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Saved In the Nick of Time

The thunder of guns echoed around the thick wood, Dying soldiers trembled with pain, death understood. I remember looking at the nightly bright stars. Trying to find a freedom path, despite our scars. Saved our poor lives as we crossed to the other side Of the river. Another place now they could ride Up to the mountain and hopefully search for food. A fire kindled to warm us in a better mood.

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Date: 4/23/2022 10:56:00 AM
I like this slice of war life, Victor. Good to find a poem of yours I somehow missed seeing.
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Date: 2/22/2022 9:53:00 PM
Well written Victor. War is a terrible thing and I pray for those soldiers every chance I get to, and for their families they had to leave behind...
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Date: 2/21/2022 11:37:00 PM
Victor, perfect painting of survival in tragedy. This is so emotive.
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Date: 2/19/2022 4:59:00 PM
Victor, well done, full of emotions and battle scars!
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Date: 2/18/2022 10:17:00 AM
Oh war and death... so sad... and glad that you escaped death... well penned couplets Victor... God bless... ~ Ani
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Date: 2/17/2022 9:36:00 PM
Ashamed so many have died in the name of war.
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Date: 2/17/2022 12:12:00 PM
In your skillfully written poem, the weary soldiers move on from the agonies of war to a comforting fire and the hope of sustenance. Their narrow escape was dramatic and satisfying. I enjoyed this absorbing work, Victor.
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Date: 2/17/2022 2:42:00 AM
Goo Morning Victor - Hi. War is always hard and never good. What soldiers endure for the good of all. Your words and message are clear. Bless all veterans of any country. Have a day filled with peace and much more. Love and Blessings always.
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Date: 2/16/2022 3:09:00 PM
Must be surreal…dealing with war and the interlude.
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Date: 2/16/2022 10:28:00 AM
Victor, I felt the intensity and weight of the battle, as well as the hope that the needs of sustenance and tiredness might be met with care. Given that this is a fictitious story, I hope everything turns out okay. Despite the fact that your metaphors are vivid.
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Date: 2/16/2022 7:59:00 AM
Great imagery and descriptive scenes, Victor. I felt the emotion and burden of battle, and the hope that the needs of hunger and weariness would be met with well put. Enjoyed your poem. Write On! Bill
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Date: 2/16/2022 6:28:00 AM
Sad episode of war--very well depicted Victor.
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Date: 2/16/2022 6:14:00 AM
Grate war poem Victor, i hope you are well..
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Date: 2/16/2022 5:54:00 AM
At least you could save your lives, Victor, a great story of pain and freedom found, though temporary:)
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Date: 2/16/2022 4:12:00 AM
So by crossing to the other side of the river , you narrowly escaped from Death's claws ! An engrossing story, Victor !
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