Matthew Anish Poet Blank verse

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Part of me says
        go one way 
part of me
      says 
go 
the other way
      a bitter battle 
inside
    Do you really 
think that 
  the road is easy 
to travel?
     No matter 
what they say 
it's a rough journey 
    filled with 
pitfalls and 
         distractions
a kiss at
   night and 
          off 
to dreamland 
the edifice of darkness
        soon 
crumbles 
      and you're 
back in the spotlight 
under a bright sun
     You'll need 
luck, good companions 
     and also perhaps 
a taste of the divine

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Hyle Chu June 30, 2009 at 9:50 AM Nice take on the constant battle we all fight: the battle within the self. "the edifice of darkness / soon / crumbles / and you're / back in the spotlight." That's good writing. Thanks for the insight on my Haiku "Summer Grind".

L'Nass Shango June 26, 2009 at 3:18 PM Thanks for your encouragement ... you have the stuff not only to write, but to make the choices that win applause. One love

Misty Penton-Leccese June 23, 2009 at 8:22 PM I think that everyone has this fight with themselves at one point or another. Me for one am in the middle of one right now. Oh well, loved the poem. Keep up the good work. Lots of Love, Misty

Yoni Dvorkis June 23, 2009 at 8:10 PM I like the shape of this, reminds me of the bumpy road you talk about. It's really when you get that taste of the divine that you get a better sense of where this road leads. to say it's a rough journey is putting it very very mildly in my book. If you didn't know where it leads it would be impossible to travel... ps, my time poem you commented isn't fictional at all but it also didn't happen to me but to this guy who wrote a book about it, his name's Gary Renard. I was just paraphrasing him.

Carolyn Devonshire June 23, 2009 at 7:43 PM The pitfalls await sometimes regardless of what direction we choose. Making choices has always been hard for me and you vividly describe exactly why that is. I, too, am searching for "a taste of the divine" to carry me on my journey. Obviously, I could really relate to your excellent poem, Matthew. Riviting! Love, Carolyn

Mohammad Yamin June 23, 2009 at 6:15 PM Matthew, This is an awesome poem -splendid. Good use of metaphors. Life indeed is a rough journey. One needs divine help to avoid the pitfalls and distractions -swaying of this way and that. An amazing write. Thanks for your comments on my Haiko Buried Hearts. Umar Khayam is famous for his Rubai'yat. I have translated in English Rubai'yat of an eminent poet from Indo Pakistan subcontinent called Josh Malihabadi. My book is titled Rubai'yat of Josh Malihabadi -A Drop and the Ocean. -Mohammad

Charmaine Chircop June 23, 2009 at 2:26 PM i can relate to this poem,its like a dilhemma between the heart and the soul,when part of us tells us to go for something and an innervoice tells us to stay in the path we are...i enjoyed this write so much--interesting and well penned indeed---charma

Phyllis Babcock June 23, 2009 at 1:26 PM We all travel this journey called life. With battles to win and rivers to cross we with the Lord's help do find our way. God Bless Phyl

Diane Christian June 23, 2009 at 12:19 PM aww a great poem, the enemy tries to trap us at every turn it is a hard walk but its worth it, we just like cars in a way every so often we need an MOT, Moment Of Truth, God shows us what needs to change to keep us going he recharges us up, repairs any damage to us and sets us back out on the journey so cool, God will knock those obstacles out of the way, just like cars we need regular check points with God to be sure we where he wants us to be, anyway a beautiful powrful write, God bless you

Jan Valdez June 22, 2009 at 7:01 PM i like how you jived the title to the body..it's just that the format confused me a little..