Valsa George Poet Free verse

Split Wide Open

“Love is a power so strong, yet if compressed without
 outlet, it is as good as stagnant waters"---by poet


 As we roamed under the star spangled sky, 
Sharing many a trivial thought
I failed to voice my clandestine whim
Structured within my heart's inmost core
When words got suddenly broken up
With a lump forming in my throat
I failed to convey what I meant 
In a language explicit for you to grasp

Gazing at each other, as we stood
Without uttering a word aloud, never making explicit 
My thoughts with inhibitions subduing me,
You failed to notice my love lit eyes
Sadly glistening with tears, about to shed 

Sad, my thoughts scattered like dead leaves
Abandoned by the trees in harsh autumn wind
Whirling down directionless and fated to rot

At the end of a pleasant united jaunt
When forced to take our own solitary paths
With life’s journey diverging in opposite tracks,
We failed to say even a parting word 
As a gesture of courtesy, due for both
 
Alas, when the past has dwindled slowly away
We remain in our own cloistered cells
Failing to forget what has transpired
With wounds bleeding all through time

Whenever I think of our love, that got thus fused
Standing speechless and tongue tied every time
I force a wistful glow, wondering what might have been
If you could see my heart split wide open 
And known my true feelings which I could never once divulge

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June. 6.2022

~Placed First~

This or That, Vol. 12 Poetry Contest 
Subject Chosen- Split Wide Open
Sponsored by Edward Ibeh

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Edward Ibeh July 2, 2022 at 5:21 PM Just remarkable, Valsa:-) Striking imagery and amazing vocabulary, I might add. Heartiest congratulations on your top win in my contest! Valsa George July 2, 2022 at 8:00 PM Thank you so much Edward for the high placement you have given to my poem. I appreciate the way you conduct this contest. You come up with topics unique and thought provoking.... ! God bless you !

Paula Goldsmith July 2, 2022 at 11:06 AM Congratulations on your win. What a write. Loved your ending. Have a blessed weekend................

Sotto Poet July 2, 2022 at 7:41 AM Valsa, back with congratulations on your excellent win. You penned such a stunning Poem. Have a lovely weekend.

Bill Baker June 14, 2022 at 2:08 PM I suffered inside feeling unloved because they didn't even know I loved them. It carried over into adulthood until I overcame my fear of rejection. Thank God. "All things work together for good to those that love the lord and are called unto his service." Blessings, Bill Valsa George June 15, 2022 at 2:41 AM I can understand your feelings. I have always felt that you love your fellow beings and respect women in general. At times we fail to open up and others fail to understand what is inside. Probably you must have been shy and reticent. But Thank God, as you grew up, you got over that feeling of being unloved. Yes,"All things work together for good to those that love the lord and are called unto his service." Thanks a lot Bill for your beautiful and touching comment.

Bill Baker June 14, 2022 at 2:05 PM Thank you, Valsa, for sharing such a heart retching love poem with us. The unknowing of the paths not taken or the words unspoken are the cruelest memories we retain. Taught by a loving mother and father to love all women as blessings from God, given to man as helpers to comfort in loneliness; I was often infatuated and felt love for every girl in my classes. I wanted them all to know how thankful I was for them and the love and admiration I had for them. I was unable to voice my feelings.

Caren Krutsinger June 9, 2022 at 9:10 PM This is incredibly real; such an honest feeling "Whenever I think of our love, which got thus fused Standing speechless and tongue tied every time I force a wistful glow, wondering what might have been"

Robert Lindley June 7, 2022 at 8:14 AM A gift of exception verse my friend. You have expressed what many may feel in life. Life is about hapiness and the joy of loiving others. Your new creation inspired me to write later today. Thank you for rthat gift. A fav- a shining gem. God bless..

Mystic Rose Rose June 6, 2022 at 9:45 PM Sometimes its a gift to be able to give someone your heart wide open like that, other times its a curse, your words are felt deeply here dear poet :)

Swetha Vangaveti June 6, 2022 at 10:55 AM What if there's a second chance? If we can say a proper goodbye? Life sadly doesn't give that opportunity. I just loved the intensity of every line in the poem. Amazingly penned.

Jennifer Proxenos June 6, 2022 at 10:55 AM Valsa perhaps a great love was on the horizon but your love you had later was the one that was the very foundation of your life and trust. Elias and I, each married, each one with a son like your little boy who was attacked by a raven, both of us unhappy and divorced, but we always loved each other, he phoned me 21 years ago, we were married 6 .months later. Ours was a true destiny. Brilliant poetry my friend. Hugs and blessings, jennifer.

Rico Leffanta June 6, 2022 at 10:38 AM What a gift it is to be understood without speaking! Enjoyed, Valsa!

Kim Rodrigues June 6, 2022 at 5:54 AM A grand poem, Valsa! Your quote impeccable! Love the imagery: As we roamed under the star spangled sky, Each time my thoughts scattered like dead leaves Abandoned by trees in the harsh autumn wind…

Sotto Poet June 6, 2022 at 4:50 AM I force a wistful glow, wondering what might have been If you could see my heart split wide open You've done a great job Valsa. Valsa, you have an incredible talent for writing poetry, and you successfully convey the reader's feelings via your work.

Vijay Pandit June 6, 2022 at 4:44 AM Wonderful story of two hearts that silently drifted apart. Feelings come to fore in every emotive line. Excellent as always, Valsa.

Harry Horsman June 6, 2022 at 2:30 AM Truly wonderful poetry, Valsa, yes one feels the emotion here within the poem.. Valsa George June 6, 2022 at 3:13 AM So delighted by your sweet comment, harry ! Thanks a lot ....

Victor Buhagiar June 6, 2022 at 2:25 AM Life is so complex. Alas when we can never attain an understanding of what life has for us. You expound emotions so well. Valsa George June 6, 2022 at 3:12 AM Yes, we do not know what life has in store for us. But one thing is sure.... as we age, it grows increasingly difficult. Accepting the inevitable is all we can do. Thanks a lot dear Victor.

Tom Cunningham June 6, 2022 at 1:15 AM When I saw the contest requirements I couldn't for the life of me think of anything to write on the title you chose. You've done an amazing job Valsa. Been away for a few days, just playing catch up. Hope you're well. Tom Valsa George June 6, 2022 at 3:10 AM Thanks a lot Tom for your kind words. I must say you chose even a better option and wrote a wonderful poem on "brace the impact" that I enjoyed much....