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Sinless Eyes - a Collab With James Fraser

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This a poem inspired by the song: WHEN THE CHILDREN'S CRY by White Lion...

SINLESS EYES Nine solid months unto her womb is he, breathing and heartbeat they do as one. Carrying him safely, his husband sees, providing food and money his daily home run 'til the day his son pleas to be out in the sun. (always then his aim is to be a good guy) Though it will take a long long time, his son-- sinless eyes, no smiles, when the children cry... His son grew then unto the world he spree where he is exposed to gases, bombs and gun. Along the streets, he and others learn a key-- that learning curve adhere but some remains undone. Shoulders bruised, torn, from bearing a tonne, some lost souls wander, their life gone awry-- falling short to wonder later how it all began, sinless eyes, no smiles, when the children cry... Can later bestow some better decree, outlasting evil by following a model-- a nun? On returning to God by following thee, from this day, forward, man shall never shun to battles that last even 'til midnight sun. Answers possessed on the strings of whys and never again to ask for a hired gun. Sinless eyes, no smiles, when the children cry... Darkness is beaten, light has won! Wisdom now reached, cocooning the guy, a new day now welcomes another son sinless eyes, no smiles, when the children cry... ©J.A. Fraser and O. E. Guillermo 9:40 pm, December 01, 2014

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Elaine George

Date: 7/17/2015 4:52:00 PM

This is a most difficult form to master, but you and James have done just that. I have only written one in this form that is posted here on the soup, entitled: Where My True Love Lives. Perhaps you might care to read it Sincerely, Elaine

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 7/24/2015 3:40:00 AM

Elaine, thanks much.. :D Im taunting James to some poetry forms.. :D!!! just trying trying.. :D!

Paul Callus

Date: 12/8/2014 12:19:00 PM

Lovely topic and beautiful collaboration. Well done Olive_eloi and James. Good to see that "Darkness is beaten, light has won!" #7 // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 12/8/2014 10:32:00 PM

:) that's a line contributed by James.. :)! thanks much Paul for rating as 7.. :)!

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 12/1/2014 3:48:00 PM

An excellent collaboration! Wow, I remember that song...way back when I was in high school!! Yikes, time flies, Best wishes if for the rock-n-roll concert...a sure winner!!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 12/3/2014 6:45:00 AM

thanks You Rhonda. :)

Dan Helppi

Date: 12/1/2014 11:18:00 AM

Olive, You and James sure picked a good song to write a poem about. Nice job to both of you! And when the children sing...

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 12/3/2014 6:45:00 AM

thanks much Dan.. :) God bless you.. :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/1/2014 9:47:00 AM

Good collaboration..I enjoyed reading your work today..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 12/3/2014 6:08:00 AM

thank you so much Sara.. :) I appreciate this God bless. :)

David Meade

Date: 12/1/2014 8:19:00 AM

Outstanding job you two -- may we always live in the light! All the best.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 12/2/2014 5:49:00 AM

thanks much David.. :) Indeed, we must be.. :)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 12/1/2014 8:01:00 AM

The theme is a touchy one especially when I thought that such scenarios maybe faced by maybe soon to be children.. You inspired me with the song you shared to me side by side that I'm caring and cuddling sometime my sister's baby. The poetry form is challenging, this one of the forms I like.. :) Thank you James for writing this with me.. :)

James Fraser
Date: 12/2/2014 1:01:00 PM

Your muse will never fail you Olive ;-) James :) xx :)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 12/2/2014 4:45:00 AM

as long as my muse doesn't fail me, I shall continue writing.. :) thanks.. :)!

James Fraser
Date: 12/1/2014 1:48:00 PM

The form is challenging Olive, but we cracked it. It was a joy bouncing back and fore the lines to use, to offer, great fun indeed. To write more to other forms with you would delight me, James :)x