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Second Blow

just when smile reaches eyes again... this anvil weighs down heart-- drowning soul **sept. 28, 2010

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Wilma Neels

Date: 10/10/2010 11:23:00 AM

A soul that has taken flight again. Strength in weakness embraced, beautiful no longer looking at it as a sad write ;) *hugs*

Sharon Tideswell

Date: 10/9/2010 4:13:00 PM

Keep that beautiful soul of yours afloat Nikko. Your senryu touched my heart, sending love & hugs your way ~ Sharon

Matthew Anish

Date: 10/8/2010 7:41:00 PM

Doesn't often work out that way? Hope you are having a nice autumn - the last gasp untit the "anvil" of winter comes in. Yours Matthew Anish

Thvia Shetley

Date: 10/8/2010 4:19:00 PM

very lovely poem to read Nikko!

Kevin Semeniuk

Date: 10/4/2010 8:31:00 PM

wow there is a wonderful beauty in this. i really like this, nice work!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/3/2010 1:45:00 PM

Kinda sad...I hope that you haven't had a recent love loss in your life..Thanks for stopping by my blog and commenting and the promise to pray....Sara

Gert W. Knop

Date: 10/1/2010 3:23:00 PM

Hey Nikko, ako halos isang masamang feeleing kapag nakita ko na hindi ko isulat sa iyo para sa ganap ng isang oras! But I was too busy with many other things, so please forgive me! Awesome Senryus you've penned here! I hope you had a good time and wish you a nice Sunday and start into the new week! Thank you for you always kind comments! Ingat!...Gert:)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/1/2010 11:45:00 AM

Nikko ,thinking about you! Thanks for trying to be positive and responding to people's blogs here at Soup. LUv, Andrea

De R

Date: 10/1/2010 2:19:00 AM

Liked your playfulness with the structure here, too. This is a great Senryu, nikko. You are a talented poet indeed. Emilia

Lynette Chachere

Date: 9/28/2010 5:02:00 PM

a smile that makes your heart melt(: now thats what i call a smile!<33 ~Always&Forever Lynette

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/28/2010 10:14:00 AM

oh! my Nikko, this is very sad, i have a thing in my life that follows me and it is that anvil.. Gosh,, i wish it was a pillow, and not the anvil. I feel for every true meaning of a happy smile, there is an anvil ready to be droped. sometimes i think God does not like me at all..LOL. and i'm to old to think that, but it happens a lot. my heart always drowned in sorrow. Enjoyed your poem. I do pray for that anvil to be lifted. From your soal and mine. Have a nice one,..p.d.

Charles Henderson

Date: 9/27/2010 11:21:00 PM

better time acomin Nikko. keep the faith. Charles

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/27/2010 8:53:00 PM

Oh, Nikko, you are writing from your soul, dear girl! Twice in your family. I am so sorry. LUv, Andrea

Kris Walters

Date: 9/27/2010 1:54:00 PM

Very nicely done. The title is perfect for this brief little poem with big impact! Thanks for a lovely comment, Nikko :) I appreciate it! hugs, Kris

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/27/2010 1:51:00 PM

Very soft and touchy flow of words, Nikko

Diane Locksley

Date: 9/27/2010 1:07:00 PM

Don't let him do it again, Nikko. Protect your kind heart from people who want to hurt you. A very touching poem. Diane

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 9/27/2010 11:31:00 AM

They say "the first cut is the deepest," but that's not always the case. It's easy to forgive the first offense, but when someone causes pain repeatedly, thoughts of forgiveness are harder to grasp. Amazingly powerful double senryu with quite a moving important message. Love, Carolyn

Francine Roberts

Date: 9/27/2010 9:44:00 AM

good one Nikko, very sorrowful

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 9/27/2010 9:31:00 AM

Touching write my dear... always Michael