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Spaces - "surprise!"

Surprise! The burglar tripped the silent alarm The cops wait at the door.

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Doris Culverhouse

Date: 2/9/2010 6:08:00 AM

hot poem!!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 2/7/2010 1:58:00 AM

This made me smile Audrey. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Connie

Caroline Cécile Delacroix

Date: 2/5/2010 11:44:00 PM

LOL! Good one!, Audrey! Love it. Thanks for sharing and thank you for your kind comments on my poem. Best wishes, Caroline.

Constance La France

Date: 2/5/2010 6:59:00 PM

This is so funny.. wonderful space poem.. hope you win... and thanks for your comment on my poetry...

Gerard Keogh Jr.

Date: 2/5/2010 4:00:00 PM

Hi, Audrey, I like this. I can see this as cinema. I'm sorry, but I didn't get any Soup mails as they said they were undelivered. I assume that it may have been the weather or such. But I look forward to hearing from you as you are talented and very thoughtful. Regards, Gerard. Stay safe and secure in God's hands and your own heart.

James Fraser

Date: 2/5/2010 11:46:00 AM

Nice one Audrey, mmm fill in the gaps, toughie >> good luck in Brian's contest >> James

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 2/5/2010 9:38:00 AM

good one!!!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 2/4/2010 8:25:00 PM

Cute .. nice entry for the contest... good luck for this "beauty" should place high in the winnings... my entry is Outburst.. am thinking only of Summer and beach ... and warmth.. can u imagine us getting 24 inches of predicted snow this weekend? yikes!! luv.. Linda-Marie..

Marty Owens

Date: 2/4/2010 4:11:00 PM

I'm glad the burglar tripped it...Glad they got caught...nice Imagism...Marty

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/4/2010 12:17:00 PM

VERY GOOD!! Best of luck with this SOUPurb piece! LUv, Andrea

Sean Kelly

Date: 2/4/2010 11:18:00 AM

Yeaahh !! , Book 'em Danno !! Best of luck , Audrey ....

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/4/2010 10:11:00 AM

Open for my imagination to go wild in this one. Good luck in the contest. Keep the creative pen flowing. Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work. Sara

Brian Strand

Date: 2/4/2010 8:14:00 AM

Thank you for supporting my contest Audrey.Rgds Brian