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Road to Over

Unwrapping both a blessing and a curse, extracts	
Love’s essence painting souls and framing them abstracts.
 
Too brazen into Jung’s collective we were when,
Our fists were punching holes up through the floors of Heaven.
  
We knew the fools from those among the wise who cherish,
But that denying harlot Fate, had to be selfish.
   
Now under burden of this heavy and cruel loss,
Pain’s pressing pitch to blacken the abandoned cross.

Among the broken pieces that will fall this way.
The mausoleums that will be cap stoned today.
  
In paper coffins lay the letters of their last,
To reconcile this day, or others from the past.
 
Possessions that become departing gifts to friends.
A rotting, cold corpse they will be, when passed again.

Those stalking zombies out of reach and courting hate
Caressing defense of an unforgiving state.
 
Must they forget the lover’s pages bled in ink.
Escape in substance high, and falling drunk in drink.

As desperation quickly fills their beds with drones.
The futile chains attempts, when weakness is alone.

To look again to see the gift from ending’s split.
A testimony of a truth embracing it.
 
For what this life has taken, in return, it gave.
Event Horizons welcome us beyond the grave.

Some morsels kept out of the ruins of our dreams.
A loving Christ’s hands will to heal and stitching seams.

His wisdom and his patience walking me still slower.
His ways are guiding me, in these, the years to over.

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Iambic Hexameter
(Five ending iambs were substituted with amphibrachs)
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Original Contest: Structured forms - Iambic verse - Sketch a fictitious character II
Sponsor: Giorgio A. V.
Poem posted: 01.07.15
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Current Contest: Any Couplet You Wish
Sponsor: Laura Loo

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Date: 4/27/2016 11:12:00 PM
Rob, Congrats on your fine couplet win. LINDA
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Date: 4/15/2016 2:26:00 PM
Very beautifully written and so inspirational, Rob. Congratulations on your placement in the Couplets contest. Sandra
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Date: 4/15/2016 9:07:00 AM
Rob, very impressive form.. "Among the broken pieces that will fall this way. The mausoleums that will be cap stoned today. In paper coffins lay the letters of their last, To reconcile this day, or others from the past."....Two of my fav stanza's...congrats on your placement and thank you for being a part of my contest...:)-luloo
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Date: 4/15/2016 9:57:00 AM
Thank you Laura for my placement and your comment.
Date: 2/8/2015 2:09:00 PM
Wow! Rob, this is such a brilliant piece deserving of its big win! Congratulations, my friend! Pandita.
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Date: 1/22/2015 11:36:00 PM
I just loved that phrase used in your title and how you applied it at the end of this poem. It is a great idea that you came up with for this inspirational poem. oh and I see congrats are in order too!!
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Date: 1/19/2015 6:26:00 PM
Rob, congratulations on your dynamic win!
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Date: 1/18/2015 11:07:00 AM
Rob, congratulations on our nice win for this amazing, deep poem Sandra
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Date: 1/17/2015 11:08:00 PM
This is amazing,congrats on the win Rob...huggs
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Date: 1/17/2015 7:52:00 PM
Rob, Congratulations on your win. Love Linda
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Date: 1/8/2015 5:36:00 AM
Hi Eileen. The fictitious character isn't really anyone specific in this poem, though we can see parts of ourselves in it. It is someone undefined, but one who we can relate to. It is not Christ, though he walked a road too, but he was led by his Father. This character faced choices after a loss on the way to acceptance and understanding. I tried to have two overs here, one with the temporal loss and then the 'over' to the spiritual world via Event Horizons.
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Date: 1/7/2015 3:07:00 PM
Your poem puzzles me....Just because of the Fictitious character bit. Who is the fictitious character? We are? Did I get it right? Surely it isn't Christ. Yes... you have much here to ponder on. I once spoke to my church group on "The Other Side". We are content here only because we forget what's it's like on the other side. Thanks for the reminders, Rob. Your lines...many of them...could apply to me! :( He speaks to us in many ways! ;) Hugs
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