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Split Wide Open

“Love is a power so strong, yet if compressed without outlet, it is as good as stagnant waters"---by poet As we roamed under the star spangled sky, Sharing many a trivial thought I failed to voice my clandestine whim Structured within my heart's inmost core When words got suddenly broken up With a lump forming in my throat I failed to convey what I meant In a language explicit for you to grasp Gazing at each other, as we stood Without uttering a word aloud, never making explicit My thoughts with inhibitions subduing me, You failed to notice my love lit eyes Sadly glistening with tears, about to shed Sad, my thoughts scattered like dead leaves Abandoned by the trees in harsh autumn wind Whirling down directionless and fated to rot At the end of a pleasant united jaunt When forced to take our own solitary paths With life’s journey diverging in opposite tracks, We failed to say even a parting word As a gesture of courtesy, due for both Alas, when the past has dwindled slowly away We remain in our own cloistered cells Failing to forget what has transpired With wounds bleeding all through time Whenever I think of our love, that got thus fused Standing speechless and tongue tied every time I force a wistful glow, wondering what might have been If you could see my heart split wide open And known my true feelings which I could never once divulge ___________________________________________ June. 6.2022 ~Placed First~ This or That, Vol. 12 Poetry Contest Subject Chosen- Split Wide Open Sponsored by Edward Ibeh

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Edward Ibeh

Date: 7/2/2022 5:21:00 PM

Just remarkable, Valsa:-) Striking imagery and amazing vocabulary, I might add. Heartiest congratulations on your top win in my contest!

Valsa George
Date: 7/2/2022 8:00:00 PM

Thank you so much Edward for the high placement you have given to my poem. I appreciate the way you conduct this contest. You come up with topics unique and thought provoking.... ! God bless you !

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 7/2/2022 11:06:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a write. Loved your ending. Have a blessed weekend................

Sotto Poet

Date: 7/2/2022 7:41:00 AM

Valsa, back with congratulations on your excellent win. You penned such a stunning Poem. Have a lovely weekend.

Bill Baker

Date: 6/14/2022 2:08:00 PM

I suffered inside feeling unloved because they didn't even know I loved them. It carried over into adulthood until I overcame my fear of rejection. Thank God. "All things work together for good to those that love the lord and are called unto his service." Blessings, Bill

Valsa George
Date: 6/15/2022 2:41:00 AM

I can understand your feelings. I have always felt that you love your fellow beings and respect women in general. At times we fail to open up and others fail to understand what is inside. Probably you must have been shy and reticent. But Thank God, as you grew up, you got over that feeling of being unloved. Yes,"All things work together for good to those that love the lord and are called unto his service." Thanks a lot Bill for your beautiful and touching comment.

Bill Baker

Date: 6/14/2022 2:05:00 PM

Thank you, Valsa, for sharing such a heart retching love poem with us. The unknowing of the paths not taken or the words unspoken are the cruelest memories we retain. Taught by a loving mother and father to love all women as blessings from God, given to man as helpers to comfort in loneliness; I was often infatuated and felt love for every girl in my classes. I wanted them all to know how thankful I was for them and the love and admiration I had for them. I was unable to voice my feelings.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 6/9/2022 9:10:00 PM

This is incredibly real; such an honest feeling "Whenever I think of our love, which got thus fused Standing speechless and tongue tied every time I force a wistful glow, wondering what might have been"

Robert Lindley

Date: 6/7/2022 8:14:00 AM

A gift of exception verse my friend. You have expressed what many may feel in life. Life is about hapiness and the joy of loiving others. Your new creation inspired me to write later today. Thank you for rthat gift. A fav- a shining gem. God bless..

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 6/6/2022 9:45:00 PM

Sometimes its a gift to be able to give someone your heart wide open like that, other times its a curse, your words are felt deeply here dear poet :)

Swetha Vangaveti

Date: 6/6/2022 10:55:00 AM

What if there's a second chance? If we can say a proper goodbye? Life sadly doesn't give that opportunity. I just loved the intensity of every line in the poem. Amazingly penned.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 6/6/2022 10:55:00 AM

Valsa perhaps a great love was on the horizon but your love you had later was the one that was the very foundation of your life and trust. Elias and I, each married, each one with a son like your little boy who was attacked by a raven, both of us unhappy and divorced, but we always loved each other, he phoned me 21 years ago, we were married 6 .months later. Ours was a true destiny. Brilliant poetry my friend. Hugs and blessings, jennifer.

Rico Leffanta

Date: 6/6/2022 10:38:00 AM

What a gift it is to be understood without speaking! Enjoyed, Valsa!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/6/2022 5:54:00 AM

A grand poem, Valsa! Your quote impeccable! Love the imagery: As we roamed under the star spangled sky, Each time my thoughts scattered like dead leaves Abandoned by trees in the harsh autumn wind…

Sotto Poet

Date: 6/6/2022 4:50:00 AM

I force a wistful glow, wondering what might have been If you could see my heart split wide open You've done a great job Valsa. Valsa, you have an incredible talent for writing poetry, and you successfully convey the reader's feelings via your work.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 6/6/2022 4:44:00 AM

Wonderful story of two hearts that silently drifted apart. Feelings come to fore in every emotive line. Excellent as always, Valsa.

Harry Horsman

Date: 6/6/2022 2:30:00 AM

Truly wonderful poetry, Valsa, yes one feels the emotion here within the poem..

Valsa George
Date: 6/6/2022 3:13:00 AM

So delighted by your sweet comment, harry ! Thanks a lot ....

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 6/6/2022 2:25:00 AM

Life is so complex. Alas when we can never attain an understanding of what life has for us. You expound emotions so well.

Valsa George
Date: 6/6/2022 3:12:00 AM

Yes, we do not know what life has in store for us. But one thing is sure.... as we age, it grows increasingly difficult. Accepting the inevitable is all we can do. Thanks a lot dear Victor.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 6/6/2022 1:15:00 AM

When I saw the contest requirements I couldn't for the life of me think of anything to write on the title you chose. You've done an amazing job Valsa. Been away for a few days, just playing catch up. Hope you're well. Tom

Valsa George
Date: 6/6/2022 3:10:00 AM

Thanks a lot Tom for your kind words. I must say you chose even a better option and wrote a wonderful poem on "brace the impact" that I enjoyed much....