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River Stream Elixir

"The streams are my veins."
Rivers, rather than flowing around us, deliver vitality to every cell and fiber in the body. They are the life-giving arteries and veins of the earth. By Poet
Sarcastic, keen vision makes me shiver, Some light gills merge to shape a grand river. My shattered lungs could burst the concrete chains, Each song stirs the vent veins of the liver. All gentlest sounds conspire to clear my veins, Your love flows like the Nile through Egypt's plains. But can I ignore your love in my face? Don't miss wetting the dense stems with your mains. Wasting flowers could divest her of grace, My soul was relieved by the tune's embrace. Allow viewing realms from the onset. She fascinates every time with the lace. No applied falseness but switches my mindset, I am just leery about this concept. Dull words of fear, half peace, and half sorrow, A halt would be marked; I lack an outset. They say you were all over the bellow, Croon in a shrewd tone, and you will follow. Once you head me going, I'm harsh to sway, I've seen creeks full of life rushing 'morrow. A calm stream bears lithe life into the clay, Reap peace and calm, at sea, don't jump astray. All the sounds are causing my veins to stream, No mountains or freeways prompt me to stray. My veins run through my mind like magic-dream, It's glum, but I note them in my bloodstream. Your love spares me from being powerless, When you wake up, it won't stop meaning realms.
Written: August 2nd, 2022 Let Your Muse Be Inspired - R Form Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Constance La France 1ST Place Contest Winner Used: HMS.COM// 10 syllables per line Rhyme: AAbA-BBcB-CCdC...
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Date: 9/6/2022 11:14:00 PM
Sotto, excellent Rubaiyat poem beautifully penned and congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge - Let Your Muse Be Inspired, I love your image and your music, God Bless ~
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Date: 9/2/2022 11:46:00 PM
Congratulations on your well deserved first place win in Constance's contest, dear friend .
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Date: 9/2/2022 6:49:00 AM
Congratulations on this great winner. Way to go. I really like the musical accompaniment. Sara
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Date: 8/7/2022 8:02:00 AM
Even with the depth of meaning and metaphors, your poetry flows so smoothly. The power of nature in all of creation is shown through this fine work my friend. You need no luck with this entry, it should win or place very high. Difficult form, well written and meaningful. Kudos to you and your poetry, Lasaad. Bill
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Date: 8/4/2022 8:32:00 AM
Reads like a good contender to me for the contest. I enjoyed The Blue Danube Waltz. It was a nice accompaniment to your work. Thanks for your visit to my page. Sara
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Date: 8/4/2022 1:43:00 AM
A very intelligent poem. Wishing you all the best in the contest.
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Date: 8/3/2022 11:48:00 PM
"Your love flows like the Nile through Egypt's plains. But can I ignore your love in my face? " Love these lines ! Your creativity is at its best with the difficult poetic forms! All the best in the Contest, dear Lasaad !
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Date: 8/3/2022 3:45:00 PM
Amazing how you can write such long poems (with syllable counts) with ease. I know this is not an easy form to execute. Best to you my friend.
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Date: 8/3/2022 2:01:00 PM
Enjoyed reading your contest entry. Way to go. Creative lines penned. Sara
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