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Sincerely Yours

I am your fatalistic optimist Your sweetest selfish tryst I strut before you naked As I hide beneath our bed I am your greatest battle Yes the one who loves you best I am sincerely yours forever Until our lives are spent

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Arturo Michael

Date: 12/24/2017 6:27:00 AM

I want to wish you a dream come true on this Christmas day...and to thank you for being a friend here...It's a blessing to share poetry with you...again...I wish you a dream come true, Maureen

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 12/24/2017 7:06:00 AM

Thank you Arturo, you are the sweetest, truly. Many thanks for your kindness always, you do always have warmth to spread. I see it, I feel it. Merry Christmas to you my friend. Hugs :)

Pratidhwani Biswal

Date: 7/1/2017 10:11:00 PM

"I am sincerely yours forever"... Wow... Beautiful lines...

Patricia Cresswell
Date: 9/3/2017 12:47:00 PM

Thank you for such a gentle poem. Patricia Cresswell

John Herlihy

Date: 5/16/2017 1:00:00 AM

Love this. Wildly inventive. A poem I wish I had written. Brilliant. John

Dominic Amezimi

Date: 5/8/2017 4:35:00 PM

The imagery here is faultless... That one person before whom we are perfect and for whom we'd always stand by. Great poem M... cheers!

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 5/8/2017 5:30:00 PM

Thank You Dominic!

Messoh Vincent

Date: 5/8/2017 1:19:00 AM

Laden with images and full of emotion... the kind of poetry you'd wish to sing on your wedding night. # 7 for me my dear.

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 5/8/2017 6:19:00 AM

Lovely thing to say Messoh, thank you, and for the seven :) xomo

Anne-Marie Coreggia

Date: 5/7/2017 8:16:00 AM

What a charming 'battle' he has to dance to and fight for/with/under; your voice is strong and life-giving:) Amitiés

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 5/8/2017 6:18:00 AM

Thank you Anne-Marie :) xomo

Lin Lane

Date: 5/5/2017 7:31:00 AM

I like this one just the way it is, Maureen. You didn't intend for it to be rhyming poetry so it doesn't need any changes. Hugs and forbearance with others who differ in opinion. ;-)

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 5/5/2017 7:49:00 AM

Thank you Lin, for this and for the warm soup hug. Have a wonderful day! :) xomo!

Chris Green

Date: 5/5/2017 6:17:00 AM

I think the cadence is spot on is this and the message, well you know I like it. :) Really nice Maureen

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 5/5/2017 7:47:00 AM

Thank you Chris... my cadence may be my own, tis true, glad you like it truer too! xomo ;)

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/5/2017 2:49:00 AM

:) I like the sense of confidence and exuberance this portrays. Way to go, Maureen. Hugs

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 5/5/2017 7:42:00 AM

Thank you Eileen! Graced by your visit ;D hugs! mo

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 5/5/2017 7:39:00 AM

Merci mon petit Piroet. I have figured out by now that I dance to a rhythm that is my own ;P XOmo

Darren White

Date: 5/5/2017 12:51:00 AM

Très beaux, ma mo. It's a free verse, but it still has a rhythm to it. Absolutely beautiful, all those emotions running around in your small poem, Simply gorgeous.

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 5/5/2017 7:40:00 AM

Eileen got your reply and my iPad made the weirdest noise doing that!

Annette Gagliardi

Date: 5/4/2017 10:50:00 PM

Great sentiment. If you read this out loud, you can sense the cadence. You have it almost . . . the third line needs a couple more syllables- to match to line one. You could workshop this poem and find some end-line rhymes for 'tryst' (which rhymed with Optimist), battle works, but doesn't rhyme with best . Did you know rhymezone.com offers a way to find some rhyming words. Check it out.

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 5/5/2017 8:06:00 AM

Thank you for your constructive criticism and the resource.