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Split the Twain

Your passion pervades, She presides in Scarlett. Claims that it's love, and calls you, My Darling. You, know the truth, yet won't heed a warning, Only one more kiss, Mr. Prince Charming. She is Your True Mistress, And Rules You, My Darling. The eighth Day of Jane, shaving razor, stained blade. Hazed fathoms of nothing, rage through your veins. You think, your so cunning, such a fool, total waste. Within the grasp of fathoms, You have chosen too late. Embraced it, Split the Twain, Shaving razor, Stained blade. Trapped in the Nether's, Fraught endless wander. You ponder Your Life, all of it squandered. Stating, you realize it, This is finite, No longer. Your sand has ran by, Gone beyond the yonder Insane split the twain Shaving razor Stained blade A little explanation. The catholic cardinal wears Scarlett, in this case it means the addict's religion. Split the twain means that, the addict is so far gone, They have separated from reality. The eight-day of Jane, means, they have been high for so long, they do not know what day it is. These are vignettes of the Drug Addicts thoughts. Thank You All. H.Elless Poet

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James Inman

Date: 9/9/2022 10:29:00 AM

A challenge for you. Choose the "Types of Poems" tab at the top of page and choose one you're not familiar with, read the requirements and write a poem in that style. Many can be very challenging. After I joined the sight I was set a challenge to write one Etheree a week. It inspired me to write quite a few Etherees and many became creative. It seems you started posting in May of this year, so welcome to the sight as a Lifetime Member. Good luck and keep writing.

R J. Elless
Date: 9/10/2022 7:55:00 AM

James Thank You for your comments. I have added a few explanations to split the twain. Of course, I know what it means, though many others may not. Perhaps I shall try the many forms of poetry. But it's such fun rhyming. Thank You again. Keep rolling. Howard.

James Inman

Date: 9/9/2022 10:08:00 AM

'cont after previous' limit your readership. I'm not suggesting it is a negative but many readers may find it difficult to understand your intent in the poem. If you have a specific target audience then it can actually be very positive. I noticed that most of your poems are listed as rhyme but a couple I've read use a lot of forced rhyme, such as your poem "Aspire to Write" (which I like a lot) and to me, that would be better listed as Lyric, which is the form in which most "RAP" and other music falls.

James Inman

Date: 9/9/2022 9:55:00 AM

Hi Howard, I read quite a few of your poems and find them quite interesting. You have a gift for rhyme, but I was happy that I chose something other than rhyme with this one. This poem shows a lot of depth in its subject. It is nicely written and uses various poetic devices to get across your meaning. I like the repeating of the line "shaving razor, stained blade" which deepens in significance within the poem. An observation, the use of colloquialisms and slang may in your poems 'cont'