12 Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Edward Ibeh
Title chosen: Split Wide Open

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Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 7/8/2022 1:13:00 PM - As always excellently written, Vijay ... a sad topic that concerns many ... but, often difficult to talk about - Congratulations on your well deserved win :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 7/8/2022 10:48:00 AM yes, a worthy first place indeed, Vijay. Congratulations Login to Reply

Valsa George Date: 7/4/2022 8:05:00 AM Congratulations on your most deserving first place win dear friend ! Login to Reply

Edward Ibeh Date: 7/2/2022 5:25:00 PM Your string of masterpieces continue with this sad tale of love, Vijay:-) You never fail to amaze! Heartiest congratulations on your top win in my contest! Login to Reply

Paula Goldsmith Date: 7/2/2022 11:10:00 AM Congratulations on your win. A write/story. A "Wonderful" ending. Sometimes it just does not work out. Have a great/blessed day....................... Login to Reply

Sotto Poet Date: 7/2/2022 7:43:00 AM Vijay, Back with congratulations on your excellent win. You penned such a stunning Poem. Have a lovely weekend. Login to Reply

Michael Tor Date: 7/1/2022 1:40:00 AM Sadly this relationship did not survive. A reality that is real and is found to often in life. I think most of us have experienced what your words have conveyed my friend. I always love your words Vijay, which you pick and use. They are well thought and reflect a level of Poetry that reflects intelligence, and uniqueness. Something very difficult to achieve. Another exceptional winning poem by you, God bless you... Login to Reply

Anitha Jayasankar Date: 6/23/2022 10:59:00 PM Vijayji, what a beautiful imagination for the title you chose... the way your creative pen unfolds the story of two souls that suffer pangs of separation even though they felt the spring of love blossoming in their lives in the beginning... As always, such beautiful imagery and I loved the "love growing with phases of waxing moon"... Best wishes in the contest... God bless.. ~ Ani Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 6/23/2022 12:22:00 AM You took the theme to broken love. Sure to be a winner Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/23/2022 6:21:00 AM Appreciate your vote of confidence Andrea. Always so special when you visit. Many thanks.

Harry Horsman Date: 6/22/2022 8:02:00 PM Oh the circle of love Vijay, you write these so well, this another gem from your poetic mind. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/23/2022 6:20:00 AM So special to hear that from you, Harry. Much appreciate your visit and kind feedback, Many thanks.

Brandy Nicole Date: 6/22/2022 7:03:00 PM "tale of two-souls remained unwritten, as laments split wide-open." This thought leaves me feeling empty- alone. The entire poem tugs deeply at my heart. You have created an emotional masterpiece, my dear friend. Hugs, Brandy Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/23/2022 6:20:00 AM So very kind of you to say so. You are so right to describe the feelings after break up as emptiness. Much appreciate your support my dear friend. Many thanks.

Heidi Sands Date: 6/22/2022 5:40:00 PM You have shown this heartbreak and realistic situation well. Sad and impressive. Well written Vijay :) Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/23/2022 6:18:00 AM Yes--sad and true. Much appreciate your supportive comments, Heidi. Many thanks, as always.

Janice Canerdy Date: 6/22/2022 10:16:00 AM Vijay, your moving, descriptive poem tells the story of many who simply couldn't overcome the pitfalls of the past--and fall into them again! The divorce rate for second and third marriages is HIGH. Janice Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/23/2022 6:17:00 AM You are so right about the divorces being so common these days. Best to part when things don't work out. Much appreciate your thoughtful remarks, Janice. Many thanks.

Valsa George Date: 6/22/2022 9:23:00 AM "For love-song never found its rhythm And tale of two-souls remained unwritten'"- Thus ended their sad tale of love with the split in their relationship suddenly growing wider. Though they had come out victorious from their broken marriages and had hoped that there was going to be a fresh turn to their lives, all their hopes were shattered in time. In your unique flawless style, you have presented this heart wrenching story in the most impressive way..... Vijay. All the Best dear friend. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/23/2022 6:15:00 AM Always happy to read your insightful analysis my friend. Much appreciate your support and value your feedback. Many thanks, Valsa.

Sara Kendrick Date: 6/22/2022 8:03:00 AM Very descriptive of a lovely romance gone wrong. At least you loved and have the capacity to do so and to write about it. I enjoyed reading your contest entry. Way to go. Reads like a good contender to me. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/22/2022 8:40:00 AM Much appreciate your visit and kind remarks, Sara. many thanks for your supportive comments.

Sotto Poet Date: 6/21/2022 7:36:00 PM This is another brilliant work of writing dear Vijay; your diction is impeccable, and your use of metaphors is superb. Even if it doesn't work out in the end, what matters most is keeping the heart open to love and providing for others. It can feel like those scars will never go away, and I hope that's just the way fiction works and not a judgment on the authenticity of your prose. Though I loved reading your poem, my dearest friend. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/22/2022 6:12:00 AM Glad you liked the metaphor my friend. Much appreciate how you take the time to spread goodwill on this site. Many thanks for your kind, insightful feedback, Lasad.

Bill Baker Date: 6/21/2022 4:49:00 PM Excellent entry for the contest, Vijay. Well written and engaging. It doesn't always work out, the key is to be open to love and continue to offer it to others. Good luck in the contest my friend. Bill Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/22/2022 6:11:00 AM So true, Bill. It doesn't always work out. Much appreciate your visit and comments. Many thanks, my friend from Texas..

Mystic Rose Rose Date: 6/21/2022 2:41:00 PM When love fails us Vijay, that is what happens. We are split wide open. Those wounds never seem to quite heal at times, praying this is only fiction and a testament to your realistic poetry, gl in the contest, Smiles ! Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/21/2022 3:53:00 PM True to life because it happens to someone we know. Much appreciate your kind remarks my friend. Many thanks, Vienna.

Joe Dimino Date: 6/21/2022 12:11:00 PM Fabulous truth, so poetically told. It is less finding someone right to love, and more being ready for love -- less baggage -- free to travel loves myriad paths of ups and downs -- but always ending the night in each other's arms. Your fine poem is subject for a book. That's what I like about excellent poetry, a lot more said in a relatively short space. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/21/2022 3:51:00 PM Your insightful comments are always on mark, Joe. I appreciate that you spend the time to write detailed feedback. I appreciate your vote of approval. Many thanks.

Victor Buhagiar Date: 6/21/2022 9:01:00 AM Lost love. Such a favourite subject used many times. The way you wrote it is magnificent. Perfect language and great use of imagery. Well done. Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/21/2022 3:49:00 PM So sad that it does happen and not uncommon. Much appreciate your valued feedback, Victor. Many thanks.

Kim Rodrigues Date: 6/21/2022 7:08:00 AM The sweetness of love…devastation of breakups! Well done, Vijay the Poet! Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/21/2022 3:48:00 PM Break-ups are always devastating. Much appreciate your feedback my friend. Many thanks, Kim.

Deb M Date: 6/21/2022 6:44:00 AM Beautiful Vijay….wish I could write like that…..so clever! Debx Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/21/2022 3:47:00 PM You wrote way better--elegant poetry, Deb. Much appreciate your visit and comments. many thanks.

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 6/21/2022 4:42:00 AM A profound analysis of relationships that are unable to see their bud love bloom. Powerful verses, sublime language, and rhythm. I much liked the story which, unfortunately, had not a glorious end, my dearest friend, Vijay! Blessings! Login to Reply Vijay Pandit Date: 6/21/2022 3:46:00 PM So nice to hear that from you my friend. Your thoughts are much valued and appreciated, Demetrios. Many thanks.