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I feel her wake, and I quake Afraid...I'll make the same mistake For goodness sake My hands.... how they shake I hear her low moan, and I groan She'll rise from where she's been thrown I'm not alone...never alone I can't atone for deeds she has sown She is so real...her power...I feel As I reel she makes me kneel No, mercy...she won't cut a deal My breath of life...she'll steal Sedated.... I try to keep her sedated Her desires bated Her wanton whims weighted The prey she wants....crated I need her to be.... dated But...it is always the same fight in the night Her insatiable delight burns through her superwoman might It’s not right...it's not right!! I'm lost in this plight And so....I give in I let her win She’s my weakness, my sin She unbares my skin Laughs above the din My right and wrong in a spin I smile... I smile...HER sultry grin Tonight, she would not be sedated And her prey, she neatly bated Her desire, swiftly sated His heart, with her blood nails, grated It was fated Fated So....complicated She has the control Of my body and soul… Destruction, her goal Buried...in this black hole She keeps me.... Sedated Eileen Manassian Ghali This is a poem about a woman struggling to keep her inner longings at bay....It uses personification....the SHE....is a symbol of the sin that struggles in the woman for mastery. It is not a poem about a man and woman though when SIN has its way....men are the casualty.

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Date: 12/13/2015 6:34:00 PM
Very dramatic and dynamic - I enjoyed the read very much ... CayCay
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Date: 9/25/2015 12:12:00 AM
This is absolute brilliance, Eileen. Another favorite!! Always, Laura
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Date: 9/21/2015 11:44:00 AM
Needs and temptation are not easy to deal with. Complicated situations can arise and keeping control of desires needs a lot of self control! ~ hugs // paul
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/21/2015 12:44:00 PM
If that were not the case, Paul, we would be in a perfect world that is sinless. That is the sting....the forbidden is sweeter, until one realizes what is lost in the bargain. Thank you for your visit, dear. Hugs
Date: 9/21/2015 11:03:00 AM
It was clear to me what your poem was about and that makes it a success, especially when combined with the crisp writing and wonderful rhyme scheme. I truly enjoyed it ... CayCay
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/21/2015 12:43:00 PM
Thank you for the visit, CayCay. I appreciate your appraisal of my work. :)
Date: 9/20/2015 3:41:00 AM
The explanation is not necessary, the poem eloquently imparts your message upon the readers mind. When it comes to passionate desires I believe men and women both struggle with these emotions. Crossing the line from fantasy to reality has resulted in many casualties. Exceptional writing Eileen.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/20/2015 2:46:00 PM
Thanks for visiting my Sedated Sin, Richard. I'm glad you understood it right off the bat. I didn't know if I was being clear enough. I appreciate the visit and comment. Yes, sin is common to man and woman.
Date: 9/19/2015 10:06:00 AM
Love has been sidestepped in order to satisfy a hurting heart and your acknowledgment and acceptance of this replaces the sheen in the eyes of love and reaches into the heart revealing and then releasing the pain hidden there. Emile.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/19/2015 12:05:00 PM
Hello, Emile. Thank you for taking the time to read and post an insightful comment. I appreciate it. I haven't been up to writing much of late. I hope things change. Hugs...
Date: 9/18/2015 7:04:00 PM
A deep and powerful poem -- the tension crackled with each line . . . ready to spring! How these base emotions drive desire . . . enjoyed this immensely LO. 7
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/19/2015 12:06:00 PM
Thank you, David. I'm glad you came around for a visit. Glad this piece resonated with you. LO thanks you. Hugs
Date: 9/18/2015 6:44:00 PM
You are possessed by a very powerful and ancient Passion, a spirit that inherits the heart of women with a very special creative gift which applies to every facet of life.You will be it's lovely instrument of love conquest, will you be her victim or her accomplice Beloved Poetess...The lust and predation is thickly alive in this fine poem, along with a very sensuous apprehensiveness Eileen...J.A.B.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/19/2015 12:07:00 PM
Thank you, Eagle. I'm glad you understood my piece so well. You have a keen eye....in real life and in poetry. Sedating is a means of fighting for victory...It comes at a price. Hugs
Date: 9/18/2015 4:11:00 PM
I got your concept..and I do believe thle sinful pleasure struggles to win in every.woman including myself. Excellent post.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/19/2015 12:08:00 PM
Yes, my dear....Sinful pleasures are at work always...It is up to a person to heed the call or not. Thank you for your lovely visit. It is always a pleasure, Charmaine. hugs
Date: 9/18/2015 2:35:00 PM
Catchy and tempting, making the reader beg for more...so well penned. I enjoyed!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/19/2015 12:09:00 PM
I'm glad you liked my Sedated Sin poem, Njeri. Thanks for stopping by.....Hugs
Date: 9/17/2015 6:12:00 PM
Oh, and welcome back
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/17/2015 11:14:00 PM
Thank you, Mr Seal.
Date: 9/17/2015 6:11:00 PM
So good you had to name it twice eh my little Desert Orchid. I've no idea why but this guy seems almost reluctant lol. Doesn't realise how lucky he is. Another superwoman write from you. Take care, Richard
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Date: 9/20/2015 7:22:00 PM
Oh I read it perfectly correctly my little Desert Orchid. The reluctance is entirely with the man, as it is he that is stemming the flow of the womans fantasy. Hers is just frustration that her inner longings are kept at bay.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/17/2015 11:15:00 PM
My dear Mr Seal....Please read the footnote I have added at the end of the poem, for you have not read it right. Thanks for the visit and the lovely compliment, though. I'm ever grateful...
Date: 9/17/2015 4:35:00 PM
Wow!!!! That is the way it's suppose to be a woman to take control with her magical allurement. Well the men can too once in awhile. Hugs Eve
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/17/2015 11:17:00 PM
Thanks for your visit, Eve. Always nice to have you here on my page, dear. Hugs

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