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Slaughterhouse

comets strike terror
bombing  nations rapid fire...
a slaughterhouse roasts

spiked towers pierce  flesh…
drenched with  blood  of raw corpses
like clotheslines  on trees

from skies tainted black
grounds crumble into thin rust…
world in drained sandbag

then, God says enough
angels swoop to  tend remains…
guarding earth anew


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Gail Doyle's Contest
End of the World Armageddon

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Debbie Duncan

July 15, 2012 at 2:28 AM

Awesome,,,,, cool win ;} I need to start reading more from you ,,, blessing as always !

Caryl Muzzey

June 24, 2012 at 8:52 AM

A wonderful write Nette, congratulations on you 2nd place win. I enjoyed the read~ Caryl

Carol Sunshine Brown

June 23, 2012 at 1:12 PM

Congratulations on your well deserved win in Gail's "Armageddon" contest Nette. Love, Carol

Tanya Harrington

June 22, 2012 at 1:30 PM

Congrats on your win! What imagery! Tanya

Kim Merryman

June 22, 2012 at 6:10 AM

Congrats on your win with this very graphic write, Nette! Scary visuals, but then I don't imagine the end of the world will be pretty. Love, Kim

Andrea Dietrich

June 21, 2012 at 8:08 PM

WHAT a visual, Nette. Scary as heck!! Congrats on your win.

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

June 21, 2012 at 7:42 PM

Wow, this is amazing, Nette! Congrats on your win. Love and Blessings, Rhonda

Robert Pettit

June 21, 2012 at 5:55 PM

You could rewrite the Book of Revelation with this type of work. You could make St. John envious.

Gwendolen Song

June 20, 2012 at 4:10 AM

Gripping images of corpses like clotheslines on trees...brilliant! I don't think Gail minds if it's senryu, right...it was more of the syll count that she was concerned with...I love this entry! No revelational writes for me...Daniel and John corn-fuse me with hidden pictures of symbolism...I do love the Bible tho'. When it all does come tumbling down, I truly wonder how close we were to understandin' these foretold events?...Great luck in this contest...altho u won't need any. Love, Gwendolen

Gwendolen Song

June 20, 2012 at 4:12 AM

Hey, I have to tell you a big thanks for the Writing the Bones book...I revisited it b4 writing a recent free verse...that author, although terribly monotonous in her voice, gives great advice! I have her book on tape. :) thanks, Nette...rather, Prof. Nette!

Bl Devnath

June 19, 2012 at 11:54 AM

If World war happen, certainly this picture will be seen. It's sad and full of terror of future. Advance imagination. Loved always, bl

Debbie Duncan

June 17, 2012 at 10:48 AM

LOVE this,,,,have a blessed day ;}

Matthew Anish

June 16, 2012 at 12:51 PM

This is interesting and stimulating work but I believe it is senryu since it has a 5 7 5 word count but is not about about nature. Love & Peace Matthew Anish

Jack Horne

June 16, 2012 at 11:43 AM

Wow, powerful and scary write, Nette. Sure to be a big winner. Thanks very much - loved your contest : )

Ronny Madonsela

June 16, 2012 at 9:42 AM

best of luck for gails contest. Wonderful haiku. Love it. *smiles* Ron

Sara Kendrick

June 15, 2012 at 2:57 PM

Top of the winners' list for sure..Enjoyed reading your interpertation of that event..Good luck in the contest..Thanks for stopping by...Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

June 15, 2012 at 1:52 PM

fantastic images of the battle Nette luv.. good luck in contest.. always amazing your perceptions of futuristic happenings.. how are u my friend? Constance having surgery on Wednesday for kidney problem stone and stent.. she says hi to everyone as I spoke to her on phone yesterday.. luv..

Kash Poet

June 15, 2012 at 1:17 PM

Very nice haiku on the theme of the contest Nette...enjoyed.

Wilma Neels

June 15, 2012 at 11:27 AM

A fabulous write with awesome imagery Nette, wishing you the best for Gail's contest.. Enjoy the weekend ahead..*hugs*

Russell Sivey

June 15, 2012 at 11:11 AM

This is a very special write my friend! I believe you hit the nail on the head with you descriptions! This is a remarkable poem Nette! You've designed this write perfectly, I love it! Great Work!!