Heather Ober Poet Haibun

Snowy Love

a modest snowball 
spirals through the air-- 
burst of laughter 
 
As soon as I see his expression, I know I'm in trouble. I usually have terrible aim, so my success is a result of pure luck. I watch his body stiffen in surprise before he wipes the snow from his shoulder and turns toward me. He tries to keep a straight face - to be intimidating - but of course his lips twitch until they stretch into his trademark grin. Shaking his head, his sparkling eyes say, You're in for it now. 

Swallowing another laugh, I turn to flee, but he's faster. Before I know it, his arms have encircled my waist and I'm being tackled to the ground.


a heavy snowfall
softens the frozen ground--  
two breaths mingle

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Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty March 10, 2015 at 12:26 AM snowfall and love--keywords. You are a powerful poet Heather. You are not writing nowadays. You should write. Love

Andrea Dietrich June 3, 2013 at 11:54 PM Heather, no time for comments. I have school stuff to do here all night but wanted to tell you thanks for my place in your contest with the poem about Dale, my brother. Really appreciate it because that poem got nowhere with another judge a long time ago. And by the way, I see congrats are due on THIS great write of yours which I loved the first time I saw it. A belated congrats on this one.

Painted Hunter April 9, 2013 at 10:11 AM Now how did I miss this one? I see you won a contest with it too...course you did...it's absolutely great! Your haibuns are awesome, Heather. We don't get much snow aroung here so we throw rocks at each other instead...ha

Betty Bolden February 20, 2013 at 7:13 AM I just love it

Sara Kendrick February 10, 2013 at 2:47 PM Great romantic winter scene..Congrats on your great win..Sara

Poet Destroyer A February 7, 2013 at 10:48 AM Heather, Congratulations on your winning "mixed up poem." Have yourself a nice day~ :-) xox~PD

Barbara Gorelick February 6, 2013 at 2:52 PM Perfect! Love the last haiku..congrats. BG

Debra Squyres February 6, 2013 at 10:24 AM Ohh wow !! Love this read !! It's full of fun and uplifting. I can see that grin in my mind's eye and hear the laughter. Congrats on your win !!

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl February 6, 2013 at 3:54 AM Big congrats heather luv xx

Debbie Guzzi February 5, 2013 at 6:46 PM This was a very hard contest to judge so many great entry, yours was so charming full of youth and young love it made me wish to be YOU again..Congrad's dear, write for Spring now. Light & Love

Richard Lamoureux February 5, 2013 at 4:37 PM This is really good, congratulations.

Debbie Guzzi February 5, 2013 at 2:37 PM My sweet Heather..what I am telling you will not harm your rank BUT I know you love to grow SO might I suggest bring the WHOLE write into the present tense? It will make it even more immediate and involving for the reader and mesh better with the haiku concept. Light & Love Heather Ober February 5, 2013 at 2:51 PM Done! You're right. I'm just so used to writing in the past tense that present sometimes feels awkward. Your constructive criticism is always welcome! Thank you :)

Andrea Dietrich February 4, 2013 at 10:49 PM Just seeing this one again, I just know Debs loves it and it will score high. It's one of my favorites of the ones I've been seeing and I am seeing some great ones!!

Mehnaz Veetil February 1, 2013 at 7:43 PM a very cute moment captured...good luck in the contest..

Sean L Sanders January 30, 2013 at 9:09 AM Very touching excellent poem written by a very good poet. I saw that you view another poet named Margherita Russo she's only 14 and I know it would mean alot for her to have you read her newest poem if you have the time. Thank you very much.

Isaiah Zerbst January 29, 2013 at 10:00 AM This was a fun poem to read. You have got an awesome touch. Thankfully, I have a little better than average aim and speed. Yesterday though, I got attacked by four girls with snowballs. That ain't fair! Heather Ober January 29, 2013 at 8:44 PM Haha! No, those odds don't sound very fair. Snowball fights must be a lot more fun when you have good aim. Sadly, I'm always the one getting pelted with snow - or being thrown in a snowbank!

James Fraser January 24, 2013 at 1:29 PM Capering to frolics in virgin white snow, to me enforces the bond of love, whilst snowballing hearts sure grow. Oh my! a scene I would so love to be in. Simply romantic, I love it Heather. Good luck in Debbie's contest :)

Husna Mirza January 18, 2013 at 5:37 AM Incredible!!!

Debbie Guzzi January 17, 2013 at 1:11 PM much much better especially the second one put your cut markers after line 2 --XXXOOO Light & Love Heather Ober January 17, 2013 at 1:15 PM There we go :) Thank you so much for your guidance! Haiku sure can be tricky if you don't know all the rules.

Gwendolen Song January 17, 2013 at 6:06 AM Superb!!! Fun and flirty with a dash of excellent vocab!!

Debbie Guzzi January 16, 2013 at 5:24 PM Soup Mail Light & Love

Andrea Dietrich January 16, 2013 at 2:29 PM wow, you did an awesome job with halibun form. I would not have a clue how to do this. I really like how you made it so magically romantic. and the first part catching our interest with a snowball. Wonderful!

Demetrios Trifiatis January 16, 2013 at 6:16 AM Magnificent! The last part: Poetry in its pure snow form!