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Sentiments On Aging

Worn limbs creak like tomb's ancient doors
Jumping from youth to old age with lightning's shock
Kind mirrors with mounting dust blur lines
Leaping into my shopping cart are restorative skin creams
Before gremlins make off with them, memories visit briefly
…What was it I was trying to say?




February 18, 2019
For Nina's "Reflect That Emotion" Contest

Copyright © Carolyn Devonshire | Year Posted 2019

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James Marshall Goff Date: 3/2/2019 1:44:00 AM Pensive, can feel it, nice, Carolyn... Login to Reply

Gershon Wolf Date: 2/27/2019 4:07:00 PM Oh, those last two lines. They sting, as they ring and resonate. Congrats on a well-deserved win in Nina's contest. Best wishes, Gershon Login to Reply

Vladislav Raven Date: 2/26/2019 8:06:00 AM Hi Carolyn, dropping bwith congratulations on your well-deserved win in the contest with this excellent piece. Have a wonderful Tuesday. Hugs....Mike. XX Login to Reply

Line Gauthier Date: 2/25/2019 6:38:00 PM Back with well deserved congrats, Carolyn. Login to Reply

Andrew Fairchild Date: 2/24/2019 1:19:00 AM Congratulations on your Win! This is just a great piece! As I said before, you make beauty and grace of expression seem easy! Login to Reply

Jack Webster Date: 2/23/2019 9:14:00 PM Congrats, Carolyn. Login to Reply

Susan Ashley Date: 2/23/2019 8:12:00 PM You reflect the emotions of aging with poignant beauty, Carolyn. Your rich imagery captivates me with its content and its artistry. Congratulations on your wonderful win, my lovely friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Login to Reply

Laura Leiser Date: 2/23/2019 10:56:00 AM What a clever and descriptive poem, with humor mixed in so brilliantly, Carolyn! Congrats on your win! :) Login to Reply

Vladislav Raven Date: 2/23/2019 10:18:00 AM Hi Carolyn, aging doesn't come easily. I am sure that you shall age gracefully, myself, I am already a dying duck. We are as old as we feel, therefore, I shall always be young. Love the content. I am rather remiss. Congratulations on your win in the contest. A wonderful write. have a wonderful Saturday. Hugs....Mike. XX Login to Reply

P.S. Awtry Date: 2/23/2019 10:05:00 AM Those gremlins! “Lightning shock”—yes! And omg I love that last line! Congratulations! Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 2/23/2019 9:44:00 AM Oh, and I like the title better now too!! Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 2/23/2019 9:43:00 AM CArolyn, I just came here and saw that I made the winner list and i remembered how much I loved your poem and I saw you made the list. So Yayyyy, congratuations to YOU on a well deserved win! Login to Reply

Alexis Y. Date: 2/23/2019 9:20:00 AM Hi Carolyn, This a good poem on "ageing". It's very emotional and relatable because its something we all face. Congratulations on your 5th place win. It was well deserved:-) Alexis Login to Reply

Janice Canerdy Date: 2/23/2019 9:18:00 AM CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win, Carolyn. Love that last line! Janice Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 2/21/2019 8:09:00 PM wow, I LOVe this (probably because I relate it so well) My only suggestion is that you change the title. I think you did such a good job describing this, you could have used a symbolic title that did not tell the emotion . Awesome writing, sweetie. Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 2/21/2019 6:28:00 AM Reads like a good contender for the contest. Age has a way of taking its toll. It is worse on some than others. Thanks for dropping by with congrats on my placement in your contest and thanks for the honor of being there. Sara Login to Reply

Constance La France Date: 2/19/2019 3:53:00 PM Carolyn, I love this poem so much, deep and dark and a glimpse of life's reality, well done, a FAV for me ~ Login to Reply

Andrew Fairchild Date: 2/18/2019 8:23:00 PM Your use of the objects in the environment of the poem to convey the feeling is absolutely ingenious -- you make beauty and grace of expression seem easy! I love your poetry! Login to Reply

Nette Onclaud Date: 2/18/2019 4:23:00 PM if you can write beautiful poetry like this, then you are forever young and ageless to me, carolyn... incredible artwords!...huggs Login to Reply

Tom Cunningham Date: 2/18/2019 12:35:00 PM Sadly it creeps up on us all Carolyn, but on the positive side it brings experience and wisdom. Tom. Login to Reply Carolyn Devonshire Date: 2/18/2019 4:22:00 PM That is so true, Tom. If I knew in youth what I know now, a lot of the choices made would have been different. Thanks for reading!

Barbara Gorelick Date: 2/18/2019 10:38:00 AM Now, who are you and what is this poem thingy? HAHA.. Love it! BG Login to Reply Carolyn Devonshire Date: 2/18/2019 4:22:00 PM Ah, I'm perhaps the last surviving LNC. Thanks for reading, Barbara!

Vijay Pandit Date: 2/18/2019 10:33:00 AM The ending line says it all. Age has its consequences for us all..well depicted, Carolyn. Login to Reply

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 2/18/2019 9:43:00 AM Great penning! I can feel it! Good luck in the contest, xomo Login to Reply

Line Gauthier Date: 2/18/2019 8:53:00 AM I know the feeling. Well penned, Carolyn. Love the way you end with a twist. Login to Reply