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Sentiments On Aging

Worn limbs creak like tomb's ancient doors
Jumping from youth to old age with lightning's shock
Kind mirrors with mounting dust blur lines
Leaping into my shopping cart are restorative skin creams
Before gremlins make off with them, memories visit briefly
…What was it I was trying to say?




February 18, 2019
For Nina's "Reflect That Emotion" Contest

ageemotionsfree verse

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James Marshall Goff

Date: 3/2/2019 1:44:00 AM

Pensive, can feel it, nice, Carolyn...

Gershon Wolf

Date: 2/27/2019 4:07:00 PM

Oh, those last two lines. They sting, as they ring and resonate. Congrats on a well-deserved win in Nina's contest. Best wishes, Gershon

Vladislav Raven

Date: 2/26/2019 8:06:00 AM

Hi Carolyn, dropping bwith congratulations on your well-deserved win in the contest with this excellent piece. Have a wonderful Tuesday. Hugs....Mike. XX

Line Gauthier

Date: 2/25/2019 6:38:00 PM

Back with well deserved congrats, Carolyn.

Andrew Fairchild

Date: 2/24/2019 1:19:00 AM

Congratulations on your Win! This is just a great piece! As I said before, you make beauty and grace of expression seem easy!

Jack Webster

Date: 2/23/2019 9:14:00 PM

Congrats, Carolyn.

Susan Ashley

Date: 2/23/2019 8:12:00 PM

You reflect the emotions of aging with poignant beauty, Carolyn. Your rich imagery captivates me with its content and its artistry. Congratulations on your wonderful win, my lovely friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Laura Leiser

Date: 2/23/2019 10:56:00 AM

What a clever and descriptive poem, with humor mixed in so brilliantly, Carolyn! Congrats on your win! :)

Vladislav Raven

Date: 2/23/2019 10:18:00 AM

Hi Carolyn, aging doesn't come easily. I am sure that you shall age gracefully, myself, I am already a dying duck. We are as old as we feel, therefore, I shall always be young. Love the content. I am rather remiss. Congratulations on your win in the contest. A wonderful write. have a wonderful Saturday. Hugs....Mike. XX

P.S. Awtry

Date: 2/23/2019 10:05:00 AM

Those gremlins! “Lightning shock”—yes! And omg I love that last line! Congratulations!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/23/2019 9:44:00 AM

Oh, and I like the title better now too!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/23/2019 9:43:00 AM

CArolyn, I just came here and saw that I made the winner list and i remembered how much I loved your poem and I saw you made the list. So Yayyyy, congratuations to YOU on a well deserved win!

Alexis Y.

Date: 2/23/2019 9:20:00 AM

Hi Carolyn, This a good poem on "ageing". It's very emotional and relatable because its something we all face. Congratulations on your 5th place win. It was well deserved:-) Alexis

Janice Canerdy

Date: 2/23/2019 9:18:00 AM

CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win, Carolyn. Love that last line! Janice

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/21/2019 8:09:00 PM

wow, I LOVe this (probably because I relate it so well) My only suggestion is that you change the title. I think you did such a good job describing this, you could have used a symbolic title that did not tell the emotion . Awesome writing, sweetie.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/21/2019 6:28:00 AM

Reads like a good contender for the contest. Age has a way of taking its toll. It is worse on some than others. Thanks for dropping by with congrats on my placement in your contest and thanks for the honor of being there. Sara

Constance La France

Date: 2/19/2019 3:53:00 PM

Carolyn, I love this poem so much, deep and dark and a glimpse of life's reality, well done, a FAV for me ~

Andrew Fairchild

Date: 2/18/2019 8:23:00 PM

Your use of the objects in the environment of the poem to convey the feeling is absolutely ingenious -- you make beauty and grace of expression seem easy! I love your poetry!