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River Walk Contest Take 4

the morning sun rays touch the small warm hands in mine the river fish thrill Maurice Yvonne August 26 2014 River Walk Haiku Contest

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/2/2015 7:48:00 PM

I try, I don't think I'm kind... The only thing I do is follow my heart and mind... LOL.. and that is why I love cookies... LINDA

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/2/2015 7:05:00 PM

Doesn't everyone...LOL..Just Kidding, have a nice day... LINDA

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 4/2/2015 7:27:00 PM

Yes everybody does love you Linda and for good reason you are an amazing person. Intelligent, talented, beautiful inside and out, kind and giving!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/21/2015 5:15:00 PM

:):):) LINDA

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 3/21/2015 10:10:00 PM

Love You!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/21/2015 5:14:00 PM

MAURICE, thank you for the nice reply... PD

Len Gasun

Date: 9/8/2014 8:54:00 AM

This is also a very beautiful haiku my dear friend Maurice. You did it very well. I love it! Many warm congratulations as well on your win. Hugs and cheers! love lots, Leonora

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/8/2014 11:59:00 AM

thank you for your kind words and support.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/7/2014 5:18:00 AM

- Well deserved .... 2nd place Maurice !!! - Congratulations on your winning poem in the contest: "River Walk" - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/8/2014 12:01:00 PM

thank you as always.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/6/2014 10:40:00 PM

just saw that message you had left me a while back (I rarely know those are left for me). I doubt grammar should scare you when you write the way you did in that confessions contest. Give yourself a break. and this one, sir, deserved a big win. Congratulations.

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/6/2014 10:57:00 PM

thank you Andrea. I really like it when tongue lash me. I bet you are or were a teacher at some point.

Tim Smith

Date: 9/6/2014 8:58:00 PM

Congrats Maurice...woohoo

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/6/2014 9:04:00 PM

thanks Tim.

Faye Gibson

Date: 9/6/2014 9:10:00 AM

Well, now you have it down pat, Maurice; we will expect a lot from you. ;-) Congrats.

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/6/2014 9:16:00 AM

thank you for such a wonderful comment.

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 9/6/2014 9:09:00 AM

Congrats to you ( and Deb) ..these little suckers are hard to write . Im smiling for you.. BG

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/6/2014 9:14:00 AM

thank you Barbara i desperately needed a smile today.

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 9/6/2014 8:44:00 AM

Congratulations Maurice. We all need help at times to learn something new so well done with or without help.

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/6/2014 8:57:00 AM

That is so kind of you Brenda. What a lovely thing to say. Thank You.

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 9/6/2014 7:46:00 AM

Congratulations, Maurice, on your great win! Well deserved with this lovely haiku! Pandita

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/6/2014 8:07:00 AM

Thank You Pandita. Debbie Guzzi deserves the credit for this win. She helped me write this Haiku.

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/6/2014 7:39:00 AM

THANK YOU FOR THE CONGRATULATIONS. DEBBIE GUZZI DESERVES THE PRAISE. DEBBIE HELPED ME A LOT WITH THIS HAIKU. BLESS HER HEART.

Jan Allison

Date: 9/6/2014 6:50:00 AM

Dropping back with my congratulations Maurice:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Jan Allison
Date: 9/6/2014 11:01:00 AM

I had help from Elly when I wrote a poem called 'blossom' she helped me turn it into my first haiku. There are so many wonderful people here who inspire and help us :-) Hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/6/2014 8:05:00 AM

Thank you Jan. Debbie Guzzi deserves the credit for this write. She helped me write this haiku.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/6/2014 5:02:00 AM

Brilliant take on the theme, congrats, Maurice

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/6/2014 8:03:00 AM

Debbie Guzzi helped me write this and deserves all the praise. Thank You Dr. Mehta.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/5/2014 11:14:00 PM

I love it, and this has the perfect fun imagery... . Congratulations, on an awesome River Walk, Win:):):) Enjoy the smiles, and my blog, You're a "River Legend" if you'd like or have time. Tagggers beware....LOL..... Always & Forever ~LINDA~

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/6/2014 7:58:00 AM

I HAD A GREAT TAG. BUT THEN I LOST MY TWO TOP POEMS. THEY WERE DELETED COMMENTS AND ALL BECAUSE OF A GLITCH. WITH IT MY TAG WENT.

Casarah Nance

Date: 9/5/2014 11:11:00 PM

Ahh I knew this was different, but still great, and the proof is in the placement, well done my friend. :)

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/6/2014 7:55:00 AM

Debbie Guzzi deserves the praise. She helped me write this haiku. A LOT.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/3/2014 11:10:00 PM

This reminds me of the river walk, down San Antonio Texas... Living in the real world... Anyways, I'm tapping your shoulder, tag... tag

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/6/2014 7:35:00 AM

thank you Linda, for giving me the opportunity to say tag your it. as an aside thank you for choosing my haiku. Debbie Guzzie through the goodness of heart helped me A LOT with this one.

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 8/26/2014 7:53:00 PM

good haiku Maurice gl in contest ty for visiting my page hugs

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 8/26/2014 8:27:00 PM

i enjoyed your work. thank you.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 8/26/2014 7:33:00 PM

YES! MUCH more haiku-like, MUCH better... you have the idea now, you could make the lines join grammatically by doing this [the morning suns rays][touch the small warm hand in mine] the VERB touch unites the two lines grammatically & in case the judge wants 5/7/5 you have it [it is not that you can't write haiku 5/7/5 but that modern contemporary haiku are most often not done this way - the content rules can still be maintained in 5/7/5

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/6/2014 7:52:00 AM

Congratulations Debbie on your win. This one is yours. God Bless your heart.

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 8/26/2014 8:26:00 PM

yes that makes all the sense in the world. thank you. i will work on my haiku skills. i see there is a lot more than meets the eye. again thank you Debbie. lots of love.

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 8/26/2014 7:33:00 PM

XXXXOOO so glad you took the advice in the spirit it is being offered LIGHT & Love

Casarah Nance

Date: 8/26/2014 6:16:00 PM

Grab a fishing pole and a beer and enjoy the day, :) cool haiku, good luck! :)

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 8/26/2014 7:02:00 PM

we are going to try an overhaul. i'll se you on the rewrite i hope. thank you for being so supportive.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/26/2014 6:11:00 PM

ohhh, I like the way you inserted the swimming fish into this one! Neat!

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 8/26/2014 7:01:00 PM

that is probably the only line i will keep. i now understand how to extract some depth out of haiku. unfortunately there is some grammar stuff involved. grammar is to me what spiders are to a lot of people. love you for being so kind.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 8/26/2014 5:14:00 PM

line three is excellent - now stay sensory & objective in lines 1 & 2 which must be gramatically & conceptually connected ;) Light & Love

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 8/26/2014 6:52:00 PM

that makes a lot of sense Debbie. "sensory and objective" got you. conceptually connected light and love i understood to be a choice. Do not the rules say hope light love all three or choose one? Now here comes the really hard part "grammatically connected" since i don't think you are referring to my mothers mother you probably mean one of those english rules thing. i'll try but i am not going to make any promises. thank you so much for your help i really appreciate it. love maurice

Jan Allison

Date: 8/26/2014 4:06:00 PM

Love the unique take on the theme Maurice:-) Good luck with the contest. hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 8/26/2014 6:57:00 PM

yup. it is wrong. got to redo. love you for being so sweet. thank you.