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Siesta Key-Haikoum

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A Haikoum Is a series of Haikus sequenced like a Pantoum.

windswept clumps of grass beach scattered with broken shells~ gulls lift on currents sandpipers feed along beach scattered with broken shells~ tiny legs twinkle shorebirds feeding on the tides endless offerings~ tiny legs twinkling each day it changes the tides endless offerings~ waves wash shifting sand changing on each day seabirds gather on sandbars~ waves wash shifting sand ocean reflects sky on sandbars seabirds gather ~ sleeping in warm sun ocean reflects sky people under umbrellas~ sleeping in warm sun windswept clumps of grass people under umbrellas~ gulls lift on currents

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Paul Callus

Date: 1/23/2023 5:32:00 AM

Hi Suzanne. I just read your note on my post; still have to check out Soupmail, but from this example I have already gathered an idea of what's required in this interesting form. You have done a great job; hope I can emulate you :) Enjoy the week ahead // paul

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 1/23/2023 10:16:00 AM

Thanks for checking it out,Paul Have a good weekend SuZ

Valsa George

Date: 1/4/2023 8:10:00 AM

Beach scenes tumble down one on another ! Sand pipers and gulls feeding on the tides' endless offerings ! An eye catching and lively image. Love this string of haikus beaded in the form of a pantoum. Well done Suzanne.

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 1/4/2023 8:24:00 AM

Thanks Valsa: It was interesting to play with this form. I appreciate your visit and thoughtful comment. SuZ

Vijay Pandit

Date: 12/30/2022 5:49:00 AM

Cleverly done with splendid imagery, SuZ. Wishing you a Happy New Year.

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 12/30/2022 10:10:00 AM

So good to have you visit, Vijay: May your New Year be full of love and good things. SuZ

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 12/29/2022 8:01:00 AM

A necklace of precious Haiku of superb beauty, my dearest, Suzanne. Excellently done. Blessings.

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 12/30/2022 10:09:00 AM

So nice to see your kind face here, Demetrios.Many thanks for reading and commenting, dear friend.SuZ

Timothy Ray

Date: 12/28/2022 4:49:00 PM

a beautiful wandering along the shore....not one for any structure more so one who consumes the soul....we share this numen (the idea of magical power residing in an object)....my poem about winter beaches...as with meadows, forests, gardens....created so we could meander in beauty....where our neuropathways birth light

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 12/29/2022 3:43:00 AM

Yes Timray……enchantment that lifts us out of everyday mundane stuff. Thanks for another new word. Thankful we can meander in beauty to heal our souls and renew our spirits. SuZ

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/28/2022 2:39:00 PM

wow, I never heard of doing them like a pantoum before. This was so clever and fun to read, Suzanne.

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 12/28/2022 3:10:00 PM

I entered it into Brian’s Hiku Premium Contest but he hates Pantoum. Glad you liked it. SuZ

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/27/2022 7:49:00 AM

A wonderful write/picture. I love the beach. Have a blessed day writing away...................

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 12/27/2022 9:35:00 AM

Happy you enjoyed, Paula: Cold weather kept us home this week but today is gorgeous and sunny. SuZ

Joe Dimino

Date: 12/26/2022 7:21:00 PM

Enchanting write. I agree with Charles, interesting form. Love the sense of the shore, birds feeding, feeling the sand shifting beneath my feet. Wanted the poem to go on. Blessings my friend!

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 12/27/2022 7:19:00 AM

So nice of you to visit me, Joe: Glad you enjoyed my attempt at this new form. Have a Happy New Year. Blessings, SuZ

Charles Messina

Date: 12/25/2022 9:09:00 AM

Wow! This is an interesting form...you did it very well, Suz. Thank you so much for your lovely comments on my poem. Wishing you and your family a wonderful and joyous Christmas...and a healthy and Happy New Year :) Hugs Charlie

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 12/25/2022 5:44:00 PM

So happy you liked this form, Charlie: It would be fun to see your take on it. I found that describing the beach suited the form because the beach scenery has the same action going on all the time but with different variations. I think it might be a good form to use for changing seasons, too. Hope you had a very happy Christmas Day. SuZ

Speaks Volumes

Date: 12/25/2022 4:13:00 AM

Extremely cleverly written Suzanne. You made the picture so clear, I could hear the gulls squawking, and the gurgle of the frothy waves reaching out to cover the shore, and feel the sand being blown around my feet. Excellent writing, It goes on my favourite list without hesitation

Suzanne Delaney
Date: 12/25/2022 6:26:00 AM

So lovely to see you, Wendy: As you can see I’ve gone South for the winter but was determined to try this new form I discovered in a book called, “Wingbeats11.”Poetry exercises. I want to wish you a wonderful Christmas and all the best for 2023, love, SuZ