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Sonnet 2

Your Sentiment no longer a thought As I walk in the shadow so distraught For my heart speaks in sweet sorrow For this woman I love to-morrow Will leave me lost and so alone to weep I knowingly shall rest my head to sleep With my heart on my sleeve if you please I heard a slight laughter through the trees For she walks in the shadow of his charm With a willful promise on his arm Now I can’t whisper her unruly name Come it nay to me now and shame Never more you ruthless queen Should I wake it from this rotten dream? (This is Laura's Shakespearean sonnet )

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Sharon Winter

Date: 10/4/2008 6:55:00 AM

Hey Laura, came upon this searching for a certain someone's comment, and see I never commented myself. So sorry I missed this. So thought provoking and well written. My imagination soars. Is it all a dream? Hmm...intriguing and quite excellent in the Shakespearean style! Love, Shar

Heidie Buys

Date: 10/3/2008 4:29:00 PM

Well written and very touching, until the end. That made me smile. Very well done. Love Heidie

Joseph Spence Sr

Date: 10/2/2008 8:31:00 AM

I like your expressions in this poem. The thoughts come across very well. I can also see the images. The rhyming pattern gives the poem a special spark. The rhetorical questioning technique in the ending couplet is excellent. It leaves a thought to be considered. Great job! ~Joseph

Carrie Richards

Date: 9/30/2008 7:31:00 PM

I haven't tried a sonnet, but yours is an inspiration to write one. Wonderful job, Laura! ~Carrie :)

P Sheart

Date: 9/30/2008 6:31:00 AM

Laura So beautifully expressed, the vision here sets my imagination on fire! Your talent here is just amazing! May your pen never run out of ink. Enjoyed....Many blessings. Have a wonderful day hun. Love Light Truth Patricia

Chitra Lakhera

Date: 9/30/2008 5:11:00 AM

Hi Laura, this was a beautiful write. Lovely images...each line was so powerful. Thanks for your warm comments. Love Chitra

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 9/30/2008 4:00:00 AM

I'm with Christopher, that walking in the shadow of his charm is an awesome line! You wrote this well. Now, I must try to write a shakespearean sonnet, I love them. Love Kristin

Michael Jordan

Date: 9/29/2008 7:41:00 PM

Hi Laura - I was just thinking about writing some Sonnets - After reading yours I reckon I will soon - Very inspiring poem that you have penned here - God Bless

George Anos

Date: 9/29/2008 7:01:00 PM

The bard coudn't have said it better! Nice one!

Christopher Higgins

Date: 9/29/2008 5:10:00 PM

I love your sonnet Laura! I loved for she walks in the shadow of his charm..powerful line...I also loved, I heard a slight laughter through the trees..I can hear the trees laughing and the sound is very mesmerizing.