Scars

It was the first time I was nervous you were scared (it's not the same) your blonde bowl cut made me laugh. my scars made you wonder. It was the second time I was unsure you were in love (it's not the same) your hair was brown and I remember blonde my scars were fading but more appeared. your technicolor smile kept me alive. It was the third time I was in love you were unsure (it's not the same) your hair was black and I remember blonde my scars were permanent you worried I worried that I was losing you. It was the last time I was done you were done (it's the same) I don't see you I see a different person no goofy blonde bowl cut no technicolor smile keeping me alive just scars.

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Skat A

Date: 5/23/2014 9:31:00 PM

Hi Jay, Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. I will get much delight, in reading and in time become familiar with your verse. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile, others passed, when I first join the soup 4 years ago. I wish you the best when it comes to your compositions. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/23/2014 1:54:00 PM

- Warm welcome to PoetrySoup, Jay :) - I choose your first great written poem - Nice to meet you :) - Hope you will be satisfied with our "soup family" - we are many .. but has plenty of room for you too- PoetrySoup Rule1: Be kind and keep PoetrySoup a haven. PoetrySoup is a drama free zone(Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours.) Thank you posted your words and thoughts here, I want to come back to read more another day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

James Hyler

Date: 5/23/2014 11:31:00 AM

Thank you for sharing :)

Deborah Shiells

Date: 5/23/2014 11:11:00 AM

Hi Jay, Nice to meet you. Very good contrast and imagery. Loved this write!! Thanks for sharing this with us. Love and Peace, Deborah

Eric Schojan

Date: 5/22/2014 7:56:00 PM

Jay, really enjoyed this write!!! love the way you structured it, it has a certain flow while still expressing this subtle story of the span of a relationship, and the changes and the things overlooked, I could go on and on but I'll just say keep writing man, I really enjoyed it, WELCOME TO POETRY SOUP!!!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/22/2014 7:55:00 PM

Jay, i like this poem, it's an awesome first poem, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you enjoy the community, as I did when I first join, March 2010. You'll find many friendly poets, who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I want to be the first to invite you on over, to the contest page. I OFFER MY CONTEST, in hopes it inspires you to write another poem. I'm looking forward to following you and your poetry ha-ha a special pair:) here's the link to the contest page. http://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry_contests/ <---~Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@

Faye Gibson

Date: 5/22/2014 5:24:00 PM

Hello, Jay. Welcome to Poetry Soup. I have found a wonderful community of supportive people here. Comment on the poems of other members and most will return the favor. Hope you find much enjoyment.

Diane Christian

Date: 5/22/2014 4:30:00 PM

a nice poem, its a funny feeling of been unsure if some one loves us or not words are easy to say but harder to show the feeling or emotion to show its real, im close to some one and i bite my lip not to say anything but when ever we talking they never make eye contact witch makes me wonder, as when we first met they were always looking at me, its a funny old world, but i don't make a scene over it as we all different.