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Risque : Reloaded :

useless she goaded his libido eroded feeling outmoded two blue pills locked and loaded you beast ~ payload exploded By David Kavanagh

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Karen Jones

Date: 10/21/2021 12:46:00 PM

lol made me giggle fun read

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/21/2021 1:00:00 PM

Thanks Karen, all the poetesses seem to be enjoying this one, cheers David

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

Date: 10/21/2021 10:59:00 AM

Sublime and sassy lol! Kudos! <<<<<<<<>>>>>>•^^^^^ Plz do read and comment my newest poem too.

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/21/2021 12:18:00 PM

Thank you Zaynab, I appreciate your calling in, Your poem is wonderful cheers David

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 10/21/2021 10:46:00 AM

Hi David, i'll let the boys answer this but what can I say, I read it and had a good laugh. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/21/2021 12:07:00 PM

Heya Jennifer Most boys would never admit using the blue pill, so probably won't get many takers on this one lol, This actually started out as a senryu, but wasn't working so the extra bit the tanka allows worked fine, a bit like oops I've said enough, cheers David

John Lawless

Date: 10/20/2021 5:21:00 AM

...IT'S UP.......IT'S GOOD.......

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/20/2021 6:08:00 AM

Up up and away!