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Cancer stole her husband; life isn’t fair Susie walks to the church where they’d got wed Orange blossoms braided in her fair hair Thoughts of his love will always fill her head Susie walks to the church where they’d got wed Silent tears fall from her pretty blue eyes Thoughts of his love will always fill her head Her broken heart she can never disguise Silent tears fall from her pretty blue eyes She remembers her recent wedding day Her broken heart she can never disguise White gardenias were in her bouquet She remembers her recent wedding day Orange blossoms braided in her fair hair White gardenias were in her bouquet Cancer stole her husband; life isn’t fair 06~02~17 Rhyme battle round 7 Contest Sponsored by Juli-Michelle

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John Michaels

Date: 8/1/2017 12:39:00 PM

Another very sad - but elegantly composed - entry, Jan. Powerful stuff! Congratulations on your win. Regards, John.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/1/2017 4:08:00 PM

Thanks John I really enjoy writing this form and no longer find it as challenging as I once did:-) hugs Jan xx

Janice Canerdy

Date: 6/28/2017 8:44:00 AM

Jan, this so beautiful, moving, and well-written. Congrats on your win! Janice

Jan Allison
Date: 6/28/2017 11:14:00 AM

Thanks Janice:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/27/2017 8:37:00 PM

Back for congrats!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/27/2017 8:38:00 PM

Many thanks Kim I'm delighted to be on the winner's list:-) hugs Jan xx

Juli- Michelle

Date: 6/27/2017 1:37:00 PM

Beautifully penned. Congratulations on your placement in my rhyme battle contest! Love, Juli-Michelle

Jan Allison
Date: 6/27/2017 2:03:00 PM

Many thanks Juli-Michelle I am delighted that you liked my sad poem and its on your winner's list. I love writing the pantoum form:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless

Date: 6/10/2017 7:30:00 AM

excellent Jan, I had to check as the repetition flowed so smoothly......Sadly the truth of this poem is all too real for all to many...

Jan Allison
Date: 6/10/2017 12:39:00 PM

Thanks so much for the lovely comment John:-) i do enjoy this form but it is quite a challenge to get it to flow well and I also like to use the lines verbatim although I do know you can alter them a little I prefer to do it that way:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 6/4/2017 6:18:00 AM

So sad to see beautiful lives crushed by a disease, Jan:( well written, I hope this wins, dear friend:)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/4/2017 6:31:00 AM

Thanks Jo I do love the challenge of this form:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/2/2017 2:56:00 PM

- Oh ... many happy memories ... - A heartbreaking poem, Jan - Cancer is "the snake in today's paradise" ... - Good luck in the contest - Best wishes for a lovely weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/2/2017 3:14:00 PM

Thanks Anne Lise - I think many lives are touched directly or indirectly by this horrid disease:-( hugs Jan xx

Niall Fulham

Date: 6/2/2017 10:59:00 AM

Hi Jan , beautiful emotional write , rate 7 , good luck in the contest :))) hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 6/2/2017 11:12:00 AM

Thanks Niall I really enjoy writing this form its quite a challenge:-) hugs Jan x

Joseph May

Date: 6/2/2017 9:21:00 AM

A heartfelt write Jan...cancer 'steals' so many away..

Jan Allison
Date: 6/2/2017 9:23:00 AM

It sure does Joseph but if it wasn't for my husband's cancer I would never have written my first poem so for me something good came out of it:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 6/1/2017 9:30:00 PM

Such a beautiful poem, Jan, good luck in the contest

Jan Allison
Date: 6/2/2017 6:40:00 AM

Thanks Eve it was one of your contests that introduced me to this challenging form and I love it!:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 6/1/2017 8:54:00 PM

She looks a lot like someone I know, so heartfelt Jan, loved this!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/2/2017 8:29:00 AM

I agree there is an uncanny resemblance!:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/1/2017 8:38:00 PM

A poignant write. Vivid!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/2/2017 8:29:00 AM

Thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 6/1/2017 7:28:00 PM

Such sadness Jan...you did a great job with the form

Jan Allison
Date: 6/1/2017 7:30:00 PM

Thanks Tim I got inspiration from a couple of my older poems - I do LOVE the challenge of the pantoum form and should try and write them more often:-) hugs Jan xx