Premiere Contest WinnerSol Rises

A red sun, pooling like a drop of blood: coagulates at the edge of darkness. And ebony flows like a rising flood: black as pitch, inking a seamless starkness. A gilded moon, like a pitted gold coin, beams in the sky as a beacon of light. And twinkling like flashing fireflies, stars join quasars and pulsars, lighting up the night. Dawn frets like a nervous actor offstage, while preparing to introduce the sun. And as a gossamer breeze comes of age, morning shimmers, like a web, freshly spun. And Sol rises: as a golden balloon, afloat in the air, like a songbird's tune.
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Watt Avatar
March 10, 2023 at 8:33 PM
Emile, your diversity of poetic expression has served you well in this long marathon. I salute your admirable finish and I continue to grow in my appreciation of your abundant talent and profound emotional depth. This poem in particular moved me, with your mastery of simile and imaginative imagery. I especially loved the couplet. Congratulations, my friend ~ John
Ashley Avatar
March 5, 2023 at 9:14 PM
Dear Emile, congratulations for your excellent final placement in Mark's Marathon contest. It's such a pleasure to partake in the artistic beauty of this exceptional poem once again and a great honor to share the podium with you. Your poetic talent shines like the rising Sol himself! Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan
Pinet Avatar
March 6, 2023 at 8:21 AM
Thanks, Susan, your words honor me, I treasure our friendship, my friend, Emile.
Lane Avatar
March 5, 2023 at 6:27 AM
Emile, we've been in Soup together a long time, and I've always admired your poetic skills. Congratulations on your placement. It was fun running the race with you.
Pinet Avatar
March 5, 2023 at 8:11 AM
Thanks, Lin, your talent is unquestionable, I am so pleased to be on your list of friends, have a great day, Emile.
Toney Avatar
March 4, 2023 at 1:19 PM
Emile, congratulations on your Sixth Place, overall win in my 2022 Poetry Marathon! Thank you so much for contributing to the success of the contest. The poems of the 28 qualifiers can be accessed from my current "Finish Line" blog post, along with the top 15 placements and their overall stats. Write on!
Pinet Avatar
March 5, 2023 at 8:09 AM
Thanks, Mark, this was great fun, I appreciate the placement and your comments my friend, Emile.
Chunn Avatar
October 8, 2022 at 5:42 PM
Great imagery, very descriptive.....congrats ..... well done.
Pinet Avatar
October 9, 2022 at 8:17 AM
Thanks, Andy, I appreciate it my friend, Emile.
Kyser Avatar
October 8, 2022 at 2:07 PM
I really like ‘A gilded moon, like a pitted gold coin’ - conjures up an image immediately
Pinet Avatar
October 8, 2022 at 4:19 PM
Thanks, Jeff, I welcome and appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
Ashley Avatar
October 8, 2022 at 7:24 AM
Dear Emile, your poem is a creative gem with exquisite verses like "A red sun pooling like a drop of blood" and "A gilded moon, like a pitted gold coin" and my fav line "And like swarms of flashing fireflies, stars join" such vivid, unique imagery sparks my imagination and lights up the universe for me. Congratulations for your excellent trophy win in Mark's contest. Your poetic artistry shines upon the page like Sol himself. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan
Pinet Avatar
October 8, 2022 at 10:17 AM
Thanks, Susan, your words have made my day, I appreciate your support my friend, Emile
Hankins Avatar
October 7, 2022 at 11:29 AM
Yea!!! I just knew this poem was going to place very high, Emile. Congratulations!!!
Pinet Avatar
October 7, 2022 at 12:45 PM
Thanks, Milt, I appreciate it my friend, Emile.
Toney Avatar
October 7, 2022 at 10:11 AM
So many similes bring a smile to me. :) Very creative, Emile! Congratulations on your first-place finish on Mile 15 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 16 has already started. Also, check out my blog post to view your current standing in the Marathon.
Pinet Avatar
October 7, 2022 at 10:38 AM
Thanks, Mark, I look forward to Mile 16, my friend, Emile.
Seeker Avatar
August 31, 2022 at 6:41 PM
Enjoyed the beautiful pictures painted employing similes in vivid detail. Beautifully penned indeed, Emile
Pinet Avatar
September 1, 2022 at 6:42 AM
Thanks, Unseeking, I appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
La France Avatar
August 16, 2022 at 3:48 PM
Emile, wonderfully penned poem and congratulations on your win in the contest, blessings ~Constance
Pinet Avatar
August 17, 2022 at 6:33 AM
Thanks, Constance, I both welcome and appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
Kauffman Avatar
August 16, 2022 at 10:02 AM
Congratulations Emile! Great imagery with vivid impact. Blessings my friend.
Pinet Avatar
August 16, 2022 at 10:53 AM
Thanks, Sam, I both welcome and appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
Goldsmith Avatar
August 14, 2022 at 2:03 PM
Congratulations on your win. A "Creative" write. Have a great/blessed day writing away...............
Pinet Avatar
August 14, 2022 at 4:24 PM
Thanks, Paula, I both welcome and appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
Miller Avatar
August 14, 2022 at 10:04 AM
"coagulates at the edge of darkness" love it! excellent poem Emille and a well-deserved placement
Pinet Avatar
August 14, 2022 at 12:08 PM
Thanks, Terry, as always, I welcome and appreciate your comments my friend, Emile
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 13, 2022 at 3:45 PM
Deep emotions flare from your exquisite imagery through simile Emile. Congratulations on your wonderful win my friend. Blessings xxoo
Pinet Avatar
August 14, 2022 at 7:56 AM
Thanks, Connie, please let me know when you are ready to assemble your book, I hope you are feeling better my friend, Emile.
Fowler Avatar
August 13, 2022 at 10:48 AM
So many similes - so much beauty! Congratulations on your win Emile! Linda
Pinet Avatar
August 13, 2022 at 11:26 AM
Thanks, Linda, I appreciate your comments, I hope you are enjoying your prize my friend, Emile.
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
August 13, 2022 at 9:35 AM
Boldly stated, Emile my friend, is a natural Fave! Thanks for your participation and my compliments on your high placement in my contest, Aloha~William
Pinet Avatar
August 13, 2022 at 11:24 AM
Thanks, William, I appreciate both the placement and your comments my friend, Emile.
Anaya Avatar
July 30, 2022 at 6:27 PM
Hi Mr. Pinet, your poem makes for a great horror, bloody, floody, pitch black. Then rises with the sun! Good movie..."From Dusk 'Till Dawn" my number one movie for a while...The Chicano rock band Tito & Tarantula ~Anaya
Pinet Avatar
July 30, 2022 at 8:19 PM
Thanks, Anaya, as always, I welcome and appreciate your comments my friend, Emile
Kendrick Avatar
July 30, 2022 at 3:30 PM
Congrats on this very descriptive and expressive winner. Way to go. Sara
Pinet Avatar
July 30, 2022 at 5:26 PM
Thanks, Sara, as always, I welcome and appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
Kauffman Avatar
July 30, 2022 at 9:24 AM
Such powerful similes populate this poem in powerful imagery Emile. There is a dynamic energy in the way you put the images together. I think my favorite is "dawn frets!" Congratulations. Blessings!
Pinet Avatar
July 30, 2022 at 11:33 AM
Thanks, Sam, as always, I welcome and appreciate your comments, your words honor me, my friend, Emile.
Calasibetta Avatar
July 30, 2022 at 8:50 AM
Visions in nature that rise "afloat in the air like a songbird's tune"....stunning! Congratulations on your win in the contest. :)Paulette
Pinet Avatar
July 30, 2022 at 11:32 AM
Thanks, Paulette, as always, I welcome and appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
Mcintosh Avatar
July 28, 2022 at 2:48 PM
Wonderfully creative - inspired, love the imagery. Beautiful. God bless you with a win. Love, Gina
Pinet Avatar
July 28, 2022 at 7:39 PM
Thanks, Regina, as always, I welcome and appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
Tor Avatar
July 27, 2022 at 9:13 PM
Emile your words create vivid pictures of the sky given in to evening with the waking of dawn. Your Poetry is always exceptional and this is no different. A winner for sure my friend. Great effort and thank you for sharing...
Pinet Avatar
July 28, 2022 at 8:20 AM
Thanks, Michael, I welcome and appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
Hankins Avatar
July 27, 2022 at 5:13 PM
Emile, as usual, this is exquisite writing. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. Such beautiful imagery of the sky at dusk with the hope of the dawn. Best wishes for the contest. Your similes are excellent!
Pinet Avatar
July 27, 2022 at 5:51 PM
Thanks, Milt, your comments are both welcomed and appreciated, my friend, Emile.
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