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Secret Lover - Four Lines Contest

Her bloodstained wedding dress clings to her shaking body
On the floor his corpse lies in a pool of congealing blood
He’d revealed his secret, he was in love with the best man
It was meant to be the happiest day of their lives…

Jan Allison

Contest – four lines
Sponsor - Broken Wings
09~20~15

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Amor Otong Date: 10/11/2015 3:26:00 AM HELLO Jan, CONGRATULATIONS! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/11/2015 3:37:00 AM Thanks Amor:-) hugs Jan xx

Michael Tor Date: 9/28/2015 11:08:00 PM Jan one of my favorites. Nice win! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/29/2015 1:39:00 AM Thanks Michael... I do worry about my muse sometimes lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Skat A Date: 9/28/2015 9:55:00 PM Jan, Congratulations on your Four Line win. Forever **SKAT** Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/29/2015 1:39:00 AM Thanks Skat:-) hugs Jan xx

Seren Roberts Date: 9/28/2015 7:23:00 AM wow Jan what a brilliant four lined poem. he could have told her at a different time and not spoilt the cake rofl.......Seren Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/28/2015 7:31:00 AM LOL Seren - I found the pic after I wrote the poem I had to post it lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Tammy Reams Date: 9/27/2015 9:22:00 AM Congrats on your win Jan! Sad but also funny! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/27/2015 11:33:00 AM Thanks Tammy I agree with your comment lol and I simply had to post the picture when I found it - it is so apt :-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 9/26/2015 5:33:00 PM I am sure somewhere, sometime this scenario may have happened, depending on the bride's stability. Great lines for this contest and a deserving win! Congrats my friend! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2015 5:35:00 PM Thanks Connie I do worry about my muse sometimes she shocks me with what she comes out with so deep and dark but I have to go with the flow! :-) hugs jan xx

Charmaine Chircop Date: 9/26/2015 4:30:00 PM Ohhh gee .... tragic and so well written. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2015 4:47:00 PM Thanks Charma thankfully its fiction:-) hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 9/24/2015 11:38:00 PM Wonderful expressions Jan! Congrats on big win! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2015 4:46:00 PM Thanks Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless Date: 9/24/2015 9:01:00 PM Jan this is quite a twist on the theme. Congrats on the win with this darkly deserving entry Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2015 4:46:00 PM Thanks John:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 9/24/2015 3:26:00 PM Jan, I remember really liking this one earlier, so I am glad to see it in the top of her list. Big congrats for your great win. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2015 4:45:00 PM I surprise myself with my dark writes Andrea) hugs jan xx

Kp Nunez Date: 9/24/2015 12:36:00 PM Oh...another on a wedding day...and getting darker! Congrats Jan! hugs! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2015 4:44:00 PM Thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Viv Wigley Date: 9/23/2015 11:22:00 PM Well done, Jan, I bet that one kept the wedding photographer busy..... Viv x Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2015 4:44:00 PM LOl Mr Viv:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y. Date: 9/23/2015 9:29:00 PM Jan , when I read this piece, I knew you had yourself a winner. Congratulations on your "dark" win it was deserved:-)Alexis Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2015 4:44:00 PM Thanks Alexis I do worry about my must sometimes lol:-) hugs jan xx

Casarah Nance Date: 9/23/2015 6:42:00 PM ahhh...dark and murderous...perfect! Grats on your win!! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2015 4:43:00 PM Thanks Cas I've not been active for a few days am just trying to catch up:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper Date: 9/23/2015 5:53:00 PM Jan, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2015 4:42:00 PM Thanks Eve sorry for the delay in replying not been active on soup recently:-) hugs Jan xx

James Inman Date: 9/23/2015 10:53:00 AM Devastating and heart breaking. (Sounds kind of like the way my wife would have reacted, HaHa) Wonderful write, Jan. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2015 4:41:00 PM LOl thanks James sorry for the delay in replying not been active on soup lately:-( hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus Date: 9/21/2015 10:44:00 AM Impressive and dark lines with a 'striking' final twist. So sorry for the ruined wedding-dress! gl in the contest. Hugs // paul Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/21/2015 5:10:00 PM Think the ruined dress would be the least of her worries lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/21/2015 4:18:00 AM Tragic Jan, and like how you do your twist in the end, hugs~~~Olive ELoisa =`) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/21/2015 5:10:00 PM Thanks so much Olive:-) hugs Jan xx

Shadow Hamilton Date: 9/20/2015 4:19:00 PM end of a dream Jan gl in contest hugs 7 Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/20/2015 4:22:00 PM Definitely not something you would want to hear!:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 9/20/2015 2:49:00 PM Well, at least he was not in love with her bridesmaid. hahaha. Geeez, killing him off for what is only natural to him! Good one for the contest, Jan. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/20/2015 2:53:00 PM He got his just desserts as in the picture lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Gary Bateman Date: 9/20/2015 2:45:00 PM WOW Jan!! He shouldn't have reveal his secret!! This one should be a wonderfully received entry in Broken Wings' "Four Lines" contest. Best of Luck!! And a most obvious "7" -- of course!! Some secrets are best kept secret in this instance. Cheers and Best!! Gary Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/20/2015 3:49:00 PM We celebrate 25 years next June:-) hugs jan xx Gary Bateman Date: 9/20/2015 3:11:00 PM Hello Jan!! Your words have that prophetic intensity for sure. And what you say on amplifies further the age-old proverb. Ingrid and I, I'm happy to say, are just about at our 25th year of marriage. No Secrets!! HA!! HA!! Cheer and Best . . . Gary Jan Allison Date: 9/20/2015 2:48:00 PM I agree Gary - hell hath no fury like a woman scorned springs to mind!:-) hugs jan xx

Eileen Manassian Date: 9/20/2015 2:41:00 PM OH MY!!! You sure know how to shock, don't you??? Yikes! Good one, Jan. Good luck, sweetie. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/20/2015 2:44:00 PM Thanks Eileen I really don't know where this stuff comes from it shocks me I can write so deep and dark at times ... but my muse takes over and I have no control:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. Date: 9/20/2015 2:34:00 PM Jan, I enjoyed this dark write.Good luck in the contest:-)Alexis Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/20/2015 2:39:00 PM not sure if it is dark enough Alexis but it is what my muse came up with:-( hugs Jan xx