She

The way she twists her hair
and places back that wayward 
wisp behind her ear, the way she 
checks her face in every mirror.

How she shimmers to the ladies' 
room to re-apply her lipstick, 
or she lingers irresistibly
as you politely hold the door ajar.

The way she glides so smoothly;
you're speechless as she 
commandeers the room; 'neath her spell 
you're both the best man and the fool.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Bulger Avatar
January 18, 2009 at 2:37 PM
It is the heart that keeps us young forever as we love.... very nicely written.
Hickman Avatar
January 7, 2009 at 8:29 PM
such wonderful descriptive lines that flow into the next so easy and adoringly,,great,,,and thank you fro reading and commenting upon my poetry,,,blessings..cecil
Gass Avatar
January 6, 2009 at 9:19 PM
This is wonderful, Keith. Great imagery and I absolutely love the last line! Great write! Love, Robin
Köhp Avatar
January 6, 2009 at 6:28 PM
You did a really great thing with this poem. She should sound ridiculously vain "checks her face in every mirror". But, instead she sounds like an angel. I adore the double meaning "the best man". The best man, because you got the girl? Or the best man at her wedding? I'm going to be pondering that one! Well done! Nathaniel
Guzzi Avatar
January 6, 2009 at 3:11 PM
Keith (grin) you know I want the wisp with the wayward aye? Remember I'm a form novice but when I checked quatrain (to learn from you) it said you need a repeated line? changing where it is in each stanze..moving down? Ready for enlightenment!!! Deb Guzzi Here Light & Love
Moreno Avatar
January 6, 2009 at 2:46 PM
Great quatrain Keith and thanks for supporting my work. I enjoy reading your comments...Raul
Winter Avatar
January 6, 2009 at 12:08 PM
My goodness, a woman's beauty has so overwhelmed you. Good for her! Vivid imagery. Loving this write! Love, Shar
Yamin Avatar
January 6, 2009 at 10:26 AM
Kieth, I like the poem -well written and saucy. The last line is an anticlimax. Thanks also for your learned comments on my poem A Paper Boat. -Mohammad
Riley Avatar
January 6, 2009 at 8:04 AM
Sounds like you missed the boat on the bride, deep and sad. To have such strong feeling for someone you can never have. Beautiful, keep writing. Judy Riley
Ginn Avatar
January 6, 2009 at 2:35 AM
OUCH! Okay that stings, nicely written though. Laurie
Golden Avatar
January 5, 2009 at 10:24 PM
Who wouldn't want to be the subject of this lovely morsel? Delicious!
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