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Written in one breath, no good for the contest intended (Sea Glass) without a decent edit but containing something, maybe... *-*-*-*-*-*-*-*
It's too obvious to be sharp Though no one can deny the beauty of being pierced A delicate moment Only to be savoured accidentally of course Something to react to and get over Yet with all edges polished away Reflecting nothing Lacking in all memory of before There's a sweetness No, sweetness isn't the word Purity perhaps The need of both heart and eyes to notice Quietness and time for contemplation Of an object in your hand Transferred to pocket Reached for when comfort is required Gazed into when the mystery of the world needs fathoming You don't cut me then And I turn those unclear memories over in my hands and head Unable to decipher harm from comfort My hands bearing no scars Though if my vision glazes over I see them So abundant they create a polished surface

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Date: 7/6/2024 12:45:00 PM
It doesn't need an edit D D. but needs to be read in the way it was written for the best effect - In one breath! Your writing style just intrigues me. It's as if you paint abstract paintings with your lines. You are a brave and brilliant poet that manages to push the boundaries each time. Cheers - Gary
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Date: 7/7/2024 4:59:00 AM
Ooh thanks Gary! I entered poetry with little concept of the rules and although I can follow them should the urge strike, I prefer allowing thoughts to pour out. I adore this comment, thank you for taking the time with my words :)
Date: 7/5/2024 12:56:00 PM
I followed the twists of intrigue and and emerged in a realm of dissolved fears. I like the metaphor. This is a superb poem.
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Date: 7/7/2024 4:57:00 AM
Thank you Hilda, I appreciate your kind words and visit x

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