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Sad dark brown eyes I wish I could take away your pain Bring a smile to your face once again Thought we’d always be together Now I know nothing lasts forever Gentle tears freely fall I’ve tried to help, but every day You push me further and further away Thought we’d always be together Now I know nothing lasts forever You’ve been holding back I can’t break down the walls Now you don’t answer my calls Thought we’d always be together Now I know nothing lasts forever Things will never be as they were before I’ve tried and tried there’s no denying But you keep your distance; I know you’re lying Thought we’d always be together Now I know nothing lasts forever Once we were so in love Used to share our hopes and dreams Now my worlds in tatters or so it seems Thought we’d always be together Now I know nothing lasts forever I can't take no more deception I’m gonna have to walk away Hope you find happiness anyway Thought we’d always be together Now I know nothing lasts forever 27th August 2015

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James Fraser

Date: 11/21/2015 2:30:00 PM

Powerful reality written so splendidly Jan. It's as if you've lived your words ~~ James ~~ xx

Jan Allison
Date: 11/21/2015 6:17:00 PM

In a way James I think I was writing from a reality :-( but I am past worrying now and moving on:-) hugs Jan xx

David Mcsorley

Date: 9/29/2015 9:35:00 AM

Beautiful poem Jan, it shows all the stages of breaking up to the inevitable final release. I noticed you based this on Don't It Make My Brown Eye's Blue, that used to be one of my favourite songs in the sixties. Dave :)x

Jan Allison
Date: 9/29/2015 9:57:00 AM

Thanks for the lovely comment David I often get inspired by listening to music:-)Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 8/29/2015 2:39:00 PM

Sad emotions! A relationship coming to an end, not through lack of trying, but the writing is there on the wall. Heartfelt lyrics. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 8/29/2015 6:33:00 PM

Thanks Paul i have written 2 lyrics recently both emotional breaking up poems - this one was inspired by listening to Chrystal Gale's song Don't it make my brown eyes blue:-) hugs jan xx

Neva Romaine

Date: 8/28/2015 3:21:00 PM

Hey Jan, stopped by for a visit. This is a heartwrenching piece from you. Deeply expressed emotion and yet..the willingness to let go. Beautifully written. Be Blessed, Neva

Jan Allison
Date: 8/28/2015 3:41:00 PM

Thanks so much Neva it is a fiction write from me but I guess others can relate:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 8/27/2015 11:49:00 PM

WoW! Jan these are universal lyrics. These lyrics put to wax become hits because we all can relate to them. Great poem! :-)Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 8/28/2015 3:38:00 PM

So glad you are back Alexis - I had a break in June but I need to write. I am back with my writing partner Darren as Jadazzle United so now have twice the fun:-) there are always people here to support you Alexis - keep writing and stay strong:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.
Date: 8/28/2015 12:04:00 AM

Either way I hope you get less stressful and these lyrics rock! :-)Alexis P.S. I don't know if you noticed but I didn't post for awhile because I was down. But I got rejuvenated becsuse I was encouraged by people here on the soup and I'm flying high. Have a good night my soup friend:-)Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 8/27/2015 11:52:00 PM

Thanks Alexis - I've written 2 sad lyrics recently but I am not particularly sad - stressed but life issues do get in the way lol but the poems are not about my life - I have to go with the flow of my muse:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/27/2015 10:44:00 PM

gosh, Jan, you are doing some sad ones recently. I know that summer ending makes me wax melancholy and I know you are stressed these days. It is a very nice poem and sounds like the lyrics to a song. I don't even have time to write for anything except contests. I'm amazed you do poems every day and some not for contests! You are a wizard!!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/27/2015 11:42:00 PM

I'll be glad when the year is over on an emotional level - clearing mum's house is so tough but I'm not tearful just stressed with so much to do lol- its like I've lost them both but shes very much still with us:-) hugs Jan xx

Kp Nunez

Date: 8/27/2015 9:23:00 PM

Oh, this is just so sad and flowing with deep emotion, Jan. The repetition adds to the desperation and realization. Glad to see this is pure fiction! PS.About earlier, I hope you keep things to a manageable level. Your health is much more important, that's what I realized last week. Take care. hugs!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/27/2015 11:40:00 PM

Got a few emotional issues especially clearing the house - its like I've lost mum - guess I am finding it hard:-( hugs jan xx

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 8/27/2015 7:54:00 PM

you wax lyrically Jan with this pen hugs 7

Jan Allison
Date: 8/27/2015 11:39:00 PM

Thanks Shadow:-) lovely to see you back:-) hugs Jan xxxx

Tim Smith

Date: 8/27/2015 6:18:00 PM

Excellent piece Jan. Many times I have had that fleeting love feeling.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/27/2015 6:26:00 PM

Thanks Tim - just trying my hand at a few lyrics:-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Martin

Date: 8/27/2015 6:00:00 PM

Very nice. Looks like a song.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/27/2015 6:03:00 PM

I've written 2 sad lyrics recently but I am not sad lol - just go with the flow of my muse:-) hugs Jan xx

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 8/27/2015 4:55:00 PM

heartfelt pen jan one i can relate to wishing you a blessed week pal filled with light

Jan Allison
Date: 8/27/2015 5:09:00 PM

Am out of my comfort zone writing sad lyrics but I have to go with the flow of my muse:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/27/2015 1:38:00 PM

gut-wrenching, jan... i hope this is not a personal experience.. beautiful!.. huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 8/27/2015 1:57:00 PM

Pure fiction on my part Nette I have penned 2 sad lyrics in the last 3 days I have no control over my muse:-) hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 8/27/2015 9:21:00 AM

A lesson in life that we are taught many times but we have never learned, dear Jan, expressed through verses of regret and grandeur!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/27/2015 1:56:00 PM

Thanks for the lovely comment my friend:-) hugs jan xx

Michael Tor

Date: 8/27/2015 9:19:00 AM

Sad eyes for a little while. In time, comes a happy smile. Relationships are not well when one disappoints the other. The heart fairy needs to wave her magic wand and mend those broken hearts.. Nicely written.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/27/2015 1:55:00 PM

Thanks Michael:-) hugs Jan xx

Marion Mwangi

Date: 8/27/2015 8:58:00 AM

i feel the person in this poem though sad she/he is strong. able to walk away

Jan Allison
Date: 8/27/2015 1:55:00 PM

Thanks Marion - yes able to walk away no matter hard the circumstances sometimes we have to let go:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Schneiter

Date: 8/27/2015 8:17:00 AM

Premium quality--that's what you get with this poem. The flow takes the reader stanza-by-stanza to the poem's core message, "nothing lasts forever." Jan has clearly crafted another jewel. I love it. Hugs and hugs and hugs.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/27/2015 1:54:00 PM

Thanks Paul thankfully these sad lyrics are pure fiction on my part my muse has a mind of her own I have no control:-) hugs Jan xx

Ian Jones

Date: 8/27/2015 8:11:00 AM

I like the way you ask and ask but get no reply, so true to reality. We can handle most things but it's the uncertainty of unanswered questions which drives me nuts to the point where I put it out of it's misery and make the decision, wrong or right. End of rant. Kind regards, Ian

Jan Allison
Date: 8/27/2015 1:53:00 PM

My muse takes me on an emotional journey - 2 sad lyrics but not a reflection on my life but i have to go with the flow of my pen:-) hugs jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 8/27/2015 7:59:00 AM

The repetition in this is perfect for the enhancement of the poem... It is a challenge to move on, go in a different direction...Good write Jan. hugsxx

Jan Allison
Date: 8/27/2015 8:04:00 AM

I've written a couple of sad lyrics in the past 2 days - no reflection on how I feel I have to go with the flow of my muse:-) hugs Jan xx