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Her bloodstained wedding dress clings to her shaking body On the floor his corpse lies in a pool of congealing blood He’d revealed his secret, he was in love with the best man It was meant to be the happiest day of their lives… Jan Allison Contest – four lines Sponsor - Broken Wings 09~20~15

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Amor Otong

Date: 10/11/2015 3:26:00 AM

HELLO Jan, CONGRATULATIONS!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2015 3:37:00 AM

Thanks Amor:-) hugs Jan xx

Michael Tor

Date: 9/28/2015 11:08:00 PM

Jan one of my favorites. Nice win!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/29/2015 1:39:00 AM

Thanks Michael... I do worry about my muse sometimes lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Skat A

Date: 9/28/2015 9:55:00 PM

Jan, Congratulations on your Four Line win. Forever **SKAT**

Jan Allison
Date: 9/29/2015 1:39:00 AM

Thanks Skat:-) hugs Jan xx

Seren Roberts

Date: 9/28/2015 7:23:00 AM

wow Jan what a brilliant four lined poem. he could have told her at a different time and not spoilt the cake rofl.......Seren

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2015 7:31:00 AM

LOL Seren - I found the pic after I wrote the poem I had to post it lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Tammy Reams

Date: 9/27/2015 9:22:00 AM

Congrats on your win Jan! Sad but also funny!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/27/2015 11:33:00 AM

Thanks Tammy I agree with your comment lol and I simply had to post the picture when I found it - it is so apt :-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/26/2015 5:33:00 PM

I am sure somewhere, sometime this scenario may have happened, depending on the bride's stability. Great lines for this contest and a deserving win! Congrats my friend!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/26/2015 5:35:00 PM

Thanks Connie I do worry about my muse sometimes she shocks me with what she comes out with so deep and dark but I have to go with the flow! :-) hugs jan xx

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 9/26/2015 4:30:00 PM

Ohhh gee .... tragic and so well written.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/26/2015 4:47:00 PM

Thanks Charma thankfully its fiction:-) hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 9/24/2015 11:38:00 PM

Wonderful expressions Jan! Congrats on big win!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/26/2015 4:46:00 PM

Thanks Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless

Date: 9/24/2015 9:01:00 PM

Jan this is quite a twist on the theme. Congrats on the win with this darkly deserving entry

Jan Allison
Date: 9/26/2015 4:46:00 PM

Thanks John:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/24/2015 3:26:00 PM

Jan, I remember really liking this one earlier, so I am glad to see it in the top of her list. Big congrats for your great win.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/26/2015 4:45:00 PM

I surprise myself with my dark writes Andrea) hugs jan xx

Kp Nunez

Date: 9/24/2015 12:36:00 PM

Oh...another on a wedding day...and getting darker! Congrats Jan! hugs!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/26/2015 4:44:00 PM

Thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Viv Wigley

Date: 9/23/2015 11:22:00 PM

Well done, Jan, I bet that one kept the wedding photographer busy..... Viv x

Jan Allison
Date: 9/26/2015 4:44:00 PM

LOl Mr Viv:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 9/23/2015 9:29:00 PM

Jan , when I read this piece, I knew you had yourself a winner. Congratulations on your "dark" win it was deserved:-)Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 9/26/2015 4:44:00 PM

Thanks Alexis I do worry about my must sometimes lol:-) hugs jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 9/23/2015 6:42:00 PM

ahhh...dark and murderous...perfect! Grats on your win!!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/26/2015 4:43:00 PM

Thanks Cas I've not been active for a few days am just trying to catch up:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 9/23/2015 5:53:00 PM

Jan, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 9/26/2015 4:42:00 PM

Thanks Eve sorry for the delay in replying not been active on soup recently:-) hugs Jan xx

James Inman

Date: 9/23/2015 10:53:00 AM

Devastating and heart breaking. (Sounds kind of like the way my wife would have reacted, HaHa) Wonderful write, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/26/2015 4:41:00 PM

LOl thanks James sorry for the delay in replying not been active on soup lately:-( hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 9/21/2015 10:44:00 AM

Impressive and dark lines with a 'striking' final twist. So sorry for the ruined wedding-dress! gl in the contest. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 9/21/2015 5:10:00 PM

Think the ruined dress would be the least of her worries lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 9/21/2015 4:18:00 AM

Tragic Jan, and like how you do your twist in the end, hugs~~~Olive ELoisa =`)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/21/2015 5:10:00 PM

Thanks so much Olive:-) hugs Jan xx

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 9/20/2015 4:19:00 PM

end of a dream Jan gl in contest hugs 7

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2015 4:22:00 PM

Definitely not something you would want to hear!:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/20/2015 2:49:00 PM

Well, at least he was not in love with her bridesmaid. hahaha. Geeez, killing him off for what is only natural to him! Good one for the contest, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2015 2:53:00 PM

He got his just desserts as in the picture lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Gary Bateman

Date: 9/20/2015 2:45:00 PM

WOW Jan!! He shouldn't have reveal his secret!! This one should be a wonderfully received entry in Broken Wings' "Four Lines" contest. Best of Luck!! And a most obvious "7" -- of course!! Some secrets are best kept secret in this instance. Cheers and Best!! Gary

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2015 3:49:00 PM

We celebrate 25 years next June:-) hugs jan xx

Gary Bateman
Date: 9/20/2015 3:11:00 PM

Hello Jan!! Your words have that prophetic intensity for sure. And what you say on amplifies further the age-old proverb. Ingrid and I, I'm happy to say, are just about at our 25th year of marriage. No Secrets!! HA!! HA!! Cheer and Best . . . Gary

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2015 2:48:00 PM

I agree Gary - hell hath no fury like a woman scorned springs to mind!:-) hugs jan xx

Eileen Manassian

Date: 9/20/2015 2:41:00 PM

OH MY!!! You sure know how to shock, don't you??? Yikes! Good one, Jan. Good luck, sweetie.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2015 2:44:00 PM

Thanks Eileen I really don't know where this stuff comes from it shocks me I can write so deep and dark at times ... but my muse takes over and I have no control:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 9/20/2015 2:34:00 PM

Jan, I enjoyed this dark write.Good luck in the contest:-)Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2015 2:39:00 PM

not sure if it is dark enough Alexis but it is what my muse came up with:-( hugs Jan xx