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Silent Sleep

This night, I walk within empty echos Of waist-deep weary fog, sinking to The crumbling floor of futility; Dripping minutes bleed through cracked Rusty hours, as wafting feathers Of broken rest circle dreams Devoid of lullabies - in waning monotone pillow smothered murmurs Cover breath of crushed voices Not even stealing a skeletal whisper Past my withered lips. 8/30/19

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Date: 6/18/2020 12:55:00 AM
You describe this common malady so well, Michelle. I hope it does not plague you often. I loved the line "Dripping minutes bleed through cracked / rusty hours". Congrats on your win ~ John
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 6/18/2020 6:01:00 PM
I used to have periods of insomnia, but not for a long time - hope you do not need to deal with it - Glad to hear from you, always a treat!
Date: 6/17/2020 3:09:00 AM
Artistic muse with lasting impressions Michelle. Congratulations on your win :)
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Date: 6/16/2020 2:04:00 PM
Such haunting imagery Michelle, many congrats :-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 6/16/2020 1:45:00 PM
A beautiful write, Michelle. It would have placed higher if not for the misspelling of "echoes." Congrats on your placement in the contest. Best wishes, Carolyn
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 6/18/2020 6:02:00 PM
Thank you for the placement, Carolyn (and pobody's nerfect, I guess!)
Date: 9/12/2019 11:09:00 AM
Well done Michelle, such interesting word combinations you used eg skeletal whisper, congrats on a great top win!
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Date: 9/12/2019 1:50:00 AM
A nice painting of words. enjoyed
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Date: 9/11/2019 2:59:00 PM
Who writes like this? "Rusty hours, as wafting feathers Of broken rest circle dreams" - YOU DO!
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Date: 9/10/2019 11:44:00 AM
Very vivid. Congratulations!
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Date: 9/7/2019 8:06:00 PM
Congrats on your well-deserved win, this is incredible... Well done, my friend! ;)
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Date: 9/6/2019 6:58:00 AM
Congrats Michelle on your first place win..so much impact in your words.
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Date: 9/6/2019 5:45:00 AM
- Congratulations on your 1st place win, Michelle :) - hugs and happy weekend // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 9/5/2019 5:32:00 PM
8 so love the first line that just pulled me in. Congrats on your fine win. Xoxo
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Date: 9/5/2019 4:38:00 PM
back to say congrats on your first place win :)
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Date: 9/5/2019 3:03:00 PM
Love the haunting feel to this poem, you described silence perfectly... congratulations on first place in the contest..
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 9/6/2019 10:05:00 AM
Thank you for the placement, Silent One-
Date: 9/2/2019 8:12:00 PM
You've sustained such a haunting vision, Michelle. This hits home hard! :) gw
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Date: 8/31/2019 10:04:00 PM
Powerful imagery and feel lay in this write, we've all been there, at some point.
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Date: 8/30/2019 7:16:00 PM
one can feel the silence in this poignant piece...great use of images, have to agree with Kim on my favorite line...gorgeous write! :) hugs
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Date: 8/30/2019 6:47:00 PM
Best line for me: Dripping minutes bleed through cracked Rusty hours! Great dark imagery!
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 8/30/2019 6:54:00 PM
Thanks for your comment, Kim!