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For Crystol Wood's Same Poem, Different Form, Poetry Contest.

 

 

Theme: Vulnerability Saviour Complex - Free Verse In the absence of love, a childhood is shaped by the stars, but when black smoke is the only impression in the light, sorrows peel in soundless motions - slow burning. When fate is sealed with a goodbye, in an 'all I never asked for' moment, the weight of fear appears as a niggling nightmare in our personal book of dreams, so we drift into an abyss of discarded destinies - untamed we roam into a wildfire of lost souls. I'm a silent knight unable to suppress this wandering muse, so I portray my darkness through rosewater ink, which flows like a scarlet oasis of waterfalls, merging into sapphire oceans of poetic heartbeats. I blame my past for this saviour complex, but battling demons has become my beautiful undoing. Ugliness of sugar coated words, hidden behind metaphorical daggers, has engraved scars with unhealed wounds, leading me upon a path resenting sealed emotions. When nostalgic rain sings in sea shell whispers, I wish I could hold the sun in my arms, to stop me from pouring in melancholic bleeding moonlight, but my beloved's eyes resemble dandelion reveries, reminding me of a fragrant bouquet of memories, pleading to personify her in petrichor perfumed poems. Her scent resurrects my muse to life.. She always says: "Never mind the moon, it's only a reminder of forgotten midnight promises." How her heart is an island where my waves will eternally kiss her shores. A sanctuary for my inner child to forever build sandcastles." My destiny leads to the end of a distant rainbow, which rests upon the ivory sands of her treasure - where internal flames become calm. Saviour Complex - Rhyme Once a dark soul abandoned me on paths of sorrow, broken vows left me without hope for tomorrow. To hide from such severe addictions, I hid my pain behind silent inflictions. Invisible wounds did not bleed in crimson, but my ruptured spirit felt confined in a prison. Romance is not just a spoken language. A broken heart can't heal with just a bandage. Affectionate actions and self sacrifice, should come naturally, not with an unfair price. Real passion is not only lust and desire, simply two souls connecting to inspire. Unconditional love is the foundation of trust, learning to forgive in actions deemed unjust. A gentleman is always thoughtful and genuine, yearning for a beloved, elegantly feminine. After all these years, it's still my last dream. The only wish which would make me feel supreme. When burdened I'll rest my head upon her chest, listening to her heartbeat, I'll know I'm blessed. Her soft hands shall stroke my heavy head lightly. A heavenly sanctuary embracing me tightly. With sensual red lips, tender, rosy and calm, I yearn to caress, soothing like a healing balm. Without her life is monotonous and mundane, but in her glory, I've decided to trust again. Yet she remains a dream far in the distance. One I crave for her with daily persistence. Beloveds hoping to merge without resistance. Blending like air, breathing love into existence

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Date: 7/7/2024 9:13:00 AM
I'm not surprised at this electrifying craft, it is usual for you, Silent. Such creativity is at its peak. The yearning and pain get lost in the beautiful metaphors, alliterations and lovely well-combined words. You have described a love so great it could make someone want it despite the sorrow and hurts. I particularly love the free verse, the rhyme is amazing too. "but when black smoke is the only impression in the light, sorrows peel in soundless motions. This is so powerful and it goes-
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Date: 7/7/2024 9:16:00 AM
Beyond romantic expression. This poem is a mix for me. It is one of love, yearning and unending healing. A constant want for love and chance to set free the inner child. And also a tale to one who makes the heart beat with or without a sight. "How her heart is an island where my waves will eternally kiss her shores."
Date: 7/6/2024 11:49:00 AM
I'm always in awe... your words silence any doubt that you couldn't write your way out of any sorrow or heartache. Because your words withstand the storms, the passions, the unknown... I'm always in awe. God bless you dear friend. I hope you win. Love, Gina
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Date: 7/6/2024 9:39:00 AM
I agree with Victor! Words fail to describe you as a unique talent! It is a pleasure to read your work!
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Date: 7/6/2024 1:00:00 AM
It is so pleasant to read your poems. You managed to turn a free verse into rhyme. That shows your talent as one of the best poets in the soup. Best for a win.
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Date: 7/5/2024 7:50:00 PM
Well done! It is fun to see how a rhyme can can lift a poem in a different way. There really is something about the lyrical feel on the tongue. Heartfelt!
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Date: 7/5/2024 2:58:00 PM
My friend, wow This beautiful poem explores love, grief, desire, and redemption. And explores relational issues, psychological turmoil, and recovery. Your strong imagery and metaphorical vocabulary reflect this profound feeling. Scent and touch help readers grasp the sensations. Personification, simile, and metaphor make a vivid story. The poem's melodious, flowing rhythm and combination of long and short lines convey movement and passion.
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Date: 7/5/2024 11:34:00 AM
Breathtaking work, Silent...so deep and full of vulnerbaility...."childhood of stars" wow
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Date: 7/5/2024 6:08:00 AM
Dear Silent One, When I read your poem this morning, I felt that I was on a journey from heartbreak and despair to hope, faith, and renewed love. Several lines stood out to me. “Invisible wounds did not bleed in Crimson” is such a powerful statement. I wanted you to know that I enjoyed every line of the journey! – Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 7/4/2024 2:46:00 PM
wow again you made me go Silent. Pun intended lol, your words capture the imagination and make it better than reality in itself. (if that is possible) I think you were born a poet S, never lose sight of your dreams, and know that to trust again is to live again. :) Fav *
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Date: 7/4/2024 11:03:00 AM
Gosh your poems make me feel so much dear silent one! I am in awe captivated and in love with love! Haha! Well savior complex youv described so well here, in the free verse especially , how youv expressed longing and how you fine pleasure in sharing healing light with the one you love, is beyond breathtaking and left me just dreaming! And the rhyme there is so profound and so concisely articulated with not just yearning but with so much wisdom! I especially love the last lines! Ah what a sight it would be to see love entwined and sharing a moment, forever blending like air, breathing love into existence! I love always how you rhyme! You do it so effortlessly! I love everything about these two poems, the metaphors and alliterations and poetic nature of your words really blow me away everytime! Best wishes!
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Date: 7/4/2024 10:04:00 AM
Such a beautiful poem of love, loss, hope of restoration. Is the desired one mother or lover? Perhaps you wish to keep it ambiguous. Sigh. I should write one for dear Crystol but I'm feeling a bit stressed of late. Hope your weekend is happy!
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Silent One
Date: 7/4/2024 11:09:00 AM
Love comes in all forms, I feel this cover all bases.. You should write, release the stress... Have a great weekend..

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