Something Old Something New

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Original poem Grief – posted on 04/21/21 Like April showers her tears suddenly started f a l l i n g then they quickly dried We hugged and we talked and we cried and cried some more then … there was laughter as we reminisced and remembered the happy times we once shared Rewritten for contest as Joy Our tears of laughter were f a l l i n g like a sudden April shower they ran down our faces in r i v u l e t s we had planned his demise so meticulously …. When the ice stiletto pierced his heart All the evidence melted away At the end of the day We had committed the perfect crime! SOMETHING OLD SOMETHING NEW Poetry Contest Sponsored by John Lawless 10/03/21

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/8/2022 9:07:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! Two "Wonderful" writes and picture. Love it. Have a great/blessed day...................

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 10/11/2021 10:32:00 AM

I liked both versions; this was a slick wordplay! Wow! Marvelous Jan.

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 10/7/2021 1:41:00 PM

You are so creative, Jan - both versions of the poem are unique. BW ~ Mala

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/6/2021 11:03:00 AM

WoW! Jan, This is so well written and very creative. I wasn't expecting that ending at all, and it is most definitely a winner, in my opinion. Best wishes in the contest-Alexis

Delice Arleen Skelly

Date: 10/5/2021 11:16:00 PM

Very creative Jan and enjoyable...Delice

Arthur Vaso

Date: 10/4/2021 11:08:00 PM

Well Jan, you know me, I am sure you know the comedian Jimmy Carr, so to take a line from his play book, I have to tell you there are rules, I don't make the rules, but there you have it, they are there, and so there you go, I prefer the first version, is very well written, any English speaking person would say so! ha!!