Eileen Manassian Poet Rhyme

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Sedated Sin

I feel her wake, and I quake
Afraid...I'll make the same mistake
For goodness sake
My hands....
how they shake

I hear her low moan, and I groan
She'll rise from where she's been thrown
I'm not alone...never alone
I can't atone
for deeds she has sown

She is so real...her power...I feel
As I reel
she makes me kneel
No, mercy...she won't cut a deal
My breath of life...she'll  steal

Sedated....
I try to keep her sedated
Her desires bated
Her wanton whims weighted
The prey she wants....crated
I need her to be....
dated

But...it is always the same fight in the night
Her insatiable delight
burns through her superwoman might
It’s not right...it's not right!!
I'm lost in this plight

And so....I give in
I let her win
She’s my weakness, my sin
She unbares my skin
Laughs above the din
My right and wrong in a spin
I smile...
I smile...HER sultry grin

Tonight, she would not be sedated
And her prey, she neatly bated
Her desire, swiftly sated
His heart, with her blood nails, grated
It was fated
Fated
So....complicated

She has the control
Of my body and soul…
Destruction, her goal
Buried...in this black hole
She keeps me....
Sedated

Eileen Manassian Ghali

This is a poem about a woman struggling to keep her inner longings at bay....It uses personification....the SHE....is a symbol of the sin that struggles in the woman for mastery. It is not a poem about a man and woman though when SIN has its way....men are the casualty.

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CayCay Godwin December 13, 2015 at 6:34 PM Very dramatic and dynamic - I enjoyed the read very much ... CayCay

Laura Breidenthal September 25, 2015 at 12:12 AM This is absolute brilliance, Eileen. Another favorite!! Always, Laura

Paul Callus September 21, 2015 at 11:44 AM Needs and temptation are not easy to deal with. Complicated situations can arise and keeping control of desires needs a lot of self control! ~ hugs // paul Eileen Manassian September 21, 2015 at 12:44 PM If that were not the case, Paul, we would be in a perfect world that is sinless. That is the sting....the forbidden is sweeter, until one realizes what is lost in the bargain. Thank you for your visit, dear. Hugs

CayCay Godwin September 21, 2015 at 11:03 AM It was clear to me what your poem was about and that makes it a success, especially when combined with the crisp writing and wonderful rhyme scheme. I truly enjoyed it ... CayCay Eileen Manassian September 21, 2015 at 12:43 PM Thank you for the visit, CayCay. I appreciate your appraisal of my work. :)

Richard Lamoureux September 20, 2015 at 3:41 AM The explanation is not necessary, the poem eloquently imparts your message upon the readers mind. When it comes to passionate desires I believe men and women both struggle with these emotions. Crossing the line from fantasy to reality has resulted in many casualties. Exceptional writing Eileen. Eileen Manassian September 20, 2015 at 2:46 PM Thanks for visiting my Sedated Sin, Richard. I'm glad you understood it right off the bat. I didn't know if I was being clear enough. I appreciate the visit and comment. Yes, sin is common to man and woman.

Emile Pinet September 19, 2015 at 10:06 AM Love has been sidestepped in order to satisfy a hurting heart and your acknowledgment and acceptance of this replaces the sheen in the eyes of love and reaches into the heart revealing and then releasing the pain hidden there. Emile. Eileen Manassian September 19, 2015 at 12:05 PM Hello, Emile. Thank you for taking the time to read and post an insightful comment. I appreciate it. I haven't been up to writing much of late. I hope things change. Hugs...

David Meade September 18, 2015 at 7:04 PM A deep and powerful poem -- the tension crackled with each line . . . ready to spring! How these base emotions drive desire . . . enjoyed this immensely LO. 7 Eileen Manassian September 19, 2015 at 12:06 PM Thank you, David. I'm glad you came around for a visit. Glad this piece resonated with you. LO thanks you. Hugs

Justin Bordner September 18, 2015 at 6:44 PM You are possessed by a very powerful and ancient Passion, a spirit that inherits the heart of women with a very special creative gift which applies to every facet of life.You will be it's lovely instrument of love conquest, will you be her victim or her accomplice Beloved Poetess...The lust and predation is thickly alive in this fine poem, along with a very sensuous apprehensiveness Eileen...J.A.B. Eileen Manassian September 19, 2015 at 12:07 PM Thank you, Eagle. I'm glad you understood my piece so well. You have a keen eye....in real life and in poetry. Sedating is a means of fighting for victory...It comes at a price. Hugs

Charmaine Chircop September 18, 2015 at 4:11 PM I got your concept..and I do believe thle sinful pleasure struggles to win in every.woman including myself. Excellent post. Eileen Manassian September 19, 2015 at 12:08 PM Yes, my dear....Sinful pleasures are at work always...It is up to a person to heed the call or not. Thank you for your lovely visit. It is always a pleasure, Charmaine. hugs

Njeri Hunjeri September 18, 2015 at 2:35 PM Catchy and tempting, making the reader beg for more...so well penned. I enjoyed! Eileen Manassian September 19, 2015 at 12:09 PM I'm glad you liked my Sedated Sin poem, Njeri. Thanks for stopping by.....Hugs

Richard D Seal September 17, 2015 at 6:12 PM Oh, and welcome back Eileen Manassian September 17, 2015 at 11:14 PM Thank you, Mr Seal.

Richard D Seal September 17, 2015 at 6:11 PM So good you had to name it twice eh my little Desert Orchid. I've no idea why but this guy seems almost reluctant lol. Doesn't realise how lucky he is. Another superwoman write from you. Take care, Richard Richard D Seal September 20, 2015 at 7:22 PM Oh I read it perfectly correctly my little Desert Orchid. The reluctance is entirely with the man, as it is he that is stemming the flow of the womans fantasy. Hers is just frustration that her inner longings are kept at bay. Eileen Manassian September 17, 2015 at 11:15 PM My dear Mr Seal....Please read the footnote I have added at the end of the poem, for you have not read it right. Thanks for the visit and the lovely compliment, though. I'm ever grateful...

Eve Roper September 17, 2015 at 4:35 PM Wow!!!! That is the way it's suppose to be a woman to take control with her magical allurement. Well the men can too once in awhile. Hugs Eve Eileen Manassian September 17, 2015 at 11:17 PM Thanks for your visit, Eve. Always nice to have you here on my page, dear. Hugs