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Serendipity

I sweep the day's dust from my yard, mind weary with worry.... Husband out of work again, no money to buy dinner for kids, A flash of gold, a gentle sparkle, my wedding ring found. **June 6, 2010 --inspired when I was sweeping the floor earlier...;)--P.S. the only thing based on my real life in this Sijo was the dust ;)

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Juan Paolo Galua

Date: 6/21/2010 2:45:00 AM

wow,...what a lovely humorous Sijo....I can't help to laugh...amazing! ^_^ v

Adell Foster

Date: 6/7/2010 9:50:00 PM

Nikko, your well chosen words have indeed brought the sijo to life for allto view, excellent imagery, form and tone. I look forward too reading more of your fine works in the near future. I thank you for sharing the write and for your lovely comments on my works. Many Blessings, Always, Adell

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/7/2010 5:22:00 PM

Glad that all is going well and you are not down to selling wedding rings...Keep the creative insights going ...Sara

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/6/2010 6:28:00 PM

so I was right. yes, she is going to use that ring for money!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/6/2010 3:04:00 PM

wOw!!!! I will be on the down low. jjust lie you. I will go and come .I will answer all comments thru my e-mail..Still enjoyed this one. I still have it in my mind where you said you will have no life after going on the down low,..not cool, but funny,..later, p.d.

Carrie Richards

Date: 6/6/2010 12:35:00 PM

Excellent!! you have told a whole story in three very brief lines of poetry! Great work!

Joyce Johnson

Date: 6/6/2010 11:33:00 AM

You're certainly getting this form down in spades. This is a great one. Thank you for your comments. Lvoe, Joyce

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/6/2010 10:14:00 AM

nikko, THIS is the one. I just love the resolution to this one. will she use the ring or wont' she?? So awesome, and your final note there was really cute! (yeah, blame it on those dang blue jays they interrupt EVERYthing. hahaha) LUv, andrea

Sharon Tideswell

Date: 6/6/2010 9:59:00 AM

Hi Nikko, I see you're liking the Sijo form right now. You're certainly giving us some great examples :) Loved the title of this one & how lovely to find that sparkle in the dust (too bad you didn't really find a sparkler, maybe next time). There's a boarding kennels near to my home called Serendipity, if I had a dog I'd choose that one just because of its name :)

Daver Austin

Date: 6/6/2010 8:58:00 AM

This could be the case fror many these days.I like your sentiment and your choice of forms. Love, daver

Gert W. Knop

Date: 6/6/2010 6:01:00 AM

Love this Sijo, nicely written, Nikko! Is it for Rick's contest? Where I lived before in Papua New Guinea and Vanuatu it was just the same "no autumn or winter", but i loved the changing nautur as well there. Thank you for your comments and have a great Sunday...Gert

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/6/2010 5:39:00 AM

this one is amazing, when we least expect something. That is when it hit us. Nice little true Sijo. I bet fiding your wedding ring ment a big deal to you. After the dent & worries about your husband & kids. Enjoyed Nikko, have a nice one,.p.d.

Jayne Eggins

Date: 6/6/2010 5:35:00 AM

Lovely lovely poem ... Serendipity is a good muse eh ? smile thanks for the lovely comment on my poem love Jayne

Wilma Neels

Date: 6/6/2010 5:12:00 AM

Your muse is back :) WN