Laura Mckenzie Poet Sonnet

Sonnet 2

Your Sentiment no longer a thought
As I walk in the shadow so distraught 
For my heart speaks in sweet sorrow
For this woman I love to-morrow

Will leave me lost and so alone to weep
 I knowingly shall rest my head to sleep 
With my heart on my sleeve if you please
I heard a slight laughter through the trees

For she walks in the shadow of his charm
With a willful promise on his arm  
Now I can’t whisper her unruly name 
Come it nay to me now and shame
 
Never more you ruthless queen 
Should I wake it from this rotten dream? 
 




(This is Laura's Shakespearean  sonnet )

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Sharon Winter October 4, 2008 at 6:55 AM Hey Laura, came upon this searching for a certain someone's comment, and see I never commented myself. So sorry I missed this. So thought provoking and well written. My imagination soars. Is it all a dream? Hmm...intriguing and quite excellent in the Shakespearean style! Love, Shar

Heidie Buys October 3, 2008 at 4:29 PM Well written and very touching, until the end. That made me smile. Very well done. Love Heidie

Joseph Spence Sr October 2, 2008 at 8:31 AM I like your expressions in this poem. The thoughts come across very well. I can also see the images. The rhyming pattern gives the poem a special spark. The rhetorical questioning technique in the ending couplet is excellent. It leaves a thought to be considered. Great job! ~Joseph

Carrie Richards September 30, 2008 at 7:31 PM I haven't tried a sonnet, but yours is an inspiration to write one. Wonderful job, Laura! ~Carrie :)

P Sheart September 30, 2008 at 6:31 AM Laura So beautifully expressed, the vision here sets my imagination on fire! Your talent here is just amazing! May your pen never run out of ink. Enjoyed....Many blessings. Have a wonderful day hun. Love Light Truth Patricia

Chitra Lakhera September 30, 2008 at 5:11 AM Hi Laura, this was a beautiful write. Lovely images...each line was so powerful. Thanks for your warm comments. Love Chitra

Kristin Reynolds September 30, 2008 at 4:00 AM I'm with Christopher, that walking in the shadow of his charm is an awesome line! You wrote this well. Now, I must try to write a shakespearean sonnet, I love them. Love Kristin

Michael Jordan September 29, 2008 at 7:41 PM Hi Laura - I was just thinking about writing some Sonnets - After reading yours I reckon I will soon - Very inspiring poem that you have penned here - God Bless

George Anos September 29, 2008 at 7:01 PM The bard coudn't have said it better! Nice one!

Christopher Higgins September 29, 2008 at 5:10 PM I love your sonnet Laura! I loved for she walks in the shadow of his charm..powerful line...I also loved, I heard a slight laughter through the trees..I can hear the trees laughing and the sound is very mesmerizing.