Debbie Guzzi Poet Sijo

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the first leaf falls  brown through green    an august end  well played  
insect sounds whir  brushes on tin  seed shakers speak  squirrels chatter
crisp metal days  sharp tasting contrasts  to the noon heat  crescendo

the black dragon fly hovers  above the tall jewel weed bed
black waters beneath stagnant  sunlight twinkles like stars on the night
gnats swarm drinking from leaf boats  hidden sparrows call and wait

two eyes flit  left, right, up, down  granite boulders  panther god
silently stalking on root legs  shaded nostrils open scenting 
pray that the big cat sleeps  I leave him chamomile flowers



First Appeared in Poetry Quarterly
Fall 2013 along with Babe & the Boyo's, as well The Bitter End of the Road

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James Marshall Goff July 6, 2014 at 11:22 PM Last line my fave....you good poet!

Carrie Richards July 2, 2014 at 6:22 PM I am still in love with this one! So perfectly written!!! I continue to learn....and so appreciate your encouragement, so once again, must thank you for my placement in your Sijo contest.. I remember when I had no idea what Sijo poetry was ! Not very long ago! Thank you very much!! Debbie Guzzi July 2, 2014 at 9:12 PM we are all a work in progress just remember I am only learning to and attempting to pull you all along with me because it's a joy to do so for me, you honor me Carrie

Justin Bordner July 1, 2014 at 6:15 PM I love when experienced Artist take my mind and spirit into new places and felling of Nature's terrain Debbie. You give superb feeling to all the elements and interactions of this moment; would make a fine painting too. " Gnats swarm drinking from leaf boats...Panther God silently stalking on roots legs" great poetry. J.A.B.

Kelly Deschler June 30, 2014 at 9:38 PM Autumn is my favorite season, and your rich, descriptive words brought me back to those cool, crisp days and nights. A lovely poem, Debbie!.... Thank you so much for the great comments. I really appreciate it!

David Williams June 30, 2014 at 4:30 PM Debbie a very cool write indeed, very well done...David

Nette Onclaud June 29, 2014 at 3:51 PM dramatic and detailed presentation, debbie.. sweet congrats.. huggs

Donna Jones June 29, 2014 at 1:03 PM Simply amazing....congratulations Debbie

Pandita Sietesantos June 29, 2014 at 11:17 AM Hi Debbie, this is such a beautiful write! Huge congratulations to you on your great win! Warmest regards.

Arlene Smith June 29, 2014 at 8:53 AM congrats on a great win with this beautiful sijo, Debbie.. hugs.. Arlene

Mohan Chutani June 29, 2014 at 6:56 AM Debbie, nice imagery on Autumn's Sijo. Congrats for the win. Mohan

Elaine George June 29, 2014 at 6:07 AM You are a sijo master, Deb. I haven't attempted one yet, but you have inspired me. Many congrats on your win with this sijo masterpiece. Elaine

Paul Callus June 29, 2014 at 6:00 AM Great imagery, Debbie! a lovely set of Sijo that is a worthy winner! Congratulations. // paul

Connie Marcum Wong June 29, 2014 at 3:46 AM Wow Deb, this is a stunning winning entry! A BIG congrats on your win!

Andrea Dietrich June 28, 2014 at 10:49 PM oh, gosh, I had seen this one like the day before I finally read them all and judged them. I wasn't even thinking when I read it, that it was even in my contest. hahaha. Anyway, you sure put a lot of detail into this one, and like I said earlier, the last one was my very favorite of this sijo string. Congrats on fourth place in my contest.

Andrea Dietrich June 27, 2014 at 10:31 PM debs, it is so great to see you back today. I noticed your comment to someone and wanted to come see if you had a recent post and sure enough, you do!! This is a really well described scene of Autumn. I think the twist was especially good in the last sijo!!

Sara Kendrick June 27, 2014 at 4:51 PM Thanks for dropping by with congrats..These Sijo are different and have jagged thoughts..Sara Debbie Guzzi June 27, 2014 at 9:42 PM yes Sara I am learning and growing as you are and this was one of my first few attempts BUT the majority of the publishing world isn't familiar with the form and it does fall into the unrhymed category they are looking for

Carrie Richards June 26, 2014 at 5:55 PM Ah yes........the last stanza especially, opens the imagination to a cat among the stones and flowers... out in the wild of some primitive place. All 3 are captivating! Debbie Guzzi June 26, 2014 at 7:38 PM the boulder looks like a panther but it can only be seen in autumn ;)

Elaine George June 25, 2014 at 8:22 PM You have painted a masterpiece with this wonderful Sijo, Deb. bfn elaine

Jan Allison June 25, 2014 at 3:43 PM A stunning poem with incredible imagery. Hugs jan xxx

Anne-Lise Andresen June 25, 2014 at 12:11 PM - A beautiful poem, Debbie ..... but hope time passes slowly through August and autumn arrives :) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)