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River of Dreams - 2

In river of dreams floating past our histories we drifted along swept up in life mysteries off edge of reality Written 2-28-2016

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Funom Makama

Date: 3/13/2016 11:16:00 AM

Epic, wonderful and outstanding. What a great share!

Rob Carmack

Date: 3/11/2016 10:03:00 AM

Indeed Susan, and that river never ends. I love how it takes back up river, just to bring us down to new courses. I like the effect of this write.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/5/2016 8:19:00 PM

this is wonderful.

Susan Gentry
Date: 3/8/2016 7:25:00 AM

Why thank you, Andrea! I did it in free verse first but was not satisfied with it. Now it seems more okay. :)

Anthony Mark

Date: 3/4/2016 10:31:00 AM

Lovely Tanka Susan, not sure you needed the visual to be honest, you captured the elements with , river, dreams, floating drifting, and swept, ...this write is a lot more Vivid imagery wise than the pic, that on reflection detracts from a finer write....Mark

Susan Gentry
Date: 3/4/2016 5:00:00 PM

I never looked at it that way... Less is best lots of times, can see I should apply that to this sort of thing too. Thank you!

Jan Allison

Date: 3/4/2016 4:39:00 AM

beautiful tanka Susan:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Gentry
Date: 3/4/2016 4:57:00 PM

Thank you, Jan! Hugs :)