Snow Girl

with arms outstretched 
   girl twirls as snow falls faintly
                          in a landscape of derelict white
young face upturned
a soft mouth that widens
                        for her tongue catching flakes
                        like disappearing gems
                        small spikes of cold

a secret happiness in plucky spins
a pulse she senses like stitching dreams
                                          wistful musings
lifting her spirits from the discord of home
                                               scooped like jam

she twirls and twirls
        self propelled
        her eyes teary with the melt of snow
        till the gray coat of December slips from her
                                                              in icy silence 
                               like unspoken wishing
her dance
       whiffs of hope that steam the air
       an ease of forgetting 
                           her trusted possession
                           gleaming
                           just beneath winter's
                                                  stare




Poem composed: April 13, 2022
Revised December 10th, 2022
(Inspiring Quote: "...there can be no happiness...no hope no pride...
no present without forgetfulness." Nietzsche)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2022



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Date: 9/28/2024 9:55:00 PM
I remember those days as a child Brian. If it was very cold, your eyelashes could freeze almost to your eyebrows and melt down your cheeks as winter tears after being back inside. Your fourth stanza reminded of this time. What a wonderful, wintery, write Brrrr.
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 9/29/2024 5:38:00 PM
Thanks very much for your stop by and supportive comment. I soon may try to write again though there is a numbness inside from mum's recent troubled death. I am sure that I am grieving. Take care. Best wishes. Brian
Date: 9/14/2022 11:51:00 AM
Brian, my Heartfelt congratulations on winning top placement in my contest. What a great piece of writing. That was something that I enjoyed reading. Blessings
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 9/14/2022 12:26:00 PM
Thank you for recognizing validity in my poem to childhood joy + endurance with the 2nd position placement. To give an NA poem a new light is truly valued by so many of us. With appreciation, Brian
Date: 4/15/2022 10:00:00 AM
So easy for the young ones to get engrossed in the moment and forget everything for just a few minutes or maybe an hour so like them are we at times. I enjoyed reading your work. Thanks for your visit. Sara
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 4/15/2022 10:19:00 AM
Greetings Sara, I hope that you are well. Since my small posting received an NA recently, I appreciate your positive take on my work. I am submitting poems on another site of late, so I returned to your page to catch up on your fine verses. Be well. Brian
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