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Sometimes, the Re-Write

**This is about half the length of original, (which I plan to scrap completely) and hopefully an improvement. Deliberate rebellion, Careless actions, Sometimes get us punished. Ignorance and stupid mistakes Provided opportunities for learning and growing. Sometimes life lessons are learned When the plan is clear and intent is clean. What about when the foot gets set On a path to not be taken. Then God uses the path taken Or God sets the path straight. Sometimes the things that hurt the most in life Are there to be the guide. Hearts can grow, Plans can change, But the dance in anger Needs a new song.

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John Loving Iii

Date: 6/29/2023 5:27:00 PM

A poem can be a story of just plain advice. Now I wonder was it a rewrite or just plain advice.

Miranda Hawley
Date: 6/29/2023 5:34:00 PM

Well, if it was advise at all; this was a memo to myself. But yes I did pull down the at least double as long original because I hated it. IF someone else finds this helpful advise then that is FANTASTIC by me.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/1/2022 12:44:00 PM

Lots of truths in this. And shorter is almost always better, I say!!

Miranda Hawley
Date: 11/1/2022 2:25:00 PM

Thank you, and most definitely in this case shorter was better. Glad you found lots of truth in this, as that was the point.