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Without You ORIGINAL VERSION All I ever do is dream about you I dream of your eyes… And the beauty inside them I dream of your arms… And the way they have held me I dream of your love… And then I start crying Because alone in the night, I realize Without you… am I even me? Without You REWRITE All I ever do is dream about you I dream of your eyes… As they dance with so much life I dream of your arms… How they’ve held me so tightly I dream of your love… Before the tears start to fall Reminding me that without you… I’ll forever be without my heart! SOMETHING OLD SOMETHING NEW Poetry Contest Sponsored by: John lawless September 29, 2021

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Date: 6/8/2022 7:52:00 PM
Both versions are enchanting, although I yet prefer the first one, perhaps because of the concluding line, “Without you… am I even me?” ~ congrats on your win, Gina
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Date: 6/8/2022 10:50:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. A "Wonderful" yet sad write. Have a blessed day writing away....................
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Date: 9/30/2021 1:21:00 AM
Very beautiful and romantic, Gina:) love both the versions:)
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Date: 9/29/2021 4:32:00 PM
What a perfect Valentine Card . You should have saved this one for Valentines Day. Love it. God Bless, JB
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Date: 9/29/2021 10:26:00 AM
Oh so good Regina. Well done :)
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