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Sad Dizain

A taste of sandness Why have you come to this lonely old place? What compelled you to take the long journey? Try not to hide behind that pretend face. When you left you were in such a hurry. Sit down and eat from this bowl of curry. The meal I've prepared it has no sweetness. It's been flavoured by years of bitterness Eat every morsel, absorb my heart's pain! Maybe then I can offer forgiveness. Yet nothing will ever remove this stain! Written May 20th, 2016

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Skat A

Date: 7/12/2016 1:42:00 AM

Richard, good write. Skat

Angie Thomas

Date: 6/3/2016 9:41:00 AM

A poignant poem about the untimely ending of a relationship, Richard... I really like the depth of these words. I also love the effortless nature of the rhyme scheme. Hugs, Angie

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/3/2016 10:23:00 AM

Thanks Angie

Sandra Haight

Date: 5/24/2016 7:08:00 PM

Very powerful, sad Dizain, Richard. Congratulations on your placement in the contest. Sandra

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/25/2016 6:37:00 PM

Thanks Sandra.

Timothy Hicks

Date: 5/24/2016 12:05:00 PM

The perspective you chose to write this from was powerful ... up close and personal. Not just sadness, but anger, too. A poignant and gripping dizain, Richard.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/25/2016 6:38:00 PM

Thanks Timothy, I haven't had much practice with this form.

Red Fiery

Date: 5/23/2016 10:37:00 PM

I remember last winter someone came back to meet me ...i felt exactly what you have penned here...brilliant poem...:)A7 and hugs to u~ Red~ and yes nothing will ever remove this stain...

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/24/2016 7:08:00 AM

I'm sorry that you relate to this piece. Thanks for commenting Red. Hugs Rick.

Mama Bear

Date: 5/22/2016 9:18:00 PM

Congratulations on the placement Thanks for being here this weekend It would have not been as much fun as with you here. Glad you are home safe. Love Mom

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/23/2016 8:04:00 AM

I had a blast mom. I love you too!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/21/2016 5:39:00 PM

Oh, I really like this. Just like you are there talking right to the person as you prepare their plate. (maybe add in some poison? JK!!) and also, congrats for the win.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/22/2016 11:27:00 AM

Ha ha, remind me not to get you upset.;0) thanks for the visit Andrea.

Harry Horsman

Date: 5/21/2016 3:46:00 PM

It;s a while since i've been on soup for any length of time, glad i read this Richard, hope to read more soon.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/22/2016 11:26:00 AM

Hi Harry, your visits are always welcome.

Brian Davey

Date: 5/21/2016 4:33:00 AM

Congrats on your placement Richard love the line "flavoured by years of bitterness"

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/21/2016 5:09:00 AM

Thanks Brian.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/20/2016 5:58:00 PM

This is a sad piece, Richard. Very sad. It is very well written, and I see congrats are in order. :) I am going to be posting a blog in a few minutes. You might want to give it a read. It has news!!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/20/2016 6:55:00 PM

On my way to check it out.;0)

Lu Loo

Date: 5/20/2016 1:26:00 PM

Richard, "Nothing will ever remove this stain", a wonderful last line, thank you for being a part of my contest, and congrats on your placement :)-luloo

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/21/2016 6:10:00 AM

Thanks for choosing this one.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/20/2016 12:57:00 PM

very thought-provoking dizain, rich... i can feel your pain.. huggs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/21/2016 6:12:00 AM

Fortunately it is imagined and not real. Hugs back to you Nette.

Tim Smith

Date: 5/20/2016 10:11:00 AM

Conjures up feelings that someone abandoned you and after many years trying to return to your life...lovely poem

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/21/2016 6:11:00 AM

You got it Tim. Thanks for the visit.