Notes About The Poem
This actually happened in the early 1900 to my father and his brother..In a small rural town..The tent caught on fire, they scampered under it, ran looking back and ran into a brick wall...

Small Town Fun

Carnival
Two brothers save coins
Look forward
Excitement
Read, reread poster, pictures
Talk about strange sights

Main big tent
Brothers find a seat
Excitement
Mountain high
Someone in main tent screams,"Fire"
Boys run, bam, brick wall

Contest: Share A Shardoma
Sponsor: Nette Onclaud
Written by: Sara Kendrick

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Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Nair Avatar
August 19, 2011 at 12:56 PM
should rank high in the winner's list, jag
Dietrich Avatar
August 16, 2011 at 11:49 PM
ooooh, a brick wall there. THAT's not good. This reminded me of the movie about elephants I saw last spring. It was a really good movie. Do you know the one I am talking about. I hope this does well in the contest, and thanks for my win in your recent contest. I wasn't sure it fit the bill or not but am glad to know you like stew!
Johnson Avatar
August 16, 2011 at 7:33 PM
We don't got no carnival, we have the local show, with all the thrills and rides, and spills, when horses dump ya, know, great excitement felt, with verse svelte, ya know!
Johnson Avatar
August 16, 2011 at 5:22 PM
Reminds me when a friend and I we're watching a quarter sphere movie in a carnival tent in Germany on post. We both had a mug of beer in our hands as we were standing watching. The motorcyclist crashed into a load of sand suddenly at the end and the lights came on to find my friend and I both on the ground. We couldn't believe it ourselves. I don't think either one of us spilled our beers.
Onclaud Avatar
August 16, 2011 at 5:07 PM
thanks for joining , sara.. will have a long look at this come judging time.. so pleased you enjoyed my poem epulaeryu for you... my gratitude for such kindness! . can't open my soup mail.. why??:) huggs, nette
Long Avatar
August 16, 2011 at 4:25 PM
this was a very creative write. I have enjoyed it as usaul good luck in the contest. Check out my website.www.endlesspossibilities2.webs.com cory
Poet Avatar
August 16, 2011 at 3:43 PM
Enjoyed the fun here very much Sara...best wishes in the contest.
Devonshire Avatar
August 16, 2011 at 3:01 PM
Forgot to wish you success in Nette's contest, Sara. Always like to see you in the winners' circle! Love, Carolyn
Devonshire Avatar
August 16, 2011 at 3:00 PM
This is such a fun poem in the first verse and then I worry if the people in the tent escaped harm. Very compelling work, Sara. Thank you for my placement in your contest. I was raised a yankee and we never boiled anything but chicken soup. You were very kind and I'd love to make that parmesan-crusted grouper for you one day. It's awesome and has a great aftertaste too. Love, Carolyn
Dufresne Avatar
August 16, 2011 at 2:01 PM
I can see it happening Sara ..... maybe cause at heart I'm still a little boy. Good luck in the contest.............. and thanks for the honor of a HM in your contest. There were many great entries. I gained 5 pounds just reading them all
Foulk Avatar
August 16, 2011 at 12:49 PM
Sara I really enjoyed this beautiful poem you wrote as always. I will be leaving soup next week, we are doing away with the internet for awhile, hope to be back. i have really enjoyed reading your poetry and thank you for your support.
Richards Avatar
August 16, 2011 at 10:19 AM
You have taken an interesting turn with this bit of excitement! Good luck, Sara....and many many thanks for my placement in the Low Country Boil contest!! Thank you!!
Baity Avatar
August 16, 2011 at 7:18 AM
Well written Sara....such a fun poem....thanks for sharing....smiles....chiquita
Clark Avatar
August 16, 2011 at 7:00 AM
Enjoyed this piece Sara Well done
Zaqout Avatar
August 16, 2011 at 3:52 AM
Very well-written Sara. Fun to read too. Keep it going.
Sweetheart Avatar
August 15, 2011 at 3:51 PM
very entertaining using the new form Sara.. could just feel that bam from the brick wall in your great lines..good luck luv..
Maverick Avatar
August 15, 2011 at 3:29 PM
Enjoyed this piece Sara..
Horne Avatar
August 15, 2011 at 3:14 PM
LOL, lovely fun piece, my friend
Brown Avatar
August 15, 2011 at 2:38 PM
What a way to start off a new week but to read some fresh new poetry. Thank you for sharing your amazing writing with us Sara. Hoping you have a wonderful week full of hope, love, good health, and much inspiration. Love, Carol
Onclaud Avatar
August 15, 2011 at 2:04 AM
thanks for joining, sara.. you can put is under verse as i added this on the page... it's a shadorma, my mistake... was hurrying the post as soup shuts down without notice, awwh! congrats on your high win in the " afterglow" tourney.. have to do a blog but again, blog page cannot be accessed.. enjoy and huggs! :) nette
A   Avatar
August 15, 2011 at 12:57 AM
Sounds like a ride of fun... i wonder how much they saved... thanks for sharing.. and good luck in the contest,.. (p.s.) I got your mail. And yes I will work on it... By tuesday... thank you once again,..p.d.
Sivey Avatar
August 14, 2011 at 11:00 PM
Awesome, simply awesome! You told the tale with exquisite form! Good luck on Nette's contest!
Arowolo Avatar
August 14, 2011 at 10:27 PM
splendid!fine Narrative .Good work,Sara
Ball Avatar
August 14, 2011 at 8:13 PM
Ohh WoW! Sounds like the little boys didn't make it out of the tent. A good entry for the contest. Good luck my friend. God Bless, JB
Ross Jr. Avatar
August 14, 2011 at 8:12 PM
Wonderful write lovely Lady, with love....old Jack
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