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Slush Day

(a 7-5 Trochee) Snow falls down; then comes the rain. Wet flakes fall and drown when that rain, like a refrain once again comes down. Then I step onto the street. There's no snow to crush. Mere shoes don't protect one's feet from cold puddled slush! For the "The Doesn't fit" Poetry Contest of Carol Eastman

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 10/20/2015 1:33:00 PM
Hey Andrea, a hearty congratulations on your win in Carol's contest! This certainly brings chilling memories (soon to be upon us again). A well deserving win. Be Blessed, Neva
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Date: 10/20/2015 10:59:00 AM
Congrats on the win. SKAT
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Date: 10/17/2015 1:03:00 PM
I hate when then happens. Your feet always get wet then cold.
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Date: 10/17/2015 12:22:00 PM
Congratulations on being the 3rd, 1st place winner! Now, serious - your poem is a delightful treat. If I hadn't come by to be sarcastic, I would have missed it. CayCay
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Date: 1/5/2013 12:06:00 AM
i like the image... something you will not see or crush here where I'm from...pd
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Date: 9/13/2012 7:17:00 AM
When does SLUSH become a gem? when AD writes a poem about it.. I rest my case.
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Date: 3/31/2010 8:24:00 PM
Great! I hate that slush!
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Date: 2/23/2010 1:10:00 PM
That's AWESOME!
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Date: 2/22/2010 8:55:00 PM
What an enjoyable write! though I've never experienced snow before, makes me feel like I've stepped right through that slush!! Thanks for sharing and will email you soon, ok? Time for lunch for me ;)
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Date: 2/19/2010 6:13:00 AM
Great ..and I see the syllable count and an awesome write with rhyme.. am going to try it now... luv.. and thankxxx..Linda-Marie..
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Date: 2/18/2010 6:52:00 PM
Hey Andrea ...read "A Changed Life" lol Marty
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Date: 2/18/2010 6:35:00 PM
Love your new form...May have to try it myself...enjoyed...Marty
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Date: 2/18/2010 1:02:00 AM
Andrea thanks for your welcome comments today.Rgds Brian
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Date: 2/17/2010 10:01:00 PM
NICE INTRESTING SURROUNDING..GETTING PRETTY MESSY WHEN THE SNOW STARTS TO DESOLVE....ENJOYED THE READ..IRMA
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Date: 2/17/2010 9:23:00 AM
Keep those feet dry and warm, Andrea. I really like this form and your rhymes are perfect. Enjoyed the image of snowflakes "drowning." Great work! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/17/2010 6:35:00 AM
You have presented to us very interesting poetry today Andrea. It was a pleasure to read. Thank you for sharing it with us here at PoetrySoup. Love, Carol
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Date: 2/16/2010 6:37:00 PM
Great and such unique rhyme... this totally fits the weather here in N.J. and now its raining ice.. when will this stop? luv light poetry ... makes one feel all warm inside.. luv.. Linda-Marie..
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Date: 2/16/2010 2:57:00 PM
An all too common occurence these days. I wish spring would hurry up! Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish
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Date: 2/16/2010 1:37:00 PM
This looks challenging... I may have to try it..... Good job....:JP]
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Date: 2/16/2010 1:12:00 PM
Interesting design in this write. Very descriptive of what I have seen on tv. That cold slush would be very cold if one did not have protective boots. Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara
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