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Somewhere Seeking

Staircase goes around and around and around; upside-down; somewhere seeking. You can hear the rustle of her hoop skirt — the whirl and twirl, loopity-loop, lonesome swirl. Her face streaked with shadows, whispering, wavering like prison bars. The whorl of her brunette hair, carelessly bouncing, nearly catching the undulating flame. She couldn’t seem to catch her breath, wheezing, afraid. Her feet dangling, somewhere seeking; upside-down. Staircase goes around and around and around. 8/2/2020

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Date: 8/5/2020 11:23:00 AM
Whimsically delightful, reminding me of childhood joy.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/5/2020 4:12:00 PM
Thank you! xx
Date: 8/4/2020 10:32:00 AM
I love the way you wrote this, Kim. Short lines always get my attention and I can see this woman swirling. You captured a moment in time beautifully. May I have the next dance? Hugs, Carolyn
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/5/2020 3:32:00 AM
:) Thank you, Carolyn! I am better with short lines too!
Date: 8/3/2020 5:25:00 AM
Delightful, Kim; made me want to dance and twirl...for no other reason than to dance and twirl.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/3/2020 1:38:00 PM
Why not?!
Date: 8/2/2020 8:21:00 PM
I love the action and tantalizing movement of this poem. Captivating imagery! :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/3/2020 5:03:00 AM
Thank you, Evelyn!
Date: 8/2/2020 6:19:00 PM
wow, I was that girl whirl and twirl, loopity-loop, at one time. love the imagery, Kim.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/3/2020 5:03:00 AM
Thanks for sharing :)
Date: 8/2/2020 3:23:00 PM
Great imagery , a bit spooky for the feint hearted
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/2/2020 6:04:00 PM
Thank you, Reggae!
Date: 8/2/2020 1:39:00 PM
Charming and uplifting poem dearest, Kim. Impressive imagery. Blessings!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/2/2020 6:04:00 PM
Thank you, Demetrios!
Date: 8/2/2020 1:38:00 PM
TO ME!!!!NOW!!!!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/2/2020 6:03:00 PM
Sounds like you like.
Date: 8/2/2020 12:50:00 PM
- Yes, I can hear the rustling of her hoop skirt :) - Excellent written ... almost a little scary, Kim :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/2/2020 6:03:00 PM
Glad you like it!

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