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Self Inflicted

Self-Inflicted Contest Sponsor: Anthony Slausen Because addiction I fell into the red fire so many consequences my self-infliction darkness chose by my desire I lost all my defenses Form: Sedoka Six lines consisting of 5-7-7-5-7-7 Syllables (Rhymed) Checked syllable count:www.wordcalc.com Due to research I have learned that the word "fire" can by one or two syllables. In this poem I wrote the word "fire" as one syllable. Date Written: January 24, 2016

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Archana Garg

Date: 1/26/2016 8:53:00 AM

Nicely done ...... Good luck ......

Lu Loo
Date: 1/26/2016 9:35:00 AM

Thank you Archana, be blessed *smiles* -luloo

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/25/2016 4:02:00 PM

by the way, I see you wrote "fire" is one syllable here. THAT is how it always is for me, Laura. Most dictionaries put it at one. I wanted to add, I love the last line of this one.

Lu Loo
Date: 1/25/2016 4:23:00 PM

Thank you Andrea :) You are always so sweet -luloo

Constance La France

Date: 1/25/2016 8:42:00 AM

Laura, such a deep and painful experience you have shared, well done and best of luck in the contest ~

Lu Loo
Date: 1/25/2016 9:11:00 AM

Thank you Broken Wings for your kind words..Be blesssed :) *smiles* -luloo

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/24/2016 4:22:00 PM

Nicely done, Laura Loo. Good luck in the contest.

Lu Loo
Date: 1/24/2016 4:26:00 PM

Thank you Andrea very much :) *Smiles* -luloo

White Sage

Date: 1/24/2016 2:44:00 PM

excellent write, excellent form...a job well done Laura, heartfelt...best of luck in the contest

Lu Loo
Date: 1/24/2016 4:25:00 PM

Thankyou WS:) *smiles*

Wilfred Aniagyei

Date: 1/24/2016 2:28:00 PM

Lovely piece.... I like that you chose addiction for a self infliction. Beautiful! Laura

Lu Loo
Date: 1/24/2016 4:24:00 PM

Thank you Wilfred :) *smiles* -luloo

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/24/2016 2:21:00 PM

- Deep and touching - A great poem, Laura - Good luck in the contest ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Lu Loo
Date: 1/24/2016 4:23:00 PM

Thankyou Anne-Lise :) *smiles*

Jan Allison

Date: 1/24/2016 1:16:00 PM

Poem written from the heart LuLoo .. but now you have battled your demons the dark times are gone and can you see the light. I count 'fire' as one syllable - use 'howmanysyllables.com' :-) hugs jan xx good luck in the contest:-)

Lu Loo
Date: 1/24/2016 1:19:00 PM

Thanks lovely lady Janny :) I'm glad I am not alone with using fire as one syllable. I didn't want to get disqualified because of it..Have a good day! -luloo *smiles*