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If you leave me where will I be? Lost on my own. Who can I phone? No one could know the pain you sowed. Deep in my heart. Now I must start. To try to heal. To try to feel. I want to cry. I want to die. My love was strong. I must not long for time we had. It is so sad. We lived as one. Had so much fun. How could you leave? I pull your sleeve. You cross the floor, then reach the door. I scream your name. In so much pain. You turn the knob. I start to sob. Then you step out. I want to shout. All hope is lost. I count the cost. I'm on the floor. You close the door.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 2/21/2018 7:27:00 PM
A good job your heart is big enough to take it, Jean. Well penned, lass. Viv x
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Jean Murray
Date: 2/22/2018 12:06:00 AM
I had dilated cardiomyopathy so my heart was huge Viv. I squeezed him out because now I'm cured.
Date: 2/15/2018 10:44:00 PM
Sincere congratulations on your win in this VERY challenging form, Jean - blessings and congrats to you, my friend! :-)
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Jean Murray
Date: 2/16/2018 1:10:00 AM
Thank you Gregory.
Date: 2/7/2018 10:53:00 AM
Wait there is more, for you I implore, take heed this wine, we have no time, take just one glass, your troubles shall pass : ))
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Jean Murray
Date: 2/16/2018 1:10:00 AM
Well done Tim.
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Tim Smith
Date: 2/8/2018 9:57:00 AM
for you in store....your woes shall pass
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Jean Murray
Date: 2/7/2018 3:23:00 PM
Now TIm....you know as well as I do.....implore and troubles both have TWO syllables! Back to the drawing board.
Date: 2/6/2018 8:04:00 PM
A heartbreaking poem Jean. A sad but powerful write where you really let the emotions flow. Congratulations on your excellent win with your expressive poem. ~Susan
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Jean Murray
Date: 2/7/2018 4:54:00 AM
Good morning Susan and thank you.
Date: 2/4/2018 11:29:00 PM
I wrote and it didn't post... I will try again... Congratulations on your win.. Heartbreaks can be a "B" , I've been there... Thank you for my birthday wishes Hugs dear friend
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Jean Murray
Date: 2/5/2018 2:10:00 AM
'Twas a pleasure Eve. My heart didn't break. Instead it almost burst!! The stress brought on dilated cardiomyopathy. Thankfully, the beat goes on.
Date: 2/4/2018 6:01:00 PM
Sadly, but powerfully written even with limited use of words, Jean. Congratulations on your win in the contest. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 2/4/2018 5:17:00 PM
I like the way you chained all those rhymes. A pleasure to read, Jean.
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Jean Murray
Date: 2/4/2018 5:59:00 PM
Thank you Line.
Date: 2/4/2018 3:31:00 PM
Heartbreaking Jean... Sadly its probably from life experience.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Jean Murray
Date: 2/4/2018 5:58:00 PM
Thank you Silent. My poor wee heart....
Date: 2/4/2018 6:54:00 AM
Your story of heartbreak well told despite the 4 word constraint. Well written, Jean..a winning poem.
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Jean Murray
Date: 2/4/2018 11:58:00 AM
Here's hoping Vijay. Thank you for your optimistic outlook.
Date: 2/3/2018 11:34:00 PM
This is... fiction for a contest? Rip my heart out ink.
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/4/2018 6:56:00 AM
Phew! That's more like it ;P
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Jean Murray
Date: 2/4/2018 4:00:00 AM
Good morning Maureen. It's for Silent One's latest, 4 lines of 4 words, each of 1 syllable. I personally am more inclined to bang the door behind them.
Date: 2/3/2018 9:24:00 PM
Excellent poetry of a tragic episode, Jean ... Best wishes for the contest ...
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Jean Murray
Date: 2/4/2018 3:51:00 AM
Thank you Probir.

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