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Dan was having a passionate affair told his wife he’s going to leave her She said she’d never give him a divorce…. he thwacked her with a meat cleaver He told their kids mum had gone away but in truth it was a heinous lie He’d buried her in the allotment poor Sue did not deserve to die Years flew by and she’d not been seen in time her body would decompose Her violent husband tends the plot marking her grave with a rambling rose. Writing Challenge - Decay - Poetry Contest Sponsored by Constance La France 09/22/20/

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Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/30/2020 5:44:00 AM

- Congratulations on your win, Jan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Eve Roper

Date: 9/29/2020 9:18:00 PM

Freighting write, Jan, I am glad my hubby didn't do that. Great story; congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve

Sigrid Ermine

Date: 9/29/2020 3:01:00 PM

Oh, Jan, I absolutely adore this!! (is it rotten to admit)!? - Very funny and thought provoking poem. Unfortunately, scenario has actually happened in the world... Neat writing, to tell readers this story with beaut brevity. Awesome entry, - Congratulations on your Top Win.!!

Bobby May

Date: 9/29/2020 1:56:00 PM

Figures JAN, you only beat me by one point though, I will catch up to you someday!! Great Job Sis!!

Constance La France

Date: 9/29/2020 1:44:00 PM

Jan, congratulations on your win in my Decay Writing Challenge with this excellent poem, a FAV for me, great image to go with your poem too _Constance

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 9/29/2020 11:23:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a story/write and picture. Part 2, will the roses ever tell????? Enjoy your win and day...........

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 9/29/2020 9:49:00 AM

Oh my gosh Jan! I laughed out loud! Perfect take on decay! Congratulations on the win! Linda

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 9/24/2020 8:30:00 AM

I loved the prancy-dancy-jazzy cadence of this macabre poem!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2020 5:54:00 AM

thanks caren:-) hugs jan xx

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 9/24/2020 6:44:00 AM

Sounds like the series BLACKLIST, its going on forever, but very exciting - Poor Sue, shame her Children never knew, for her husband would have got what was due. Brilliant write and clever plot for the contest - best of luck Jan. Blessings and hugs, Jennifer.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/28/2020 5:55:00 AM

thanks Jennifer:-) hugs jan xx

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 9/23/2020 6:46:00 AM

Wow! A sure winner. This is a true inspiration for the theme of the contest. You are always so clever! Love and prayers sent your way, God bless...

Jan Allison
Date: 9/24/2020 8:59:00 AM

Thanks Regina:-) hugs Jan xx

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/23/2020 1:06:00 AM

Sounds like some Netflix serial. Strange I have a short story similar. Still I like dark poems. ~~

Jan Allison
Date: 9/24/2020 8:59:00 AM

perhaps we have both been watching too much tv Victor lol:-) hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 9/22/2020 11:35:00 PM

Quite a dark verse Jan, scumbags like that you often hear about. Good luck in the contest, hope you're well, I'm still here but its coming to a close. Hope I. O. M. still clear. I hear Boris is shutting pubs at ten, just go out an hour earlier lol. Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 9/23/2020 10:15:00 AM

yeah all good here only 4 cases where folk have come back with it from going to uk/ further afield but we are 'assured' it is contained and not in the wider community - but in time it will happen. stay safe enjoy the last few days of your hols:-) hugs jan xx

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 9/22/2020 6:17:00 PM

Hello Gershon …similar to: a little birdie flying high, dropped a message from the sky, and as I wiped it from my eye, I thanked the Lord that cows don’t fly. I got a real giggle out of your limerick Rico - Lindsay

Jan Allison
Date: 9/23/2020 10:13:00 AM

i think this was meant for Gershon:-) hugs jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/22/2020 4:06:00 PM

He thwacked her with a meat cleaver...lol! You went straight for the jugular. Great last line, Jan!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/22/2020 8:42:00 PM

I get drawn into dark writing too...it happens.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/22/2020 4:10:00 PM

thanks Kim it is somewhat dark for me but I had fun writing for the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Tania Kitchin

Date: 9/22/2020 3:42:00 PM

Love your dark poem Jan! hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 9/22/2020 3:48:00 PM

thanks Tania it is a little dark for me lol I never know what my muse will come up with:-) hugs Jan xx

Joe Dimino

Date: 9/22/2020 3:36:00 PM

And the thorns find their way to his heart, hopefully. Well written, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/22/2020 3:48:00 PM

thanks Joe:-) hugs Jan xx

Jenna Logan

Date: 9/22/2020 2:54:00 PM

And he had the gall to plant a rose bush over her??? I hope its thorns rip his fingers wide open when he tends the plot. He should've tended to his wife. Sorry, lol. Adultery is a dirty word.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/22/2020 3:09:00 PM

thanks Jenna this is a dark poem for me:-) hugs jan xx

M. L. Kiser

Date: 9/22/2020 2:03:00 PM

Ooh, he is a dark one; well penned, good luck in the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/22/2020 2:05:00 PM

thanks ML:-) hugs Jan xx

John Watt

Date: 9/22/2020 1:59:00 PM

Wow, the dark side of the Jan. This sure describes a rotten relationship and a rotten man. Best wishes in the decay contest, my friend. Hugs ~ John

John Watt
Date: 9/22/2020 2:06:00 PM

It's what makes you such a wonderful and diverse poet.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/22/2020 2:04:00 PM

I do like to surprise with a dark poem from time to time, i never know what my muse will come up with lol:-) hugs jan xx

Rico Leffanta

Date: 9/22/2020 12:18:00 PM

Dan could have more happily found a new lover for his wife! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison
Date: 9/22/2020 12:26:00 PM

yeah lol:-) not like me to write dark lol:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/22/2020 12:10:00 PM

- Yes, he was really rotten ... and really heartless ... hope he gets his punishment in hell - Good luck in the contest, Jan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/22/2020 12:15:00 PM

I don't usually go so deep and dark with my poems but i couldn;t resist for this contest:-) hugs Jan xx