Tears

a dirge of tears flood rivers of sad sorrows flow as I moan in grief lullabies are left unsung my babe has flown to heaven Written on 9/30/2016

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Carol B.

Date: 11/9/2016 10:31:00 PM

So very sad! Absolutely heart wrenching.

Madhivanan Ganesan

Date: 11/8/2016 8:36:00 AM

I could feel the pain and you have chosen right words to express it. Amazing stuff :)

Arthur Vaso

Date: 11/5/2016 11:40:00 PM

I actually came to read this again, even so so sad, this poem melts the spirit as you read it.

Laura Leiser
Date: 11/5/2016 11:56:00 PM

Thanks, Arthur. I haven't written much lately, so your kids be words are encouraging...

Arthur Vaso

Date: 10/15/2016 11:18:00 PM

You had me to tears, that last line was unexpected, well done.

Jan Allison

Date: 10/12/2016 11:33:00 AM

such a sad sad tanka Laura many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

David Smith

Date: 10/3/2016 6:22:00 AM

Excellent. Complete package. Good luck for contest. David in NZ

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/3/2016 5:23:00 PM

Thanks, David :)

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 10/2/2016 12:15:00 PM

Ahhhhh! This is so painful. Well penned........A.M.

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/2/2016 10:29:00 PM

Thank you, Afolabi

Sunita U.D Palawon

Date: 10/2/2016 11:40:00 AM

Convey so much pain in few words. Touching. Well done.

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/2/2016 11:55:00 AM

Thanks, Sunita :)

Moon Flower

Date: 10/2/2016 5:13:00 AM

Nicely penned Tanka, Laura. Congrats! ;)

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/2/2016 8:12:00 AM

Thank you, Moom Flower :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/1/2016 7:01:00 PM

A good SAD one, Laura. Probably the saddest thing that can happen to a parent. Congrats for your win.

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/1/2016 11:39:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea :)

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/1/2016 4:09:00 PM

A very deep lament, Laura, so painfully imaged in your well written Tanka. Congratulations on your fine placement, and I am so happy to see it is fictional! Hugs, Sandra

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/1/2016 11:39:00 PM

Thank you, Sandra :)

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/1/2016 1:56:00 PM

On topic and still a gorgeous tanka!

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/1/2016 11:38:00 PM

Thank you, Maurice :)

Darren White

Date: 10/1/2016 11:21:00 AM

Congratulations Laura, I am glad it is fictional!

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/1/2016 11:38:00 PM

Thank you, Daren..

Daniel Turner

Date: 10/1/2016 10:15:00 AM

I have lost a child and you can't possibly imagine the grief that lives with you for the rest of your life, always asking, "what if?" Very sad, Laura.

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/1/2016 11:36:00 PM

I'm so sorry you have had to experience such a hard loss, Daniel. Thank you for commenting.

Joseph May

Date: 10/1/2016 5:50:00 AM

Glad it's fictional...written with a flow of sadness..

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/1/2016 6:05:00 AM

Thank you, Joseph, for your comments:)

Caycay Jennings

Date: 9/30/2016 6:39:00 PM

OH, not only death, but a baby. I'm hoping this isn't real life because there is nothing sadder. How can I call this a winner if true? If not, it is definitely a lament of laments and the words stabbed me with pain - a good thing, again, if fiction. Ohhhh to hard so comment, Laura ... CayCay

Laura Leiser
Date: 9/30/2016 9:50:00 PM

This poem is fictional, CayCay. Not to worry..thanks for your comments and I'm glad I got the lament across!

Laura Leiser
Date: 9/30/2016 9:48:00 PM

Not to worry, CayCay...this is not true! Thank you for your generous comments. This sorrowful poem is for the lament tanka contest:)